Oh my gosh, Mystery Author, that was glorious! Just glorious! I love the opening of this so much, it's a perfect depiction of Sirius's anger and frustration. His canon dealings with Snape were usually snide and insulting, on both sides, but the Occlumency incident certainly pushed it to the next level or more. The way you've written it, it's obvious Sirius is enraged for Harry's sake, but he uses it to let out his own need for action and release, both emotional and physical.
The characterization here is spot-on for both characters, and as hot as the whole thing is -- the initial dust up, the violence slanting into breathplay, Snape's unexpected reaction, and Sirius "forcing" Snape to do what he really wants to do -- it's the characterization that makes this so hot. You did a fantastic job with the non-con/dub-con in this piece. I'm firmly of the opinion that Snape would never admit what he really wants, and it's easy to head-canon that he tries to be as insulting and passive-aggressive as possible to get exactly this type of reaction. One thing I especially loved about this is that you noted Sirius used wandless magic as he barges in, but makes a point of keeping Snape away from his own wand. Since Snape is noted to be an accomplished wizard, especially in non-verbal spells, it's fair to assume that if Sirius can do wandless magic, Snape can as well, and if Sirius's advances had truly been unwelcome, he could easily have defended himself.
In short, this piece isn't just amazingly sexy, hot, and chock full of yummy kinks and tropes, it's very smartly written with a sharp eye to character and the nuances of power dynamics. It flows beautifully, too, and it's so rich I can't believe it only came in at 2500 words.
Thank you so much, Mystery Author. It's exactly what I wanted!
The characterization here is spot-on for both characters, and as hot as the whole thing is -- the initial dust up, the violence slanting into breathplay, Snape's unexpected reaction, and Sirius "forcing" Snape to do what he really wants to do -- it's the characterization that makes this so hot. You did a fantastic job with the non-con/dub-con in this piece. I'm firmly of the opinion that Snape would never admit what he really wants, and it's easy to head-canon that he tries to be as insulting and passive-aggressive as possible to get exactly this type of reaction. One thing I especially loved about this is that you noted Sirius used wandless magic as he barges in, but makes a point of keeping Snape away from his own wand. Since Snape is noted to be an accomplished wizard, especially in non-verbal spells, it's fair to assume that if Sirius can do wandless magic, Snape can as well, and if Sirius's advances had truly been unwelcome, he could easily have defended himself.
In short, this piece isn't just amazingly sexy, hot, and chock full of yummy kinks and tropes, it's very smartly written with a sharp eye to character and the nuances of power dynamics. It flows beautifully, too, and it's so rich I can't believe it only came in at 2500 words.
Thank you so much, Mystery Author. It's exactly what I wanted!