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MarinaNova Mods (marinanova_mod) wrote in marinanova_ooc,
@ 2012-09-01 10:50:00

Entry tags:

mod: hmd, mod: plotting

Game-wide HMD/Plotting!
Welcome to the MarinaNova HMD! This is optional, but encouraged.

• List your characters for which you'd like feedback. We have a form below if you like forms!
[Feel free to add 4th Wall characters]

• Leave your tactful and considered thoughts, questions, concerns, praise, suggestions, etc. for others.

We strongly encourage you to make this a dialogue. Find out what went into actions, decisions, and characterization and you may come to understand it better. Hopefully you'll also be in the best position to clearly communicate your own concerns. Results will be more satisfactory for everyone if one person isn't on the offensive while the other is on the defensive.

Avoid leaving someone a wall of text. This can be intimidating even with the most careful of wording and best of intentions.

Don't gang up on someone. You may have a different way of wording something, but unless you have something new to contribute, consider letting it go if there are already others saying it.

Be constructive and considerate.

• Since there is no plotting meme during months with an HMD, please feel free to do that here too.

• Contact a mod if you have any problems.

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dude I feel late to the party

scientist
2012-09-01 09:13 pm UTC (link)

Player name: Val

Character: Bruce Banner | The Avengers (MCU) |

scientist | ☑
Link to private HMD if preferred: right here, yo
Comments: I am really really insecure when it comes to live action things, and particularly when it comes to huge, popular fandoms like Marvel and The Avengers. I don't have any sort of comic background so the only things I really have to draw on are any related films. With Bruce, I worry about making him too...hesitant/wary of people, if that's the right word. I don't think I've been hitting the emo factor too hard, but if anything seems off to you guys, please do let me know!

Also tagswise, I've been sucking like whoa, so I am trying to work on that! My goal this time around is to start incorporating more action/thought brackets instead of lines of dialogue, so hopefully that's something that'll start manifesting soon enough.

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4TH WALL CHARACTERS

scientist
2012-09-01 09:18 pm UTC (link)

Not gonna list them all because, lol 13 characters, but I would like feedback on a few, as they're people I might think about apping in the future!

Character: Clint Barton/Hawkeye | Avengers: Earth's Mightiest Heroes |

makethatshot
Comments: I don't have his wit. :( Also not sure if his response to various not-his-canon Avengers was entirely appropriate.

Character: Aang | Avatar: The Last Airbender |

lightonhisfeet
Comments: I do play him elsewhere, but hey, wide audiences are good, right?

Character: Helena Wayne/Huntress | DCnU |

morepersonal
Comments: ...Given that my comics background is zilch, I was winging most of my playing throughout 4th wall. But she is a muse I would like to develop more, so any tips and tricks, either concerning her in particular or comics in general, would be really appreciated!

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	_tricky 2012-09-02 04:23 am UTC (link)
	I think your Bruce is great! You catch his humour well, and his wariness is to just the right extent. You've managed to avoid making him too emo, and to be honest I think you're doing fine with the action/thought brackets to dialogue ratio right now, but that's just me. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	scientist 2012-09-03 07:10 pm UTC (link)
	I appreciate the comments! Hopefully I can manage to keep that all up. :) (Reply to this) (Parent)

god why are you so late val at least bring some more booze or something

seek
2012-09-02 04:02 pm UTC (link)

I don't think he's TOO hesitant. I mean, maybe after a month, or even longer, he might come out of his shell more, but so far it's been really believable! There's a good dose of both his analytic side and the other parts of him; the dry wit and human concern and all that. You've set up a really cool balance for him, and that's good.

...Now Cas will just have to accidentally tip him off of it...

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	look behind you there's an entire ten kegs scientist 2012-09-02 04:32 pm UTC (link)
	That's good to know! I know I tend to worry overly much about everything anyway, but Bruce was very much a whim app (no thanks to Yuul) so I'm more insecure with him than I would be with other characters. So knowing that makes me feel a bit better. ...Cas, don't make him go all Hulk on you. :( (Reply to this) (Parent)

	cheerleader 2012-09-03 07:05 pm UTC (link)
	your bruce is perfect and i love everything you do with him. my crit is not crit at all but it counts for something? ♥ (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	scientist 2012-09-03 07:08 pm UTC (link)
	it's okay, because i have crit for myself and that crit is that i don't tag you quite nearly enough, so i will try to remedy that in the future! ♥ (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	cheerleader 2012-09-03 07:10 pm UTC (link)
	i would love more val tags. give me all of them. actually, i'm going to be putting up a post for angel at some point today, once i talk to kristi. i can throw in something about physics wrt what we talked about earlier on what i think was a cr meme of some kind. ...or maybe it was the love meme... idk my memory fails me sometimes. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	scientist 2012-09-03 07:28 pm UTC (link)
	ooooh, awesomesauce! i will lurk and wait for it like a shark in the water. tbh, i don't remember where we talked about it either, but we'll make it happen either way. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	bluemoondog 2012-09-04 03:09 am UTC (link)
	I have no crit. What I do want to know is why I do not have CR with you yet. I like Bruce, and I like Val, so somehow or another Helix should poke him. Yes. This should happen. Would the big green guy like to meet a little blue guy?? (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	bluemoondog 2012-09-04 03:11 am UTC (link)
	Also wow, I forgot to say how much I loved Aang, still no crit here cause you play him perfectly and he's amazing. I hope I did okay as Zuko! (Reply to this) (Parent)

scientist
2012-09-04 03:22 am UTC (link)

...............And the answer to that would be that Val fails hardcore in tagging out right now. orz orz orz BUT I AGREE, THIS IS A THING THAT NEEDS TO BE FIXED because Bren is awesome and Helix is amazing. The big green guy would love to meet the little blue guy. So long as said little blue guy doesn't provoke the big green guy. :(

Also, asfl;dj, I'm glad you liked Aang! I adored your Zuko and I wish I hadn't been so gosh-darned slow in tagging his post. ;-;

But back to CR: DO YOU HAVE POSTS UP THAT I CAN TAG? Or am I going to have to non-hermit this month and actually make a post....

