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snapelyhols_mod (snapelyhols_mod) wrote in snapelyholidays,
@ 2011-01-09 21:54:00

Entry tags:

2010_fic, alpha!remus, bondage, bottom!snape, face-shot, fic4:serpenscript, humiliation, non-con, oral, rough sex, snape/james, snape/remus, snape/sirius, spanking, teen_sex, underage, wanking

Gift fic for serpenscript, Being Eloise Jensen, or The Dangers of Staying Home from Hogsmeade, adult
Recipient: serpenscript

Author: nehalenia

Title: Being Eloise Jensen, or The Dangers of Staying Home from Hogsmeade

Characters: Severus Snape, James Potter, Sirius Black, Remus Lupin

Rating: Adult. Very Adult.

Content Info: *bondage, spanking, rough sex, non-con/dub-con, unintentional cross-dressing, humiliation, double penetration, bottom!Snape*

Summary: Snape's attempt to sneak into the Gryffindor girls' dormitory goes horribly, terribly, unforgettably awry.

Disclaimer: The world of HP and its characters belongs to Rowling.

Word count: ~8,040

Author Notes: Huge and heart-felt thanks to the mods for their saintly patience and to my sharp-eyed, faithful, and long-suffering beta, R. I'd never have made it to the finish line on this without your help and understanding.
To my lovely recipient, all I can say is that there could hardly have been a better match in all of fandom and I hope you enjoy this. Happy holidays!

( Being Eloise Jensen, or The Dangers of Staying Home from Hogsmeade )

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	bonfoi 2011-01-10 08:00 am UTC (link)
	Oh, take good care of him, Remus! I'm blown away! Severus came out of this better than expected...and he'll learn something good--I hope--about Remus. (Reply to this)

	countesszero 2011-01-10 12:44 pm UTC (link)
	this was absolutely lovely! very kinky, very hot, very wrong ... and therefore ... just right. i feel like I was the giftee :D so thank you for this! (Reply to this)

	torino10154 2011-01-10 12:48 pm UTC (link)
	Why do I have no doubt that's exactly what would happen if Severus found himself in Gryffindor Tower? Love how Remus sort of took control of things. And DP? gurgles (Reply to this) (Thread)

	countesszero 2011-01-10 02:12 pm UTC (link)
	ha! i knew you'd like this! rightly so! it was so hot! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	akatnamedeaster 2011-01-10 02:19 pm UTC (link)
	Oh man, that was ridiculously hot! Well done! (Reply to this)

	eeyore9990 2011-01-11 05:40 am UTC (link)
	Damn. I want to leave a more coherent comment, but there is no coherency left in me at the moment. Just... damn. This is SMOKING hot. (Reply to this)

	atdelphi 2011-01-12 03:11 am UTC (link)
	Oh my, very intense and very well-written. (Reply to this)

	k8bnimble 2011-01-12 10:33 pm UTC (link)
	Oh yeah for Remus being the Alpha dog (and taking care of his...) I think Severus will be ok now. James and Sirius were still jerks though!! I love the idea of Severus polyjuiced as a girl!! (Reply to this)

serpenscript
2011-01-15 04:09 am UTC (link)

Sorry for not getting to this right away, I thought I had but I hadn't, head's woolly with a head cold.

But I've read this over - once, twice - and yet again - because damn, it's HOT. And SO many delicious details in it to make it vivid. I *really* liked the description of the polyjuice wearing off, and Snape's genitals reappearing - the way the clothes were too small, especially the knickers - mmm, imagining Snape in too-tight feminine knickers :D

And oh gosh, the beater's bat, so much more wicked than a hand....I just BET Snape felt it bruise the way Potter would be wielding it. Potter has no finesse....and of COURSE Sirius would know the 'right' way to paddle someone. I'm imagining the expression on Snape's face right now, that moment Sirius hauled his hips up and kicked his feet apart and laid into him. Mmmm, not sure who got the better deal, Snape or Sirius! And Snape's body slowly responding to the treatment, the slow details, and his horror when his arousal was revealed...!

