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hdcup_mod (hdcup_mod) wrote in hd_worldcup,
@ 2008-04-01 07:20:00

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fic, prompt: the fool, r, round i, team canon

Fool (Or, The Many Good Deeds of Draco Malfoy) -- Team Canon
Title: Fool (Or, The Many Good Deeds of Draco Malfoy)
Team: Canon
Author: avocado_love
Prompt: The Fool
Wordcount: 18,000+
Rating: R
Warnings: EWE, language, sexual situations
Summary: "You haven’t done one brave or noble thing in your life, Malfoy. Then you come into my house and ask me why I won’t do the right thing for you? What have you ever done for anyone?"
Author's Note Explanation of The Fool card is contained in the fic. Many glorious thanks to my betas!

Fool (Or, The Many Good Deeds of Draco Malfoy)

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Review!

greenjuly
2008-04-05 11:53 pm UTC (link)

Hi Mystery Author,

Nice story. I enjoyed your characterization of Draco and Harry – I liked the way Malfoy was still pretty bratty yet had mellowed out a bit, and Harry didn’t just drop his old prejudices and forgive him, as seems to happen in many fics.
Thank you for addressing the issue of wand allegiance! A lot of post-DH fics ignore the fact that Harry has Draco’s wand, which is strange since it was such a central plot point in DH.

A few crits though (I hope you don’t mind constructive criticism) :

1. Harry waiting 1 ½ hours for Ginny? Who would wait for THAT long, let alone Harry? A more plausible time would have been 25 minutes.
2. Draco buying a dog was a bit of a *bemused stare* moment for me. But I will accept it as a plot device.
3. I also didn’t really buy Kreacher reporting to Draco out of the blue like that. Was there a cut scene that expanded on this?
4. Where were Hermione and Ron? You implied that they were somehow absent, but never elaborated on this.
5. I know this is a H/D fic, but I don’t like cheating!Ginny.
6. The word sauvé. I’ll admit that pseudo-French is one of my pet peeves, but c’mon, you or your beta should have caught this one. The word you want is suave. «Sauvé» does exist in French, as the past participle of the verb «sauver» [to save, rescue], but it’s obviously not near the meaning that you are looking for.
7. I thought that Harry’s attraction to Draco was a bit out of the blue ... for me this story would have worked better as a gen/friendship fic.

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