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bluemoondog
2012-09-04 03:39 am UTC (link)

Well I can't promise anything about the provoking but I can definitely try to reign him in a little for the good of the dome!

It's cool, I was pretty slow myself and rusty! It's been so long since I played him.

IIIiiii do not. Hmm... if we wanted to do a one-on-one thing we could, I have nothing specific planned for this day-week that I know of? And IDK where Bruce hangs out but Helix occasionally can be seen around the Education Center or Sector 2 in general. I'd be up for anything!

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scientist
2012-09-04 03:48 am UTC (link)

Pfft no, it's okay. Bruce actually should probably be provoked more. |D I've been throwing him at mostly tame posts, which he likes, but I like confrontation! So. Helix is welcome to be as...Helix-y as he likes. :D

Bruce likes ~~long walks on the beach~~ hanging out in Avengers ~~Mansion~~ Apartment and doing weird science experiments. He also likes the koi pond and whatever park that's in because it's peaceful there, hanging around the Education Center because what is teaching classes, as well as the hospital, because he's curious about the tech there.

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bluemoondog
2012-09-04 03:57 am UTC (link)

I was thinking... if we wanted them to meet ASAP I could throw up a post with Helix ducking into the education center, hood up from the rain and a little soaked. He's been practicing with the Piano! So he'd have reason to be there. And then the hood comes down and

*GASP* It's a blue kid.

Or he could putter past wherever Bruce is and he could spot him. Whichever works! That is, if you'd like to arrange something quick and easy for this week? I can just as easily hold off till a more appropriate time or even come up with something else if you'd rather!

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scientist
2012-09-04 04:05 am UTC (link)

I like the piano thing! Bruce likes piano. I like piano. :D I also like blue kids! Bruce....I dunno, he's never met one. FIRST TIME FOR EVERYTHING.

And this week should be fine! I've been a little slow with tags recently but that's largely because I'm just due for a canon review everywhere. Whyyyyyyy didn't I see the Avengers again when it was out this weekend? D|

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	bluemoondog 2012-09-04 04:15 am UTC (link)
	Helix is pretty decent at it! He learns fast and it might be a good way to get the big guy to chill out so he doesn't hulk smash the piano. How do you feel about tomorrow? Or is that too soon? I'm quite alright with backtagging into forever so you can take whatever time you want on it. Also I think I'll just leave it as an open log. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	scientist 2012-09-04 04:18 am UTC (link)
	I'm cool with tomorrow! My inbox isn't too hectic right now. If nothing else, I'll leave a placeholder tag and do more hefty tags in the next few days, but I don't think it should come to that. Gleeeeeeeeee, CR with you. :D (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	bluemoondog 2012-09-05 03:21 am UTC (link)
	Here ya go! Feel free to tag in whenever ♥ (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

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scientist, 2012-09-05 06:18 pm UTC

there is no party until val walks in

thisiscalm
2012-09-06 12:22 am UTC (link)

I'm still so perfectly canonblind to Avengers, but what little I've interacted with Bruce so far has been really enjoyable. He seems really... well-balanced? Which is an odd word to choose maybe but that's what I picked. So there.

My only real crit — and it's a serious one — is that we don't have any CR right now. How did this happen? I don't know, but it needs to change asap.

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nope, pretty sure that applies to rica

scientist
2012-09-06 03:02 am UTC (link)

Eeep! Hopefully I have not accidentally spoiled anything for you. :c I've seen the movie so many times it makes me forget that other people haven't seen it....

Also, I like the word well-balanced! It is a good word and I will try and maintain things so that word continues to apply.

But I do agree, your crit is the most serious crit! I was actually going to tag Reid's post from a few days - or has it been over a week now? probably - ago, but then I dropped the ball on RP. Again. BUT I WILL TAG THE NEXT POST OF YOURS THAT GOES UP. AND THIS IS A PINKY PROMISE.

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thisiscalm
2012-09-06 03:04 am UTC (link)

Haha, after researching for all those Avengers apps? I'm pretty sure I don't even need to see the movie. It's cool though, spoilers are my life.

You can still tag the Reid post if you want to! I am happily backtagging that as we speak, so if you feel up for it that would be grand. I'm also planning a general open action post for Spike next week sometime, if that would be more to your liking.

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	scientist 2012-09-06 03:11 am UTC (link)
	.....I was going to reply with something witty, and then I saw the icon. I think I need a moment. But anyway, I will probably tag both of them, because I am trying to make up for a horrible period of RP inactivity by tagging all the things. It'll probably backfire on me, but it sure feels good in the meantime. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	thisiscalm 2012-09-06 01:41 pm UTC (link)
	This is all Oli's fault. I have no part in these deer shenanigans ~~mostly~~. Both is even better! And you know me, I'm good for backtagging so take the time you need! (Reply to this) (Parent)

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