God, Train Tracks, for reals? This was delectable, and for so many reasons other than your truly awesome, sexy, just-shy-of-gruff Harry. For starters, some of my favorite lines:
Tight little fuzzy arse.
Love that description. The image pops in my head.
Not without cock spells.
Ha! This sentence is so bold and tight and to the point. All your sentences are, now that I’m on the subject. None are arbitrary, none are unnecessary, and just to show you how envious I am I will commence in coming up with a third descriptor for my thought: Your writing is so concise! Whee. Yet it’s not without color. It’s just enough (just enough awesome).
And Teddy! He had a bloody personality. I don’t say this lightly; I feel many times next-gen characters (who are in essence original characters) lack that vital something. They are often just agreeable. Or floating there like generic pretty fields to be ploughed (by Harry, which is good, which is good…). My point is your Teddy had substance. He was a smart ass, a clever boy (bordering man), a person with nice moments and snarky moments (a lot of snarky moments), someone with an agenda in life. And had believable reactions to the situations at hand! I just loved this rendition of Teddy. That was my point. ;)
Basically, this was hot. The sex -- the sex went with the story. It wasn’t just there. It needed to be there. Which made it double hot. (But, for true, when Harry started rimming Ted I nearly lost it! It was deeply invigorating for me. ANYWAY.)
Tight little fuzzy arse.
Love that description. The image pops in my head.
Not without cock spells.
Ha! This sentence is so bold and tight and to the point. All your sentences are, now that I’m on the subject. None are arbitrary, none are unnecessary, and just to show you how envious I am I will commence in coming up with a third descriptor for my thought: Your writing is so concise! Whee. Yet it’s not without color. It’s just enough (just enough awesome).
And Teddy! He had a bloody personality. I don’t say this lightly; I feel many times next-gen characters (who are in essence original characters) lack that vital something. They are often just agreeable. Or floating there like generic pretty fields to be ploughed (by Harry, which is good, which is good…). My point is your Teddy had substance. He was a smart ass, a clever boy (bordering man), a person with nice moments and snarky moments (a lot of snarky moments), someone with an agenda in life. And had believable reactions to the situations at hand! I just loved this rendition of Teddy. That was my point. ;)
Basically, this was hot. The sex -- the sex went with the story. It wasn’t just there. It needed to be there. Which made it double hot. (But, for true, when Harry started rimming Ted I nearly lost it! It was deeply invigorating for me. ANYWAY.)
Great job dear. Would read twice.