13 December 2010 @ 12:00 am
hohoho fest gift | for [info]graspthethorn  
Title: Roses and Cinnamon
Author: [info]amberbluebell
Recipient: [info]graspthethorn
Character(s)/Pairing(s): Simone/Max
Summary: She closes her eyes as he snakes his arms around her waist. “Let me go,” she objects weakly, but tilts her head obligingly as he dips his down close.
Rating: PG
Warning(s): SIMONE/MAX
Word Count: 560
Author's Notes: Oh, god. Of all the possibilities, it just had to be von Altencest, didn’t it? *facepalm* ONLY FOR YOU, ROSE! <333

Smooches to S for beta-ing. Thank you!





Max snaps to attention when the front door opens. He straightens in his chair and glances at the long-discarded papers on the coffee table - so much for getting any work done tonight – and listens as his mother and Ant—Rafael, he reminds himself again, talk in the hallway. He can’t hear properly – their voices are low – but he feels a childish, burning resentment that they are speaking in Spanish. Simone always enjoys that, Max knows, and he seethes as he pictures Rafael leaning close to her, lips barely brushing her skin as he charms her with it.

He rubs his hand over his eyes, trying to banish the image from his mind, and is glad to hear them bid each other goodnight. One set of footsteps disappears up the stairs, and Max gulps the last of the cognac he’s been nursing all night, getting to his feet as Simone walks into the room. She stops abruptly, surprised to see him, but smiles warmly as she drapes her coat over the back of the sofa. “Maximilian! What are you still doing up?”

Max ignores her question. “You had a good night with Rafael, I take it.” He can’t keep the hint of displeasure out of his voice.

Simone doesn’t seem to notice, and she perches on the arm of the sofa, smiling even wider. She looks for all the world like a schoolgirl, and it makes Max’s insides twist. “Mother.” He interrupts before she can speak.

The smile drops from her face at the sharpness of his tone. She sighs, exasperated. “Oh, not this again, Maximilian! Herr Suarez and I are simply enjoying each other’s company. This jealousy of yours is ridiculous!”

Max softens his expression, and considers his words carefully as he approaches her. “I’m just worried, Mother. After the last few months, and Jenny… I don’t want to see you hurt is all.” He places his empty glass on the mantle, and takes her hands. “Let me take care of you, mama,” he pleads.

Simone strokes her thumb over his fingers and gives him a small, wistful smile. “I know what it is you want, Maximilian, and sometimes I even think, maybe…” She shakes her head, dismissing the notion, and pulls her hands free. “I’m tired,” she says softly, and stands to leave.

She only takes one step away before Max’s hand is on her shoulder, holding her in place. She closes her eyes as he snakes his arms around her waist. “Let me go,” she objects weakly, but tilts her head obligingly as he dips his down close. Her perfume smells like roses and cinnamon, and Max smiles against her neck as he breathes it in.

Simone gives him a moment to savour the embrace, then her hands are on his arms, firmly removing them, and he doesn’t object this time. She turns and gazes up into his face, searching his expression, then strokes her hand against his cheek. “Oh, Maximilian,” she murmurs, “my son. My darling.” The air is thick with things that neither of them will ever say aloud. She stretches up and kisses him softly on the corner of his mouth, then pulls back and walks away. She hesitates in the doorway, just long enough for Max to consider stopping her again and taking her back into his arms, but before he dares, she is gone.
 
 
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geekchick1013: AWZ Inappropriate Touching 2[info]geekchick1013 on December 13th, 2010 05:30 am (UTC)
I can hardly believe I'm saying this about von Altencest, but that was SOOOOOOO lovely! I adore the use of scent... and I can totes imagine Simone smelling like that. Mmmmmm.

but before he dares, she is gone.

