Oh, wow, this is great! I'm so grateful to you for giving this one a go. The pairing seemed like a natural to me, given the kink, but I realize it's not everyone's cuppa. But you've captured so much of the dynamic I see with these two: Rita's control (even though I'm sure Dolores thinks it's all hers), Dolores's cringe-worthy girly-ness, the eerie nature of the blood kink.
What excellent use you make of color: the red touches are in absolutely the right places, from the quills to their lips to Dolores's bows (of course!) to Rita's perfectly-inhuman fingernails. The lips and nails make them look rather vampire-like, which fits quite well with the way both of them are predators. I love Dolores's vaguely-alarmed expression and the oh-so-dainty touch of her fingers to her skirt (and her well-placed toe /g/). And then there's that perfect hungry, sardonic gleam in Rita's eye -- it's just so well-characterized overall. Plus, the writing looks just as shivery as I would expect.
What excellent use you make of color: the red touches are in absolutely the right places, from the quills to their lips to Dolores's bows (of course!) to Rita's perfectly-inhuman fingernails. The lips and nails make them look rather vampire-like, which fits quite well with the way both of them are predators. I love Dolores's vaguely-alarmed expression and the oh-so-dainty touch of her fingers to her skirt (and her well-placed toe /g/). And then there's that perfect hungry, sardonic gleam in Rita's eye -- it's just so well-characterized overall. Plus, the writing looks just as shivery as I would expect.
Dear Didodikali, thank you!