Oh, oh, ohhhhhhhhhhhh !!!! this fic!! It's .... PERFECT!
*incoherent*
I'd had that prompt on my computer for months, knowing that I wanted to do *something* with it, knowing that it was inside my mind somewhere, but I just couldn't get it out. YOU GOT IT OUT !!!!!! You found it... and, and... coerced it out... and... loved it up a lot and made it into this BEAUTIFUL thing and did about a hundred times better a job writing this than I ever could!
The three segments were perfect, far enough apart that they'd both grown and changed, and the events in between had changed them too. The similarities and differences in the different time frames.... and I love the way the idea of dreams threads its way through the entire story.
In the first one, Remus' yearning is so very palpable and even though we want to just yell at him "Shag each other, dammit!" but the UST is even more delightful, the waiting.... both us and Remus, and the hoping.... and then When my gaze travelled back up to Sirius’ face his eyes were wide open. was like a rifle-shot of silence. I also kinda love that you left it there..... as we're going "noooooo! what happened nexxxxxt!?" but also... we don't know... and that's somehow better :)
And the second, which hurt so much more significantly, because of their trust and distrust, and the times, it's almost like a pregnant pause before such an important event, and knowing what we do now, it makes it even more poignant.
And the third. SO very perfect. My god, I couldn't even... I could never have written the words to make things make sense the way you did, and Sirius, even after Azkaban, still so Sirius, Sirius was never a patient man, and the years have done nothing to change that. and still everything that Remus wants. The sex was scorching, imo, because of all the time wasted, and the need, and the unfff of it all. I want him to be happy, want him to dream good dreams again. <--- this is beautiful....
And then, the end. It ripped me apart a little.... ok, a lot, and I didn't even know I wanted it to do that... yanno?
Also, the way you wait until the end of the fic to anchor us in the 'present' - very subtly done, but I like it.
*incoherent*
I'd had that prompt on my computer for months, knowing that I wanted to do *something* with it, knowing that it was inside my mind somewhere, but I just couldn't get it out. YOU GOT IT OUT !!!!!! You found it... and, and... coerced it out... and... loved it up a lot and made it into this BEAUTIFUL thing and did about a hundred times better a job writing this than I ever could!
The three segments were perfect, far enough apart that they'd both grown and changed, and the events in between had changed them too. The similarities and differences in the different time frames.... and I love the way the idea of dreams threads its way through the entire story.
In the first one, Remus' yearning is so very palpable and even though we want to just yell at him "Shag each other, dammit!" but the UST is even more delightful, the waiting.... both us and Remus, and the hoping....
and then When my gaze travelled back up to Sirius’ face his eyes were wide open. was like a rifle-shot of silence. I also kinda love that you left it there..... as we're going "noooooo! what happened nexxxxxt!?" but also... we don't know... and that's somehow better :)
And the second, which hurt so much more significantly, because of their trust and distrust, and the times, it's almost like a pregnant pause before such an important event, and knowing what we do now, it makes it even more poignant.
And the third. SO very perfect. My god, I couldn't even... I could never have written the words to make things make sense the way you did, and Sirius, even after Azkaban, still so Sirius, Sirius was never a patient man, and the years have done nothing to change that. and still everything that Remus wants. The sex was scorching, imo, because of all the time wasted, and the need, and the unfff of it all. I want him to be happy, want him to dream good dreams again. <--- this is beautiful....
And then, the end. It ripped me apart a little.... ok, a lot, and I didn't even know I wanted it to do that... yanno?
Also, the way you wait until the end of the fic to anchor us in the 'present' - very subtly done, but I like it.
So, yes, it was everything I wanted and more! ♥