I love this so much <33333333333333333333333333333333

FABOO job Mystery Author!
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amyriadfthings[info]amyriadfthings on December 13th, 2010 05:34 am (UTC)
i can only agree with Mel, this was absolutely lovely! what a sweet little piece, but also darkish and alluring and at the end... woo! managed to take my breath away there for a second! not to quote the same line again, but i loved how it sped up to that and left you with it. nnngh. good stuff. well-timed, quick, captivating.
very, very enjoyable! thank you so much, Mystery Author!
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alsha: AWZ: Lars drink[info]alsha on December 13th, 2010 05:44 am (UTC)
What an excellent self-contained little scene. There's so much emotion in there, all of it evoked through small actions and expressions, and the lightest hand with dialogue I've seen in a while. Such a lovely way of showing how the shortest, most transient of emotions not only defines an entire relationship, but also full-stops how hopeless it is. And the scene is probably repeated over and over on a regular basis - so sad. So much in this for so few words - well done, Mystery Author.
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Lilith: awz-greasy max loves his mummy[info]lilithilien on December 13th, 2010 11:08 am (UTC)
I LOVE HOW APPROPRIATE MY ICON IS FOR THIS POST!!!

And I love this story - these scenes between Max and Simone are always so intensely sexualised, and you've captured that so well in this piece. I just *love* jealous!Max waiting up for her, and being so catty because Simone's finally getting some. I only wish there was more! Which I hope you take as a compliment, because in this short piece you've sucked me in so totally. I loved it!
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[info]praderwilli on December 13th, 2010 11:14 am (UTC)
Mystery author, I can't believe you seduced me into reading a Simone/Max fic, as it's not something I would normally read. However, this was really lovely. The use of scent was effective, it was sensual and evocative of the deep unspoken feelings between these two characters.

I really enjoyed your contribution, MA. Thanks for participating. I feel kinda guilty glutting myself on the feast that is HoFest when I didn't even bring my own dish to the table. *hugs*
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[info]graspthethorn on December 13th, 2010 01:05 pm (UTC)
OMG OMG OMG VON ALTENCEST OMG OMG SO HAPPY/EXCITED

BRB, READING~
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[info]graspthethorn on December 13th, 2010 01:10 pm (UTC)
ASFDGDYJTYFBL;HFE;HGSADFKAGYFLSBCHJFALSUDFO;WADUFWSAWUIA;FCA

THIS IS BEAUTIFUL OMG
HANG ON, PROPER COMMENT IN A MO, TOO BUSY FLAILING RN
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Momo: blah blah blah by lilith[info]momogermany on December 13th, 2010 02:19 pm (UTC)
Hey, this is fantastic!

Finally someone who does something interesting with Max, who could have been on the top of my list of favourite characters if TPTB hadn't had it on their minds to use him for baby plots!

Love the dynamics between him and Simone,the jealousy, the unspoken feelings, the wrongness of all this, it had me totally intrigued.

And I very much hope that there will be a sequel to this!
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Christine: braindead[info]spaghettitoes on December 13th, 2010 04:42 pm (UTC)
This is such a concentrated moment, with so much said (& unsaid!) and happening but with such a careful pace.

It creeps my out that Steinkampcest is so easy and there's this tangible line where they stop it but it's so damned thin and fragile. Captured perfectly and so believable.
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[info]graspthethorn on December 13th, 2010 05:21 pm (UTC)
(WHY IS THIS SO LONG OMG I AM SO SORRY I JUST HAVE A LOT OF FEELINGS OKAY)
FIRST OF ALL, I LOVE THIS SO SO MUCH AND I AM SO HAPPY AND OMG <333333333333

Max snaps to attention when the front door opens.
Rose snaps to attention AS THE FIC BEGINS WITH AN EXCITING DYNAMIC OPENING~ OMG WHO IS AT THE DOOR WHAT IS GOING ON WILL THERE BE SEXY BITS
????????????

glances at the long-discarded papers on the coffee table - so much for getting any work done tonight
Okay idk why, but I fucking adore this line. The ~little details~ like that are what make or break fics for me and yeh WELL DONE ~MYSTERY AUTHOR~ (who I totally can tell the identity of btw, hahahahahhhahahha OKAY OKAY MAYBE ONLY 95% CERTAIN BUT STILL. I C U.)
ANYWAY: slightly fidgety procrastinating max = lovely

listens as his mother and Ant—Rafael, he reminds himself again, talk in the hallway.
ASGFSKDGSAUKDSA YES YES YES YESSSS. The little Ant bit is brilliant (LITTLE DETAILS, SEE? SEEEEEE?!) and omg max correcting himself in his own head is hilarious because THAT IS WHAT HE IS LIKE. Lolololol grudgy perfectionist max is perfect and ilu for writing him. SO MUCH.

