This is really excellent; very well done for writing and posting it!
The piece flowed well, and the story seemed very believable within canon. Indeed, although there had to be some kind of sexual encounter along the way (because this is DD, after all!), I felt the piece itself could also stand as a very satisfying piece of gen fic - it is that nuanced and thoughtful.
Dolores' mental processes rang so very true - you have nailed that particular blend of ambition, cruelly, insecurity and propriety that is hers. The horror elements were well done, too - as was Bellatrix, as a side character.
The piece flowed well, and the story seemed very believable within canon. Indeed, although there had to be some kind of sexual encounter along the way (because this is DD, after all!), I felt the piece itself could also stand as a very satisfying piece of gen fic - it is that nuanced and thoughtful.
Dolores' mental processes rang so very true - you have nailed that particular blend of ambition, cruelly, insecurity and propriety that is hers. The horror elements were well done, too - as was Bellatrix, as a side character.
Super work!
PurpleFluffyCat x