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snarrymod (snarrymod) wrote in snarry_games,
@ 2008-04-25 08:17:00

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TEAM PHOENIX ENTRY: Unbroken Halo "Revealing Truth"
Title: Revealing Truth
Author: unbroken_halo
Team: Phoenix
Genre(s): Postwar
Prompt(s): Sleeplessness, Time Capsule
Rating/Warnings/Kinks: R *Spoilers for DH/ wanking*
Word Count: ~14,968 without DH quotes/ ~15,179 with DH quotes
Summary: “The search for truth is more precious than its possession.” By Albert Einstein
A/N: Text between * taken directly from Harry Potter and The Deathly Hallows, American Edition pages 682-683. Thank you to Team Phoenix for their support, brainstorming and encouragement. You are a brilliant group of people and I am better for having been allowed to work with you all. Many more thank yous to leela_cat, irana and sevs_lil_secret for the betas.
Disclaimer: Harry Potter and all related characters in this verse are owned by JK Rowling and her subsidiaries. This is a piece of fiction based on that work and is in no way associated with said persons or draws monetary gain.

"Revealing Truth by Unbroken Halo"

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	amand_r 2008-04-25 03:43 pm UTC (link)
	I really liked this. I'm a sucker for aftermath stories, and your dialogue is fantastic. The time capsule idea is great--sneaky!Snape is sneaky! (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 03:50 pm UTC

	alisanne 2008-04-25 03:53 pm UTC (link)
	Yay! Oh, darling, you know how I love this fic. The descriptions were great, Harry stumbling his way to the truth (oh how I love clueless!Harry!) and sneaky, snarky Snape... these are all some of my foolproof buttons. ;) Great job! Go Team Phoenix! bounces (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 04:24 pm UTC

	sweetmelodykiss 2008-04-25 04:11 pm UTC (link)
	That was absolutely wonderful! I really loved the ending. Well done! (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 04:22 pm UTC

	eeyore9990 2008-04-25 04:42 pm UTC (link)
	Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeheheheheehe!!! YAY! Okay, so now I'm going to go roll around with your fic some more and giggle in a very evil manner... BRB with more commentary... (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 04:48 pm UTC

torino10154
2008-04-25 04:50 pm UTC (link)

I can't tell you how many ways I loved this - it's only the second games fic I pimped on my journal. I love Harry's obsession with Snape, the clues (I love a mystery!) and you win for this line - Does it feel good when you are all alone and missing your little red haired chit? It seems we have that little fetish in common doesn't it, boy? GAH! I love it. Will be re-reading for sure.

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unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 05:07 pm UTC

	cruisedirector 2008-04-25 05:06 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, I enjoyed that! I like it when Harry is clueless without coming off as too stupid to be, well, Harry Potter, and when Snape is sneaky and snarky and cynical without actually being horrible. Nice! (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 05:24 pm UTC

	snarry_fan7 2008-04-25 05:08 pm UTC (link)
	Excellent work! I love the descriptions and I like how you tie in quotes from DH with the story. Lovely development too with the plot. Well done.~Sophia (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 05:30 pm UTC

florida_minxie
2008-04-25 05:17 pm UTC (link)

*tries scrolling down*

What do you mean it's over? But... but, I want more.

*pouts*

After reading this lovely tale, darling, I have no idea why you were hiding under the bed with me. Well, other than the gropes and snogs, of course. *g*

Well done you! I enjoyed every minute of it. I about snorted Coke through my nose when Snape mentioned their shared fetish. And yes, while I enjoyed the ending, I practically wailed that the story was over.

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unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 09:13 pm UTC

florida_minxie, 2008-04-25 09:41 pm UTC

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 09:46 pm UTC

wichie
2008-04-25 05:29 pm UTC (link)

"Aaaaaah! Guh! Aug! AUG!"

My exact response when I remembered, reading the last line, that this post is a one-shot. Which is fitting, I guess, as it's all about 'closure'. But that doesn't mean I appreciate not getting any. And I don't think Harry and Severus appreciate it either. *HINTHINT*

That said, I like the characters in the story, because they are such a great look at how people together for a 'cause' become estranged when their focus shifts. I've always thought that Harry wouldn't really know how to be a mellow person, because as much action as H and R took on, it was always really Harry who was running around, chasing things. The war, and everything else, was really about those 'lost boys of Hogwarts', and I think your fic does a great job of keeping them in focus while showing them for what they really are.