he feels a childish, burning resentment that they are speaking in Spanish.
Unf, that line. IDK WHY OKAY SO DON'T LOOK AT ME LIKE THAT. It's just so... idk, ~right. Like, the way I've been imagining max feeling but have been unable to word. And lololol burning like it's hot like mexico, rejoice because IT IS HOT. RAFA/MAX/SIMONE OT3. /tangent
But yehhh I always love the way you use your words. This is no exception. (unless you aren't who I think you are, in which case I STILL LOVE THESE WORDS HERE, just ignore the "always" part, (hahah omg I hate this anonymity thing so much)).

he seethes as he pictures Rafael leaning close to her, lips barely brushing her skin as he charms her with it.
UNF UNF UNF MY OVARIES X THIS SENTENCE = OMG DEAD
Seethe is my new favourite word okay and idk JUST THE WAY IT SOUNDS COMPARED WITH THE LPS BARELY ~BRUSHING~ IDK IDK IDK I like the juxtaposition of the two and the way they sound when I say them (because yes, I am reading this aloud). More of that pls. <3

trying to banish the image from his mind
BANISH. BANISH. OMG, WHAT IS THIS. WHY IS THIS SO GOOD. AHGDSHKAGSUK;A

Max gulps the last of the cognac he’s been nursing all night
Little details AS USUAL = love. + the lovely lovely alliteration (nursing + night) = OMG YESSSSS. AND GULP. I LOVE THE WORD GULP. It's so much more than swallowing, it's nervousness and rushing and why are you so weird around your own mother, maximilian?????????? And cognac = genius because cognac makes me feel all earthy and warm, and this fic is doing just the same thing, d'awwwww.

smiles warmly as she drapes her coat over the back of the sofa.
Your adverbs are delicious and ~soothing~ hahaha. JSYK. And ~draping~ shit over shit is always so nice idk why. IT'S NICE TO SEE HER COAT GO SOMEWHERE INSTEAD OF IT JUST BEING TAKEN OFF AND ~DISAPPEARING~ LIKE MAGIC. Little continuity details = proper lush. also okay ngl, her coat being draped over the sofa makes me think of her being draped over the sofa, and okay, that's a lovely mental image haha

“Maximilian! What are you still doing up?”
*RESISTS URGE TO MAKE ERECTION JOKE*
*RESISTS URGE TO MAKE ERECTION JOKE*
*RESISTS URGE TO MAKE ERECTION JOKE*

she perches on the arm of the sofa, smiling even wider. She looks for all the world like a schoolgirl, and it makes Max’s insides twist.
And it makes Rose's insides twist.
FIXED THAT FOR YOU
But omg this is so so wrong because school girl, lololol. I AM A PERV. I AM BLAMING YOU. But omg I don't even know how to say how much I love this bit because ajsfgssjalhlad perches is just the best word ever, like she's a little bird or something. Because (and, omg, this is embarrassing and I can't believe I'm saying it) I've always sort of imagined max as like idk a panther or something. You know, a big dark cat that's all purring and friendly one moment and then fucking RIPPING YOU TO SHREDS the next, right? And now simone's in my head all delicate and birdlike and fucking PERCHING ON THE SOFA and max is all ~growly~ and possessive and ahgsulgfusa RUN SIMONE OR YOU'LL GET EATEN
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[info]graspthethorn on December 13th, 2010 05:23 pm (UTC)
Re: (WHY IS THIS SO LONG OMG I AM SO SORRY I JUST HAVE A LOT OF FEELINGS OKAY)
The smile drops from her face at the sharpness of his tone.
SHARP. AND POINTY.
LIKE HIS PENIS.
(IN MY HEAD THIS COUNTS AS FORESHADOWING AND THEREFORE IS OF NOTE, HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA)

Max softens his expression, and considers his words carefully as he approaches her.
Carefully approaching her like you do with a wild bird, see see, I'm not going mad, it all links together. SEE. Also lol, max's ~soft~ expression. I AM A SUCKER FOR VULNERABLE!BASTARDS AND THAT IS WHAT THIS IS, ISN'T IT. O GOD. I LOVE IT. I NEVER WANT IT TO END~

