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first that was so much more than just dirty dirty smut.
second, the dirty dirty smut part has obliterated my brain and made commenting on the rest impossible
damn.
If you want, I can spank you and force you to comment.
Yay for dirty, dirty smut. ;D
And Brian rubbing against Justin was so very very hot.
Lol, I thought that was such a minor part of the smut, but apparently it tickled your fancy, so that worked out well!
Umm that was freakin' hot.
And then the ending? Brian pleading and Justin saying "I have to"? That just made it so much more.
Incredible.
Aw shucks.
Thanks for coming along for the ride.
Wow! This was so unexpected... I love it. So unbelievably hot, but also so much more. Great use of the theme!
Sometimes my brain says, "Okay dls, it's time to broaden your scope and write something more than crack or porn."
I love this title so much more than the ones we talked about!
And now, a few of my personal favorite lines.
Brian lowered his head and softened his voice. "I want you safe," he said simply. Tears at my heart...
He sucked on two of his own fingers, keeping the palm of his other hand firmly in the dip of his back.
"Like this?" he asked as he shoved a finger up his hole.
Guhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!! 0498a%$#^P(&)(*&)HHH!!!!!! Seriously, hot.
Definitely not the standard PWP, my dear. Tonight, just reading it, not thinking about mechanics, it was really stunning. Thanks so much for sharing it.
Guhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!! 0498a%$#^P(&)(*&)HHH!!!!!!
Woah. That was an awesome comment. I had no idea that line would have that kind of affect on you. Go me! (And I say that in the most humble way possible. Really.)
Um...yeah. I like that sort of thing. ;-)
What? Finger fucking, Brian giving it to Justin hard, or Brian being forceful and putting Justin in his place?
Inquiring minds want to know... for future reference of course.
All of the above.
Oh, and Brian sucking on his own fingers to get them wet enough to shove them into Justin. So, yeah, everything. ;-)
*Catalogues away for a rainy day*
Really, why wait for rain?
You could write me something oh, say...now? ;-)
Can't. SOOOO tired. Doing this last set of stuff for work, then driving home tonight.
Awww, I was just kidding.
Have fun this weekend...enjoy the family. xoxo.
I will ;) See you around.
I love when porn is more than just porn. This is fabulous -- there's so much going on emotionally between them. And also, it's hot. ;-) Well done.
Sex is fun, but sometimes you need something with a little meat on it, you know?
Hot sweet and angsty! What more can a fangirl ask for?
I love how you managed to make this PWP into a Porn WITH a Plot.
Thank you.
Lol, why thanks. Apparently I can write more than crack and pointless smut.
wow! that was unexpected. was it just me or was the latter part seeped with too much desperation that it hurt? it was more than sex... thank you so much for this.
It's very angsty, that's for sure. I'm glad you liked it though, makes me feel all gooey inside.
Wow. That was... So very sexy and hot and a number of other synonyms for "GUH!"
I loved how you mixed the Cause with the Fucking - it was almost like an extended re-mix of the wrestling match at the loft, but happier (in a sad sort of way ;-)
I have always wondered how that scene would have continued, but in all honesty, I can't imagine any ending to that wrestling scene that would fit in with all of the emotion. I'm glad you thought this sort of picked up where that left off.
What I loved the most if the way you made me feel so many emotions while reading your story. I was laughing so hard when I read the Magenta Marauders, not sure if it was supposed to be that funny, but I kept picturing Blue's friend. Anyway, after calming down, the hotness of that scene is incredible and of course the whole subject is so much more profound than just porn. I loved absolutely everything. &hearts
Lol, Blues Clues! Yeah, I meant it to be in line with Brian's snark, so I'm glad you found it amusing. Sometimes I get inspired to use the emotional blender and stir everything all up together. Thanks!
One of the best fics I've ever read. Gorgeous.
Honest to goodness, you have no idea how much that just stroked my little writer's ego. Thank you.
oh my...the intensity was stunning...the smut was well, smut and so freaking hot and it matched the emotional intensity.
I feel a little weak in the knees.
This was really incredible. WOW.
*grabs you around the waist to hold you up*
*steals a page out of Outlander's book and dances you around the room*
I'm glad you liked this :D
Wonderful fic, I only wish we had seen this filmed! :D
Hehe, me too! Thank you muchly!
Wow! So much more than porn. The dynamics of that arc tend to mystify and elude me yet reading this so much made sense. It really resonated with me especially this: Because this time, what he was doing was darker - less untouchable superhero and more self-righteous vigilante.
But Justin had never been a self-righteous person, and so to justify the violence and the bitter words against those "mother fucking asshole straight guys," he'd tapped into pain that had opened inside him like a newly formed fissure.
this: Brian was silent. There was nothing in his statement that he could refute, because it was all true. As true as the words Justin had reiterated back to him verbatim when they had wrestled the other night on the floor: "The ones that hate you to your face, and the ones that hate you behind your back." And as twisted as those words had become in his pretty little mouth, he had been the one to put them there first.
and of course this: "Don't," he whispered into his ear, twining their fingers together as he stirred his hips, causing Justin to shiver under his touch. "Don't do it anymore," he pleaded.
"I have to," was the only thing Justin said back.
You used the sex as it is on the show to tell us something about Brian and Justin, where they are and how they feel in ways words can't. Fabulous
I'm glad I could help you find sense in that arc, and I'm also glad that you left me such wonderful quotey feedback!
And I love writing sex that means more than fucking (even if this was supposed to be PWP hehe). Thanks!
Lovely, lovely piece - hot and angsty and full of meaning.
Thank you my dear! I ♥ the angst :)
I can't comment coherently right now, my brain is fried (in a good way).
All I can picture is that desk the next day and Brian working at it. Working? Right!
Lol, working, riiight. I love it when I can fry people's brains. It truly is great fun.
*Hands you a cold margarita to cool your brain down*
A cold margarita for my brain, a cold shower for my body.
We'll see if that works!
Whoa. Hot and yet SO much more. You really tapped into that raw anger and energy that buzzed around Justin through the entire pink posse arc. Excellent characterizations and a gut punch of an ending. Fantastic fic!
~Ellen
Thank you so much! I'm glad it all came through in the telling ;)
Angsty scorching hot porn? I'm panting from the OMG hotness, yet aching a little from the angst. It's left me a little wibbly. I love you for that. Well, lots of other reasons too, but that for right now!
"Don't," he whispered into his ear, twining their fingers together as he stirred his hips, causing Justin to shiver under his touch. "Don't do it anymore," he pleaded. "I have to," was the only thing Justin said back. *gasps as my heart physically cracks*
BTW, you had me at the warning! hee hee
Hello my little stalker! *Takes some of teh love from 510 and pastes your poor cracked heart back together*
I'm glad you liked this :D *Licks you*
Oh wow, I think the dirty sex just fried what little is left of my brain, I love JUstin this frantic and needy. It also made me a little achy, because hellooo, S4 angst. You mixed both most excellent ♥
Why thank you very much. Justin is in so many different places in this arc which makes it really interesting to write :D
sex didn't work this time. but hot fun trying.
Lol, it certainly is, isn't it? Thanks! |