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Beth H (bethbethbeth) wrote in hp_beholder,
@ 2012-04-14 10:26:00

Entry tags:

beholder_2012, fic, het, petunia dursley, petunia/severus, rating:r, severus snape

FIC: "As You Say" for pale_moonlite
Recipient: Pale_Moonlite
Author: lash_larue
Title: “As You Say”
Rating: PG-13 to mild R
Pairings: Petunia/Snape
Word Count: 16,800
Warnings/Content Information (Highlight to View): *[Infidelity, Non-explicit het sex]*.
Summary: After Lily's death Snape and Petunia are drawn to each other in an attempt to find something of Lily in the other. Neither of them is really sure what they find, but they find that they need it.
Author's Notes: The summary is from the prompt, I hope that it works for you, Pale_moonlite.
Thanks to Tetleythesecond and Therealsnape for having a look at this, the blame is all mine, however.

"As You Say"

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Re: Squeeeeeee!!!

pale_moonlight
2012-04-16 06:50 am UTC (link)

I loved your Petunia almost immediately.

She was not, however, going to be ordered about by the old crackpot who had denied her the simple courtesy of being allowed to attend school with Lily, and the flourishing signature Professor Albus Dumbledore had her teeth grinding.

This definitely endeared her to me, as did her answer to Dumbledore's letter.

This said, you do a fantastic job at showing a realistic Petunia, not whitewashed but full of shades of grey. The structure of your story works really well: Showing only this special day throughout the years allows the reader to follow closely Petunia's change as well as to see her in a special light outside her usual surroundings. I love how you not only show her differences to Lily but also their similarities, how horse-faced Petunia can be beautiful, too.

I love the symbolism of the wilted lily blooming again. Especially the initial scene, when Petunia returns to the grave crying to see Snape doing his magic. Their bonding over this makes so much sense!

I love the slow buildup of their relationship and the way Petunia slowly starts to tolerate magic. Wesley is a wonderful OC to show this development.

Great use of the playground. Love that last scene between them in its urgency and despair!

And your Daisy Dursley must be the most original OC I've ever seen.

Thank you again for this brilliant gift!

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	Re: Squeeeeeee!!! lash_larue 2012-05-27 08:34 pm UTC (link)
	You're quite welcome! I really enjoyed writing this, even though it sent me to the books on a regular basis to work out what happened when, ;) The hard part was finding a remotely plausible way for them to actually be together, I'm very happy that it worked for you, L (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	Re: Squeeeeeee!!! pale_moonlight 2012-05-28 09:41 pm UTC (link)
	I knew it was you. I KNEW it! I only didn't believe it because it's the second amazing fic you wrote for me in this fest. Thank you so much again! ♥ (Reply to this) (Parent)

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