Oh my, that's splendid, and the restraint of the last section, after the explicit detail of the first, and the combination of the specific and the analytic in the second, is most effective.
I liked Lucius's prophecy, and that it was "torn, panting and bloody from the seer" – Lucius does things with his whole heart, alas for Severus's desire to investigate coolly. But it does seem to represent elements of the Last Battle, and maybe earlier events in the slow destruction of Tom Riddle.
Congratulations! You write with such intimacy and depth together.
I liked Lucius's prophecy, and that it was "torn, panting and bloody from the seer" – Lucius does things with his whole heart, alas for Severus's desire to investigate coolly. But it does seem to represent elements of the Last Battle, and maybe earlier events in the slow destruction of Tom Riddle.
Congratulations! You write with such intimacy and depth together.