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The Porn Santa (smutmas_mod) wrote in merry_smutmas,
@ 2007-12-20 16:00:00

Entry tags:

fic, severus/aberforth

Merry Smutmas, bethbethbeth!

To: bethbethbeth
From: atdelphi

Title: Goat Song
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Aberforth Dumbledore/Severus Snape
Disclaimer: All recognisable elements herein are the sole intellectual and legal property of JKR and her associates. No profit is being made from this work and no copyright infringement is intended.
Summary: A tragedy in five scenes.
Author's Notes: Big thanks to my beta, who knows who she is, and happy holidays to Beth!

Goat Song

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	lupinelady 2007-12-21 03:22 pm UTC (link)
	This is just gorgeous, every single word of it. I love that you took Aberforth's goat seriously, made her a character instead of a joke, and all of Aberforth's gruff kindness. This feels like it could be canon; it all slots into place so beautifully. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:40 pm UTC

snegurochka_lee
2007-12-21 04:07 pm UTC (link)

Wonderful! The opening reminded me of the film, Dogville, with the stage and introduction of characters. I loved the theatre feel to it, as well as how nicely it fit into canon! And Aberforth's musings about his brother were just dead on.

Albus never was careful with his things. If nothing else, it had made Aberforth a fair hand at mending.

That line especially got to me. Great story!

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atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:42 pm UTC

	(Anonymous) 2007-12-21 05:45 pm UTC (link)
	I almost didn't read it too, but uh. Wow. This works SO WELL. And its beautifully written. Ghostangel from LJ Who really should just get an Insane Journal account (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:42 pm UTC

	(Anonymous) 2007-12-21 09:00 pm UTC (link)
	This is completely gorgeous - every word and situation just seems so perfectly placed, and the whole thing seems almost delicate. It made what might seem like a strange pairing seem perfectly logical and true. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:43 pm UTC

painless_j
2007-12-22 12:47 am UTC (link)

Awesome! I saw the headers of this fic and thought, "I'm going to read either a very good or a very bad story." Because only a fool (and correspondingly, bad writer) or a good one would be daring enough to pick this pairing. I'm happy it was the latter! :) It's amazing how short and seemingly spare in detail this story is and how well it works in moving the reader. Thank you!

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atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:43 pm UTC

r_grayjoy
2007-12-22 01:13 am UTC (link)

Whoa. This is amazing writing. You hooked me from the opening sequence.

This pairing just makes so damn much sense! Of all the people in the world who most know what Albus was like, and who could most sympathize with Snape, of course it's Aberforth. It's so obvious yet so brilliant.

Your Aberforth's voice is amazing. Absolutely perfect. I LOVE the way we get to see younger Severus through his eyes -- and that he never stops seeing Severus as a 'lad'. It's just so very like Aberforth that he would find Severus peculiar and fascinating -- or perhaps, fascinating for his peculiarity -- I think.

Scapegoating... improper charms... Snape alive... ::is dead::

Completely brilliant.

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atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:44 pm UTC

	zephyr_macabee 2007-12-22 03:03 am UTC (link)
	All I can do is echo the praise of the readers above. This was a wonderful story; lucky Beth (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:44 pm UTC

	kayleigh_jane 2007-12-22 08:14 am UTC (link)
	Amazing story, for all the reasons already listed above. Beth is one lucky girl! (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:44 pm UTC

	themostepotente 2007-12-22 08:28 pm UTC (link)
	I was not going to read this. Honestly, I flew right past this upon checking the header. Aberforth's about as sexually appealing to me as well, hmm... I can't even say, really. This is extremely well-written, though. And somehow I get the feeling there is NOTHING you couldn't write and not entrance the lot of us with. Beautiful fic. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:45 pm UTC

	yanagi 2007-12-23 12:55 am UTC (link)
	Perfect. I love this one so much. Excellent work. thank you. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:45 pm UTC

	rose_gialle 2007-12-23 06:25 am UTC (link)
	Wonderful! stands to applaud And full of perfectly formed images. Like this; Opened one button and another and another, laying him bare, his gargoyle of a lad, all pale pitted stone and sharp angles. A joy to read. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:45 pm UTC

	ariadneelda 2007-12-23 09:23 am UTC (link)
	I hadn't even realised I wanted to read this pairing until I read this. Wonderful fic. Simply wonderful. So very well written! I loved Aberforth's POV. His voice was fantastic. Excellent characterisation all around. And the way you explained the improper goat charms. Poor Bess, though. But hey, if it's to bring Snape back, I won't be too sad. g Fantastic work! (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:45 pm UTC

	(Anonymous) 2007-12-23 02:17 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, ouch. That's just perfect, especially in the way that my heart nearly burst through my throat reading it. [I]t wasn't asked frivolously. "It felt...like something that couldn't be taken back." That and the fifty other lines that I could quote right back at you. Especially when he asked about Albus. I love it. Meg. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:46 pm UTC

	saturn92103 2007-12-23 02:40 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, my goodness. This was fabulous. He'd had his share of cast-offs in his life, worn out clothing and broken toys. Albus never was careful with his things. If nothing else, it had made Aberforth a fair hand at mending. I love, love that line. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:46 pm UTC

midnitemarauder
2007-12-25 02:14 am UTC (link)

This is simply marvelous! I'm almost speechless here, thinking, what can I possibly say that hasn't already been said in every review I've seen this week? The 'scapegoating' charm is pure genius, and it's little things like that which make me love this universe so much. There's a limitless font of creativity just waiting to be tapped, and I take ridiculous amounts of joy and pleasure each time someone manages. Like a child on Christmas morning staring at the presents under the tree. This entire story is just that, really, and it was a pleasure and a joy to read. Thank you for sharing it with us!