He places his empty glass on the mantle, and takes her hands. “Let me take care of you, mama,” he pleads.
Getting rid of his empty glass = yay, little continuity details! I LOVE YOU FOR REMEMBERING HE WAS STILL HOLDING HIS GLASS BECAUSE I HADN'T FORGOTTEN IT. ALL I COULD THINK OF WAS HIM SQUEEZING IT IN LIKE IDK JEALOUS!ANGER (JEALANGER? IDK) OR WHATEVER AND OMG I THOUGHT IT WAS GONNA SMASH FROM THE ~FORCE OF HIS LOVE~ HAHAHAHA IDK.
And unf, the taking of the hands. I love it. So so muh. LET ME TAKE CARE OF YOU, MAMA. MAMA. I LOVE IT WHEN HE CALLS HER MAMA. VULNERABILITY = SEXY. <333333333333 and the pleading. O god. He's pleading. Whilst holding her hands. Omg simone don't turn him down, he's so sincere~

Simone strokes her thumb over his fingers
AGSHFALHGDUSALDHSIALHSUIABCLHVFFG
OVARY EXPLOSION~

“I know what it is you want, Maximilian, and sometimes I even think, maybe…” She shakes her head, dismissing the notion, and pulls her hands free. “I’m tired,” she says softly, and stands to leave.
o, I don't even know what to say to this because omg. It's so, quiet and real and necessary because we all know it can't happen (shouldn't happen) because they wouldn't work together and he's her son but omg. I love the quietness, the stillness, the everythingness. Even tho it's painful~ omg :'CCCC

She only takes one step away before Max’s hand is on her shoulder, holding her in place.
...

OMG I AM SO SORRY BUT THIS SCENE IS ALL I CAN THINK OF idek

She closes her eyes as he snakes his arms around her waist.
SNAKING ARMS. OMG. LOVE IT. All slow and slithery and gentle and HOLDING HER TIGHTLY IN PLACE LIKE A BOA CONSTRICTOR READY TO CRUSH HER TO DEATH IF HE CHOOSES. Vulnerable but bastardy. Gentle but mean. Kind but omg it's fucking maximilian.
I LOVE THIS. I CAN'T SAY IT ENOUGH.

“Let me go,” she objects weakly, but tilts her head obligingly as he dips his down close. Her perfume smells like roses and cinnamon, and Max smiles against her neck as he breathes it in.
ERM. OMG. THIS IS SO IDK... VISCERAL (IS THAT THE WORD I MEAN? IDEK) OR SOMETHING. EARTHY. ANIMALISTIC. UNF. And omg lol roses and cinnamon I SEE WHAT YOU DID THERE. AND I LOVE YOU FOR IT. But yeh omg the breathing in of her ~scent~ and her only going "let me go" weakly, like she knows she SHOULD be protesting but she can't really be arsed and unf I love it. Just. This whole thing. I adore it. YOU'RE SO GOOD AT INTERACTION ON THIS REALLY MINUTE SCALE AND IT'S BRILLIANT. SO REALISTIC AND I LOVE IT.

She turns and gazes up into his face, searching his expression, then strokes her hand against his cheek.
No words. Just. Omg. THE STROKING. AND THE SEARCHING. AND DGHFJAHGFSAL I CAN'T EVEN SPEAK BECAUSE I LOVE IT SO.

“Oh, Maximilian,” she murmurs, “my son. My darling.” The air is thick with things that neither of them will ever say aloud.
Omg this. This is amazing and beautiful. And omg. MY SON, MY DARLING. And the air being thick is so true because omg I CAN'T BREATHE BECAUSE I'M WORRIED I'LL RUIN THE STILLNESS AND LAHDUISALFUSAL YES. neither of them will ever say aloud and o god, there's the heartbreaking bit because they won't say it because they're von altenburgs, and von altenburgs are above such things. Omg. :'CCCC
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[info]graspthethorn on December 13th, 2010 05:24 pm (UTC)
Re: (WHY IS THIS SO LONG OMG I AM SO SORRY I JUST HAVE A LOT OF FEELINGS OKAY)
She stretches up and kisses him softly on the corner of his mouth
Corner of the mouth kisses are so beautiful and underused and like, idk, understated because it could so easily be actual open mouth snoggage but it isn't. it's ~elegant~ and hesitant and I LOVE IT. I just want to wrap them in cotton wall and gently put them away. And the stretching. Omg the stretching. IDK WHY, BUT I LOVE THAT BIT. ALDFGAABHFSLGFH

