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snarrymod (snarrymod) wrote in snarry_games,
@ 2008-05-03 11:04:00

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TEAM PHOENIX ENTRY: Pir8fancier "Stilllife"
Title: Stilllife
Author: pir8fancier
Team: Phoenix
Genre: Post-war
Prompt: Miles to go before I sleep, Infidelity
Word Count: 37,155
Ratings/Warnings/Kinks: R
Summary: Snape is killed by Voldemort. But not really.
Author's Note: My usual stunning beta, regan_v did the honors; my love for Snape is second to none. Except her. I heart her very, very much. This turned from a simple concept into a monster, so all errors, etc., are mine.

"Stilllife by Pir8fancier"

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(Anonymous)
2008-06-24 05:05 am UTC (link)

The version on my LJ is without the annoying typos! I apologize for that. Keeping the sense of movement and having Snape be physically moribund WAS an issue. I dealt with part of it by having the other person in the conversation move quite a bit so that it didn't seem like the scene was static, and then I really tried to make the dialogue as amusing, intense, moving, funny, etc. as possible so that the reader felt that the story was moving forward, even though it doesn't move well. Some people felt that the beginning was very slow, and I admit to that, but I wanted the reader to get a sense of who Snape is in this story. Then when he interacts with Minerva and Harry and Draco, he seems true.

Anyway, this is about forgiveness and paying debts. This is the one really big reason why I found DH so dissatifying because I thought that certain characters needed to be forgiven and their sacrifices acknowledged. I'm not a big dumbledore fan, but I do think that this assessment of him is pretty spot on. And I've written several Snapes, but this is possibly my best Snape, and I mean that in the sense that I really do admire him here. He is a magnificent character. Thanks for your lovely feedback.

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potteresque_ire
2008-06-24 05:33 am UTC (link)

I don't think the beginning is slow myself; to me, the "motion" in the beginning is more introverted - it is in Snape, in his mentality that is pretty much still at war with himself; he calms as he finds his salvation, piece by piece, through the story (that's another great aspect of the fic - this process isn't rushed), whereas the unsettling psyche is moreorless transferred to Harry in the second half, and he is a living, moving being and so it may feel like there is more action on the surface, although I think Harry, because of his unfailing faith to this world and the people around him, never get to Snape's level of unrest.

Yes, this is definitely about forgiveness, and some of the lines in this fic are really great things to remember in life - some of Snape's advices aside (his moral code truly answers to no one but himself, and that is much more difficult than to just follow what is okay with social norms) there are certain lines that just hit me so hard - the question of the nature of forgiveness and and the players in that game, is every wrong deed forgivable? and perhaps moreso, who is the one who forgives and who is the one forgiven? I always imagine Snape unable to forgive himself in canon (and it is this frustration that drives him to treat Harry badly - moreso than because Harry was a splitting image of James) and in some way I am happy that JKR did not explicitly deal with it - I like to have room for imagination because she may make it really tacky :).

(Sorry about my horrific grammar in reviews! I hope this still makes sense...)

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