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atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:47 pm UTC

	duniazade 2007-12-25 02:04 pm UTC (link)
	What can I say? It's extraordinary. Thank you for writing. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:47 pm UTC

	xylodemon 2007-12-25 07:53 pm UTC (link)
	This is phenomenal. Absolutely phenomenal. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:48 pm UTC

nehalenia
2007-12-26 06:35 am UTC (link)

This is an absolutely stunning piece of writing. That first scene is so perfectly described, I will carry it in my head for a long time. There's such a sense of longing permeating the whole fic. I love your flawed, vulnerable Severus, your embittered but pragmatic Aberforth, and their take on Albus; a characterization he totally deserves. The scapegoating spell is just so perfect, and I love how it stays within canon. Hell, I love how every bit of it stays within canon. And that last line, wow. This is a gem.

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atdelphi, 2008-01-05 11:49 pm UTC

who_la_hoop
2007-12-26 06:25 pm UTC (link)

I don’t think I’m alone in reading this fic with some scepticism – because it’s a pretty odd pairing, and I feared I wouldn’t enjoy it much. But when I got to this line:

He'd had his share of cast-offs in his life, worn out clothing and broken toys. Albus never was careful with his things. If nothing else, it had made Aberforth a fair hand at mending.

Oh. And with that, you had me convinced. It just - worked. Charming and sad and delightful all at once. A joy to read. You have my sincere congratulations.

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atdelphi, 2008-01-06 12:42 am UTC

	lexywrites 2007-12-27 02:26 am UTC (link)
	marvelous. what a wonderful gift. thanks. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-06 12:42 am UTC

mcmuffins_js
2007-12-27 02:55 am UTC (link)

Wow, so glad I listened to the recs! I love the prologue and the closing, about everyone playing their parts. So perceptive and poetic! And omg, He'd had his share of cast-offs in his life, worn out clothing and broken toys. Albus never was careful with his things. If nothing else, it had made Aberforth a fair hand at mending. Again with the perceptive and beautiful and just amazing language!

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	juniperus 2007-12-27 09:22 pm UTC (link)
	Some of the finest bit of writing I've read in a long time - I am utterly speechless. And you, author, are amazing. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-06 12:43 am UTC

	lunarennui 2007-12-28 12:01 am UTC (link)
	...all i can say is WOW. (Reply to this) (Thread)

atdelphi, 2008-01-06 12:43 am UTC

nonajf
2007-12-29 07:06 pm UTC (link)

Oh oh oh! Brilliant. I'm a bit teary for Aberforth and Bess, characters who before this I knew nothing of.

What Aberforth was willing to sacrifice! Poor Bess.

Albus never was careful with his things.

A true summation of Dumbledore's life and the Potter books.

If nothing else, it had made Aberforth a fair hand at mending.

A great lead-in to the final section. Here's hoping he can mend the rest of Severus.

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atdelphi, 2008-01-06 12:43 am UTC

kennahijja
2007-12-29 08:13 pm UTC (link)

That was an exceptional fic! I loved everything about it, from the pairing (so rare! so *right*!) to the play structure to the plot running through practically all of Snape's adult life.

I also adored how much went on between them with so few words spoken, and the way Aberforth's resentment for his brother (and the perceptiveness of it) is one of the things that seems to draw him to Snape - not just pity, but protectiveness. And how we only truly get to see how deep it got until the end.

Snape was wonderful throughout, and I loved how the perspective of him changed by being addressed as a 'lad' and being looked at by someone not impressed by (or even aware of) his Snape-ish ways and the impact he has on students, for example. It makes him a lot more vulnerable. And drunk, monosyllabic, foulmouthed Snape was so great!

And yes - that was the most brilliant (and, omg, nonsexual!) explanation for practicing inappropriate charms on a goat, ever! Poor Bess! Poor Aberforth, too.

Absolutely gorgeous writing throughout, too, with a superb exit line. Considering that I can kink on writing even more than sex, lines like
Opened one button and another and another, laying him bare, his gargoyle of a lad, all pale pitted stone and sharp angles.
sent my little heart pitter-pattering like all get out :).

That, and He'd had his share of cast-offs in his life, worn out clothing and broken toys. Albus never was careful with his things. If nothing else, it had made Aberforth a fair hand at mending.

I loved this so, so much, and will scan the masterlist like a hawk to find out who you are - because you're one *heck* of a brilliant mystery writer :). Thanks for writing this!

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