She hesitates in the doorway, just long enough for Max to consider stopping her again and taking her back into his arms, but before he dares, she is gone.
This is such a beautiful heartrending ending. And omg, I kinda want to cry because o god, the hesitation, the heartache, the way he wants to go to her and she wants him SO OBVIOUSLY but neither of them are willing to actually go that far, to acknowledge what's between them and omg, tears down my face ;~;

SO YEHHHHH THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU THIS IS PERFECT AND I WILL FOREVER ADORE IT/YOU <3333333333333333333333333333333
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[info]tree1970 on December 14th, 2010 02:33 am (UTC)
Mystery author - beautiful! I will have this image in my mind every time I see these two on screen together for a LONG TIME.

Like others mentioned, the use of so many senses makes this so seductive and ... dare I say ... delectable? Simply wonderful.
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쉘리 I whip my hair like Bang Bang: awz - simone loves max now[info]sdk on December 14th, 2010 05:08 am (UTC)
This is such a gorgeous scene that teeters on that edge of wrong in all the right ways. I love how much you packed into so few words; it just sums up the relationship between these two characters so well--that tension, that longing. IDK, to me, the inappropriate feelings between Max and Simone is totally canon and this is exactly how I imagine it. So well done, MA! <3
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Aldi: AWZ: Simone is happy[info]aldiara on December 14th, 2010 05:57 am (UTC)
Oh, this is just lovely! AND TOTALLY CANON, JUST SO YOU KNOW! (yeah, yeah, I am forever declaring fanfic canon, but it's just because right now it's so much gorram BETTER than actual canon, lol). But yeah, like Shelly said, this is exactly how I imagine Max/Simone. And they're always so damn CLOSE to this with their inappropriate chemistry and loaded looks and hot sparkage that this scene is just a tiny step beyond that, and I can SO SEE IT HAPPENING ON SCREEN.

Beautifully teased out, MA, and I concur with those who said that the use of scent is brill. <3333
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Linda: AWZ - greasy!Max wants your porn[info]vitacrudelis on December 14th, 2010 09:04 pm (UTC)
Von Altencest! \o/

Damn, this is just lovely. How can you say so much in just a few words? *amazed* I love the atmosphere and I can totes picture that scene. You've captured their relationship so well, especially the oozing UST. And your details are just love! <3 (The scent is utter genius. And how much do I love it when Maximilian calls her Mutter or Mama? IDEK.)

And LOLOL, your warning. I love you and your twisted self, Mystery Author! (Not to forget this beautiful fic!) <333
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G: Mantonio[info]giorgiakerr on December 19th, 2010 05:56 am (UTC)
My first reaction was "AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA VON ALTENCEST. THIS FANDOM IS MADE OF DEPRAVED WIN."

But then I read it, and it's so sweet and lovely and touching, and it should be crack, but it's so not.

And when Max calls Simone Mama. <33333333333 I loved that.

I love this fic, Mystery Author. So much unsaid that it almost hurts. UGH, I love it.

(And now I want a Max/Simone/Antonio threesome. SO BAD.)
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[info]merkyderry on January 6th, 2011 08:14 pm (UTC)
Wow. I love the restraint. I love that these emotions are expressed without words through carefully selected details: Simone stroking his thumb or a hand on the shoulder an embrace and a gaze.

The love the imagery too, of Simone perching herself on the couch...like a schoolgirl; Max saying "Mother"; Simone saying "Maximilian". It's like the lines are blurred between formality and something else. All of this is a completely believable scenario.

Loved it.


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antiteb: Hände[info]antiteb on January 10th, 2011 04:32 pm (UTC)
I love how you describe the not entirely healthy relationship between Maximilian and Simone and make it sweet and lovely.

“Let me take care of you, mama,” he pleads. This is such a soft and tender moment OMG I said tender moment. Somebody shoot me please! and it totally describes Max's feelings for his mother.

Great JOB!
I need a Simone or Max icon...
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