Okay, that's just a seriously great opening line. Not just in media smut, but in media intense smut. Nnf.
And then the next few lines contaion some fantastic descriptions. You draw us into the scene literally through Teddy's eyes very deftly with that.
Teddy's cock leaks all over Harry's nice trousers. -- That's a great (hot!) description, but then you make it so much more vivid and dirty with the further description of Harry's clothes and why he's wearing them in the next scene. It seems offhanded, but it's totally brilliant.
I love Teddy's observations and description of Harry. It points out how he's changed since the canon years, yet we can still see teenage Harry within it.
Mrs Weasley makes a mother-hennish clucking sound in her throat. "Harry's always been the one to know what gifts you wanted. You never would tell anyone but him."
Teddy gives her a grin. "Yes, he's always known me better than anyone." He slants his gaze back to Harry. "Like any good father." -- LOL and double LOL!
All of the little interactions between Harry and Teddy that no one else picks up on say so much about their relationship. Then Teddy baiting Harry (yes, very Slytherin, ha!) and Harry sending filthy images in retaliation...! Somehow that's a very Gryffindorish, Harryish sort of thing to do!
Teddy unzips, reaches in and finds his cock. He pulls it free, watching Harry's jaw harden in an attempt to control himself.
and
Harry's eyes roll shut and he groans, dropping his face to the side of Teddy's neck. "God yes." -- Nngh. Kink button...
Teddy's thoughts, describing their relationship are gorgeous. Harry's feelings about it all, which don't and do coincide with Teddy's, the complex jumble of guilt and pain and comfort and warmth and closeness... So masterfully conveyed! The painful-hopeful-sad-sweet final note is just perfect.
And then the next few lines contaion some fantastic descriptions. You draw us into the scene literally through Teddy's eyes very deftly with that.
Teddy's cock leaks all over Harry's nice trousers. -- That's a great (hot!) description, but then you make it so much more vivid and dirty with the further description of Harry's clothes and why he's wearing them in the next scene. It seems offhanded, but it's totally brilliant.
I love Teddy's observations and description of Harry. It points out how he's changed since the canon years, yet we can still see teenage Harry within it.
Mrs Weasley makes a mother-hennish clucking sound in her throat. "Harry's always been the one to know what gifts you wanted. You never would tell anyone but him."
Teddy gives her a grin. "Yes, he's always known me better than anyone." He slants his gaze back to Harry. "Like any good father." -- LOL and double LOL!
All of the little interactions between Harry and Teddy that no one else picks up on say so much about their relationship. Then Teddy baiting Harry (yes, very Slytherin, ha!) and Harry sending filthy images in retaliation...! Somehow that's a very Gryffindorish, Harryish sort of thing to do!
Teddy unzips, reaches in and finds his cock. He pulls it free, watching Harry's jaw harden in an attempt to control himself.
and
Harry's eyes roll shut and he groans, dropping his face to the side of Teddy's neck. "God yes." -- Nngh. Kink button...
Teddy's thoughts, describing their relationship are gorgeous. Harry's feelings about it all, which don't and do coincide with Teddy's, the complex jumble of guilt and pain and comfort and warmth and closeness... So masterfully conveyed! The painful-hopeful-sad-sweet final note is just perfect.