I read this about a week ago and thought, "Wow!" and yet I was at a loss for words when I tried to comment.
I re-read it today, and I'll try to say more than that incoherent "wow." I love the portrayal of Bella and how she isn't "burdened by anything as inconvenient as a conscience." And the way you described her changing tones of voice, damn. Sirius' internal monologue was also effective. His thoughts pulled me in.
I re-read it today, and I'll try to say more than that incoherent "wow." I love the portrayal of Bella and how she isn't "burdened by anything as inconvenient as a conscience." And the way you described her changing tones of voice, damn. Sirius' internal monologue was also effective. His thoughts pulled me in.