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notreallyme10 ([info]notreallyme10) wrote in [info]qaf_challenges,
@ 2009-07-12 17:17:00

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Entry tags:clusterf#ck

46. Drabbles: Letting Go
Title: Letting Go
Author: [info]itwaslovetome
Theme: Opposites
Notes: Drabble x2 … [info]grayskyblue - Thanks for the beta. Opposites are Abandonment/Freedom or Love/Hate, something along those lines.


When you were still in high school, you stood in that place that no longer felt like home, and listened to him tell you how it was going to be – your “disgusting lifestyle” – your father’s abandonment felt like letting go.

You hated what he was saying, but he was still your dad. You wanted more than anything for him to know, or even to want to know, what was best for you.

But instead you were the sand he could never quite figure out how to hold onto… Always clutching too tight and letting it all fall through his fingers.

* * *

When you were leaving for New York, you stood in this place that still felt like home and you were amazed at how letting go and love could feel so alike.

You hated what he said about how it was “only time,” but you knew what he really meant. The two of you were infinite. So you would compromise, so neither of you had to watch your dreams slip through your fingers.

It was like sand, and after all the times you’d held too tightly, or he hadn’t held tightly enough, this time, you were sure you’d get it right.



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[info]outlander
2009-07-13 05:57 pm UTC (link)
I like the comparison of the two very different times.
And really liked this line:
But instead you were the sand he could never quite figure out how to hold onto

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-17 07:12 pm UTC (link)
A very small part of me is always so sad for Justin's dad - Never figuring out how to just be grateful for what he had and learn how to hold onto it.
Thank you for your comment. :)

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[info]ahaw9913
2009-07-13 08:30 pm UTC (link)
Very beautiful drabbles! I love the themes of home and letting go.

It was like sand, and after all the times you’d held too tightly, or he hadn’t held tightly enough, this time, you were sure you’d get it right.

I'm sure they did, too!

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-17 07:13 pm UTC (link)
I think they did. They had so much trial-and-error, they were bound to figure it out eventually - when it really mattered.

Thank you for your comments! :)

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[info]rosy5000
2009-07-14 03:48 am UTC (link)
I just love the comparison between the relationships and sand. Nicely done.

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-17 07:13 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much!

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[info]noteverything
2009-07-14 02:31 pm UTC (link)
I'm always a sucker for parallels...thank goodness Justin knew when to let things go and when to "get it right."

Thanks for sharing these!

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-17 07:14 pm UTC (link)
I'm a sucker for parallels as well - and the ones this show gives us to work with are quite brilliant.

Thank you!!

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[info]circadia
2009-07-14 08:38 pm UTC (link)
Great comparison with sand and the relationships!

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-17 07:15 pm UTC (link)
Thank you! :)

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[info]jule1122
2009-07-14 11:52 pm UTC (link)
You did fabulous job highlighting the difference between these relationships and parting, and with beautiful language too. I love this line:

When you were leaving for New York, you stood in this place that still felt like home and you were amazed at how letting go and love could feel so alike.

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-17 07:15 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the wonderful feedback! :)

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[info]butternutsquash
2009-07-15 01:34 am UTC (link)
letting go and love could feel so alike

Lovely. :)

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-17 07:17 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much.
I always thought this parting had that whole "If you love something, set it free..." lesson in it. Painful, but hopeful at the same time.

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[info]bulagirl
2009-07-15 09:36 pm UTC (link)
These are lovely. I love the comparison with the sand. Great job :)

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-17 07:17 pm UTC (link)
Thank you very much! :)

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[info]selenebj
2009-07-16 01:36 am UTC (link)
Beautiful :)

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-17 07:17 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much! :)

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[info]minuet9
2009-07-17 12:06 am UTC (link)
I like this, especially
You hated what he said about how it was “only time,” but you knew what he really meant. The two of you were infinite.
Nicely done, thank you

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-17 07:20 pm UTC (link)
Thank YOU.
The truth is, at first *I* hated when Brian said it was only time... So this is the conclusion I came to eventually. :)

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[info]pfodge
2009-07-17 05:44 pm UTC (link)
Beautifully done.

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-17 07:22 pm UTC (link)
Thank you. I had a lot of fun with this theme. :)

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[info]simplystars
2009-07-20 11:44 pm UTC (link)
Wow... neat use of the sand metaphor. You hated what he said about how it was “only time,” but you knew what he really meant. The two of you were infinite. So you would compromise, so neither of you had to watch your dreams slip through your fingers.

Perfectly perfect. :)

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[info]testdog65
2009-07-23 01:26 am UTC (link)
Simply, stunningly beautiful. I love your references to the sand and how you used that imagery so well in both drabbles. I really enjoyed these!

~Ellen

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[info]notreallyme10
2009-07-31 02:34 am UTC (link)
Wow! This is really beautiful. I never would have thought of this comparison, but I really enjoyed it.

You hated what he said about how it was “only time,” but you knew what he really meant. The two of you were infinite. So you would compromise, so neither of you had to watch your dreams slip through your fingers.

Every word is perfect, but I especially had to quote this because it is so lovely.

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[info]_alicesprings
2009-09-26 09:50 am UTC (link)
Lovely!

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[info]happier_bunny
2009-10-03 09:34 pm UTC (link)
I love the way you conveyed Justin's opposing thoughts at these very different, yet very defining moments in his life.

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