Mystery Author, this? Is totally brilliant. The magical dildo and its use that's invasive and penetrating and humiliating in more ways than one is creative genius.
Your characterizations are fantastic. Bellatrix is wonderfully complex, sadistic, and perceptive with more than a hint of madness. And Snape...! You've written him perfectly for that time period. He's somewhere in between the impetuous, wearing-his-heart-on-his-sleeve teenager he was and the cold, controlled adult he's yet to become.
Oh, and love the premature ejaculation bit. 'Cause, well, it's sort of a bizarre personal kink of mine, but also, yes, totally inexperienced Snape? That would so happen to him. LOL
But the best part about this... of course, the ending! Abjlvayfauh! Snape turning the tables on Bella, getting her secrets instead, rattling her...
"Never fuck with a Legilimens," he hissed. "Ducky."
That is where I was cheering and woke up the dog. XD "BAMF" is not a term I ever thought I'd use for Snape, but he totally is here. LMAO And then the queen/pawn metaphor reversing, changing the meaning of the title, Snape becoming the black queen and Bella the pawn that they'll be when all is said and done... Awesome.
Your characterizations are fantastic. Bellatrix is wonderfully complex, sadistic, and perceptive with more than a hint of madness. And Snape...! You've written him perfectly for that time period. He's somewhere in between the impetuous, wearing-his-heart-on-his-sleeve teenager he was and the cold, controlled adult he's yet to become.
Oh, and love the premature ejaculation bit. 'Cause, well, it's sort of a bizarre personal kink of mine, but also, yes, totally inexperienced Snape? That would so happen to him. LOL
But the best part about this... of course, the ending! Abjlvayfauh! Snape turning the tables on Bella, getting her secrets instead, rattling her...
"Never fuck with a Legilimens," he hissed. "Ducky."
That is where I was cheering and woke up the dog. XD "BAMF" is not a term I ever thought I'd use for Snape, but he totally is here. LMAO
And then the queen/pawn metaphor reversing, changing the meaning of the title, Snape becoming the black queen and Bella the pawn that they'll be when all is said and done... Awesome.