And as if the paddling wasn't treat enough, you threw Mooney into the mix...!The way he growls his want, and the rough way he grabs Snape's prick and yet Snape can't help but respond. The way Sirius compliments Snape - "bang-tidy arse" in one breath, and insults him in the next - "That hole's never been plugged - who'd have done it, right?"

And-and-and-the way Padfoot and Mooney work in tandem! OH MERLIN HOT. *fans self* Snape with a girl's skirt pushed up around his waist and a girl's blouse, arse livid red, being pushed down on Sirius' cock, and Moony fucking Snape's mouth - ngh! My brain is melting imagining that (and I don't HAVE to just imagine it thanks to *this*)!

Oh, but then you had to raise the stakes MORE. Forget Pads just loosening Snape's arse up for Lupin's 'stonking great knob'! I bet Snape's brain overloaded, torn between pain and pleasure, and then it degenerates into a desperate madness that is just captivating - the way Black's smooth words crumble to cursing and sentence fragments, and wouldn't I love to see Snape's narrow arse stretched around two cocks??? And of course Snape comes first.

Potter's an arse as is only to be expected - and I had to LOL at how quickly, afterwords, Sirius regained his smooth talking - sterling qualities of his todger, indeed! And there's another picture I'd love to see - Sirius and Moony and Snape sprawled over the couch in various states of undress. Mmmm...

Ok, enough drooling from me, before I start staring at the computer screen lost in delicious imagination XD Thank you for a VERY hot, steamy gift! :D

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	miss_morland 2011-01-18 10:31 pm UTC (link)
	Wow! fans self This was really, really hot -- loved how Snape had obviously tried to dress in character (with the knickers), too. :-D (Reply to this)

r_grayjoy
2011-01-19 05:51 am UTC (link)

If I had to sum this up in one word, I think that word would have to be "guuuuuuuuuuuh." Or perhaps "thud." But I'll try to do a bit better than that. ;)

What's most striking about this to me, I think, is the very different and distinct ways in which each of the Marauders responds to Severus. The contrast works so very well. James: unable to see anything good in Severus, disgusted by the entire affair, and intrigued/aroused against his wiil. Sirius: using Severus for entertainment, and having no problem adjusting at all when that entertainment becomes sexual. He's the ultimate hedonist, isn't he? And Remus: holy hell. Remus. The instant arousal, the animalistic nature it triggers, and the possessiveness. Nnnrrgh.

The dynamics between the Marauders themselves work equally well. You're giving us a different "configuration" of them here than what we often see, yet their characterizations are splendid. I love that James, the usual leader of the pack, has the least amount of control in this scenario, while Remus is the one dictating what's going to happen here.

Although, really... once Remus gets there, the balance shifts entirely, and Severus regains a considerable amount of his own power. Because Remus knows that he's not really doing anything more than Severus wants, or more than he can take. But the situation still allows Severus to be the "victim" and let go for a while. Well, up until the point that he's begging for it, anyway! Abjlancahlk, hot! ::dies::

Severus' horror at his reaction to it all is well played. His range of emotions as things progress is fantastic. And Remus... nnnrrgh. I still can't say anything about him besides nnnrrgh. WTF. There was a moment of heavy silence, only long enough for Lupin to swallow thickly and say, in a voice that could only be called a growl, "Oh fuck no!" -- HELL YEAH!

Also, love the bits of dark humor. Sirius being "familiar with the finer points of corporal punishment" had me LOLing.

And the thing that develops between Severus and Remus... and that last line... ::iz ded::

Niiiiiiiiiiiiiice.

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	kittybro 2011-03-21 09:54 am UTC (link)
	OMG.. i think that was the hottest fucking thing i've read in awhile. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	nehalenia 2011-03-21 05:14 pm UTC (link)
	Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	cptnstag_xo_doe 2012-06-20 01:37 pm UTC (link)
	This was and always shall be one of the hottest things I've read in my life. (Reply to this)