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snarrymod (snarrymod) wrote in snarry_games,
@ 2008-05-04 12:00:00

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TEAM DRAGON ENTRY: RaeWhit "Down the Rabbit Hole"
Title: Down the Rabbit Hole
Author: joanwilder (RaeWhit)
Team: Dragon
Genres: Postwar, Angst
Prompt: Separation Anxiety
Rating/Warnings/Kinks: NC-17
Word Count: 48,000+
Summary: For Harry and Snape, the war might be over, but the battle isn't.
A/N: Thanks to all of Team Dragon, for the camaraderie and teamwork par excellence. I'm so proud of all of you for pulling together, week after week, so that every one of us could do our best . A special smooch to the snarrymods who continue to make the Games possible, year after year. To jadzialove, my humble and heartfelt appreciation for all your diligence and support; I treasure you as a beta, writer, and friend. Thanks, too, klynie1, for your assistance and support.
Disclaimer: Harry Potter and his universe belong to J.K. Rowling, Scholastic, Bloomsbury and Raincoast Books, and Warner Brothers, Inc. I make no money from writing fanfiction. It's my own private obsession.

"Down the Rabbit Hole by Raewhit"

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	YAYYYYYY! Our Capitaine! josan 2008-05-04 05:00 pm UTC (link)
	My neck hurts...went to the gym and did something new with weights...hence...PRINT! Off to read with a hot water bottle on the upper shoulders. Will be back. Promise. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	Re: YAYYYYYY! Our Capitaine! joanwilder 2008-05-04 09:26 pm UTC (link)
	Owie! No pain, no gain, huh? Happy reading! (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

Re: YAYYYYYY! Our Capitaine!

josan
2008-05-05 08:34 am UTC (link)

With most of my comments, I've been pointing out lines that I loved. Can't do this here. Not because there weren't any, but because the ideas were overwhelming.

The castle as sentient being! Who holds grudges and wants to punish those it feels wronged it. WOW! (The temper tantrum! OMG!)

Then the deal with Binns. I can't remember a story where we get to meet Binns in his quarters (Like Harry, didn't even know he had any!), to understand why he is still there. His relationship with the castle. His remembering Severus as a student. His having to remain within the deal he made and yet finding a way to help Severus.

I loved/hated how you dribbled out information as to Severus's situation. At first the agoraphobia diagnosis was novel enough, but then to have the true reason come out...and the way he and Harry had been dealing with all that. Awesome.

Though I won't list the lines I loved, I must point out that the repartee between Harry and Severus was always intense and often amusing.

The descriptions of what Severus undergoes when he tries to leave are heart-wrenching. The dress robes scene particularly so.

Harry's anger/rage at what Severus is suffering when the fight against Voldemort is finally over...his frustration in not being able to talk about what is happening...his search for a way out for Severus...his determination and his love... All within character and yet that of a Harry who has matured but who is still willing to 'break the rules' for someone he loves.

Severus...his acceptance, his addiction, his need for Harry not only for his sanity but for his heart, his confinement – which would have broken a lesser man (I hate to think what that first year was like for him), his depression, his self-hatred for not being able to walk out (when they thought it was agoraphobia)...

What came across best however was the love each of these two has for the other. How Harry will do anything to save his Severus, even take on the castle to fight for him.

And that scene had me flipping pages onto the floor (Fortunately I had numbered them!) just to see what happened next. The tension was incredible!

And Harry's final victory that happened all because Severus Snape, snarky Potions instructor, had treated Binns like he treated everyone else on staff.

The last pages had me reaching for the box of tissues since I feared the worst ( :-( you teased us! :-( )...and then got to the reward that Severus and Harry deserved.

Thank you for a wonderfully original Snarry. (It now has its own binder – dark green, and it's by the bed for another of many-to-be reads.)

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	Re: YAYYYYYY! Our Capitaine! josan 2008-05-06 07:13 am UTC (link)
	Didn't mean to post twice. (Deleted one of them.) I was trying to post yesterday when all I got was database not available. I guess that means it still posts. LOL! BTW:I forgot to comment on the phoenix/dragon bit. Snicker. Talk about evenhanded fairness etc! (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	Re: YAYYYYYY! Our Capitaine! joanwilder 2008-05-06 02:04 pm UTC (link)
	Hehe, that dragon/phoenix scene was last minute. < looks around shiftily >. I almost forgot about our challenge. (Reply to this) (Parent)

Re: YAYYYYYY! Our Capitaine!

joanwilder
2008-05-06 02:02 pm UTC (link)

What a thoughtful review! I'm humbled that you'd take the time to be so specific, but you know how writers love when readers do this. :)

My major concern was making certain the reader was misdirected in the first half. Crafting their conversations to that end drove me a bit batty for a while. But I think it worked. I'm glad you could sense how much they cared for one another, Severus' resignation and Harry's determination.

The castle and Binns were the fun part for me: I've never much liked writing battle scenes, but that last scene in the Great Hall was exquisite to write.

I'm so glad you read it--srsly, thanks for taking the time to read. It's been an honor being on the same team with you. ROAR!!

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