Yeah.... I'm still mulling this fic over in my mind this morning...... mmm mm mmmmm.
Shifting povs can be distracting, especially when the same scene is 're-hashed' through both/all of the players (god knows, I've been guilty of that - drives my betas nutz!) but I think that you did it really well. We want a more rounded view of the situation....and the various characters added their own mental flavour to the scenes.
Also... the way that Charlie presses his hand to Draco's stomach both times, steadying him, keeping him there.... phwaaarrr... that's a 'kink' I didn't even know I had... but it's so sexy and commanding and caring and about a hundred other things ;o)
Shifting povs can be distracting, especially when the same scene is 're-hashed' through both/all of the players (god knows, I've been guilty of that - drives my betas nutz!) but I think that you did it really well. We want a more rounded view of the situation....and the various characters added their own mental flavour to the scenes.
Also... the way that Charlie presses his hand to Draco's stomach both times, steadying him, keeping him there.... phwaaarrr... that's a 'kink' I didn't even know I had... but it's so sexy and commanding and caring and about a hundred other things ;o)