Wow, these are all great! I also like how the titles form a little time-related theme linking them all together.
September First - It's so cool how the train itself is like one big time-release bondage device, keeping Al trapped right where Scorpius wants him. >:D
After Dinner - Oh yessss, this is good. The rhythm of it feels like a glimpse into Harry's secret thoughts, conflicted with the wrongness of it and yet wanting the taboo so badly (Well, who’s a good dog, then? Who’s the best dog?) and the relief at the end of *not* having to think for a minute.
Closed for Lunch - Besides being smoking hot, this is such a keenly observed portrait of Angelina and the twins. I feel I've learned more about them in this short piece than I know of the characters in many much longer fics! Two of them against one of her is a perfectly matched game. I love that, it feels like I know her instantly with this line. The way she doesn’t need to keep track of that anymore, of who has what, who got what when, and how much there is of it. There is enough. This thought is so lovely I gasped out loud!
Before the Exam - Oh, I love what you did with Lavender here. I think sometimes people aren't sure how to write her because we see such an unattractive angle to her in HBP, but this feels much more three-dimensional. You have a knack for capturing characters in a few lines.
Sunday Morning - This might be the best of the five. I'm struggling to put into words how much I like it. Maybe there's nothing more to be said — you've already put so perfectly exactly how much hurting someone, and allowing oneself to be hurt, can mean.
September First - It's so cool how the train itself is like one big time-release bondage device, keeping Al trapped right where Scorpius wants him. >:D
After Dinner - Oh yessss, this is good. The rhythm of it feels like a glimpse into Harry's secret thoughts, conflicted with the wrongness of it and yet wanting the taboo so badly (Well, who’s a good dog, then? Who’s the best dog?) and the relief at the end of *not* having to think for a minute.
Closed for Lunch - Besides being smoking hot, this is such a keenly observed portrait of Angelina and the twins. I feel I've learned more about them in this short piece than I know of the characters in many much longer fics! Two of them against one of her is a perfectly matched game. I love that, it feels like I know her instantly with this line. The way she doesn’t need to keep track of that anymore, of who has what, who got what when, and how much there is of it. There is enough. This thought is so lovely I gasped out loud!
Before the Exam - Oh, I love what you did with Lavender here. I think sometimes people aren't sure how to write her because we see such an unattractive angle to her in HBP, but this feels much more three-dimensional. You have a knack for capturing characters in a few lines.
Sunday Morning - This might be the best of the five. I'm struggling to put into words how much I like it. Maybe there's nothing more to be said — you've already put so perfectly exactly how much hurting someone, and allowing oneself to be hurt, can mean.