“Well, I suppose I should go and find something to entertain myself with,” says Pansy, tone dry. “Now that you’ve seen the reason we’re here.” -- LOL! I rather think it's Draco who's off to find something to entertain himself with. Or to go grab it, at least. *smirk*
Snagging a brandy from a passing tray, you toss it back, savouring the burn as it goes down your throat. -- Nice little detail with some subtle characterization there.
He kisses like he does everything, with his whole body, his soul -- And that's just such a vivid description, and a character detail that really rings true of Harry.
The weight of his cock on your tongue makes you shiver, and as you take the crown in your mouth and lick the slit, you’re rewarded with a gush of slick bitterness and a twitch of his hips. -- NICE. The whole description is sexy, but it's that twitch of the hips at the end that tips it over into "NNNGH!!" territory. ;)
His smile is lopsided. “So?” He grins. “Can you be quiet?” -- AAAAH, turning it back on him!!! Really, I love the power play throughout this. The way they each steal the upper hand from the other repeatedly, and the fact that it's so natural with them. It's like a choreographed fight.
You shrug. “We’ll see.” -- Aaaand that's Draco-ese for "yes," and Harry knows it. XD
The writing in this is incredibly effective. Not just the second person POV -- which works really well for this -- but the short, sharp, punctuated feel of the thoughts/lines. Something about that crispness strikes me as being very Draco.
Snagging a brandy from a passing tray, you toss it back, savouring the burn as it goes down your throat. -- Nice little detail with some subtle characterization there.
He kisses like he does everything, with his whole body, his soul -- And that's just such a vivid description, and a character detail that really rings true of Harry.
The weight of his cock on your tongue makes you shiver, and as you take the crown in your mouth and lick the slit, you’re rewarded with a gush of slick bitterness and a twitch of his hips. -- NICE. The whole description is sexy, but it's that twitch of the hips at the end that tips it over into "NNNGH!!" territory. ;)
His smile is lopsided. “So?” He grins. “Can you be quiet?” -- AAAAH, turning it back on him!!! Really, I love the power play throughout this. The way they each steal the upper hand from the other repeatedly, and the fact that it's so natural with them. It's like a choreographed fight.
You shrug. “We’ll see.” -- Aaaand that's Draco-ese for "yes," and Harry knows it. XD
The writing in this is incredibly effective. Not just the second person POV -- which works really well for this -- but the short, sharp, punctuated feel of the thoughts/lines. Something about that crispness strikes me as being very Draco.