This is excellent -- sensitive and clever and imaginative and in beautiful Luna character. I love the relationship you describe between the physical Lovegoods and Alastor, and the imaginary Alastor who becomes Luna's defense and solace is Luna's defense is simply a brilliant stroke.
I also love the way that you tie part of Luna's personality to Alastor's influence -- so plausible, and yet of course I'd never have thought of the connections on my own. That's what good writing does: makes an event seem both inevitable and surprising.
Love this paragraph: She found herself trying to see things the way the eye did. To really focus on people, to see beyond them, beyond their facades and shallow outer workings, to see what was inside. Like Alastor did with her, she tried to make sure she always saw the unseen, paid attention to the ignored. Such a good explanation.
I also love the way that you tie part of Luna's personality to Alastor's influence -- so plausible, and yet of course I'd never have thought of the connections on my own. That's what good writing does: makes an event seem both inevitable and surprising.
Love this paragraph:
She found herself trying to see things the way the eye did. To really focus on people, to see beyond them, beyond their facades and shallow outer workings, to see what was inside. Like Alastor did with her, she tried to make sure she always saw the unseen, paid attention to the ignored.
Such a good explanation.