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unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 09:37 pm UTC

	radiho 2008-04-25 05:46 pm UTC (link)
	it was awesome! but what happens next?! T_T (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 09:41 pm UTC

	ex_lilyseyes671 2008-04-25 05:54 pm UTC (link)
	What a delightful treat to start the day!! I loved poor Harry and that line "You really stoppered death..." was great! Excellent - even if it is for the 'other team'! (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 09:48 pm UTC

	1taintedsoul 2008-04-25 06:42 pm UTC (link)
	Fantastic! Great way to bring back Snape and I love the connection between them because of the life-debt. (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 09:51 pm UTC

	gin_tonic 2008-04-25 06:53 pm UTC (link)
	Yay! This was brilliant! I love it when Harry has to follow clues and riddles - especially if he gets Snape in the end! And Snape, the lucky beast, getting to see everything! (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 09:55 pm UTC

	fbowden 2008-04-25 07:44 pm UTC (link)
	Oh yes, I agree with everyone else, we definitely need to know what happened next!!! This was such a lovely fic, congratulations! xx (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 09:59 pm UTC

	klynie1 2008-04-25 08:32 pm UTC (link)
	I've always thought the life debt dynamic to be a fascinating one, even more so when it comes to Harry and Snape, who dislike each other so intensely. I love your Snape - he's perfect - and you've captured Harry's obsessive nature perfectly. Great story and outstanding characterization! (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-25 10:08 pm UTC

	lalaith_niniel 2008-04-25 09:14 pm UTC (link)
	What a fantastically creepy story! I love the use of the prompts, but especially how you made the life debt into such a bond. The characterization is was great, from Snape's surliness to Hermione's insisting that Harry throw away the books, even though it goes against her thirst for learning. (Reply to this)

	carpet_diemon 2008-04-25 10:49 pm UTC (link)
	ooh perfect. your snape, i love his making out like a bandit with the life debt. (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-26 01:05 pm UTC

aeryun
2008-04-25 11:15 pm UTC (link)

Just so you know, your story formatting must have been messed up. It cut out a huge section, I know there HAS to be more. That "The End" at the bottom had to have been wrong!!!!!!! Come on woman, you can't leave us hanging like that, eventually our arms will get tired and we'll fall. And you really don't want that many broken bones on your conscious, do you?

Well, what I got to read was great! Poor Harry was always a little slow on the up-take. Sneaky, Snarky, Slytherin Severus! (Ever wonder why all his best descriptions start with S?) He was at his best, even mostly dead. Wonderful job! Can't wait for the rest! just get that formatting fixed so we can see it! ;)
*hugs*
Aery

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unbroken_halo, 2008-04-26 01:07 pm UTC

	telwyrd 2008-04-26 12:18 am UTC (link)
	A most fascinating story. It was interesting to see how Harry slowly figured things out and eventually save Snape. Heh, I had a hunch that there was something not quite right about Williamson. The ending left me sputtering in disbelief. That's just not right! All in all, this was a lovely story. Good job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-26 01:09 pm UTC

joanwilder
2008-04-26 12:19 am UTC (link)

I really liked how you used the Life Debt as the prime mover in the story. Excellent weaving of canon with your text, great clueless!Harry, and omg tomb!pR0n! The ending took me by surprise, but given what you told us about Harry and Snape, I have detailed files with which to feed my imagination.:)

Excellent use of your prompts and genre. A very enjoyable read! Well done!

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unbroken_halo, 2008-04-26 01:18 pm UTC

	ivylady 2008-04-26 02:05 am UTC (link)
	Great story and such an interesting use of the Life Debt idea. I do like Harry sticking to his principles even when everyone else thinks he's nuts. Williamson was a nice foil who didn't really detract from the story. I was just sad that it ended before they got to the smexing. sniffles LOL. (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-26 01:21 pm UTC

	boussole 2008-04-26 03:05 am UTC (link)
	Ahhhh~ Amazing! >____< ~♥ Oooh~ I just love that! I adore the idea of the life debts in the first place and this was just a lovely use of them! how connected do you think we are after all these months? shivers I just loved that line~ And the painting and Dumbledore just laughing. Gah~ And the last few lines~ Ahh~ There's so much i enjoyed about this fic! (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-26 01:25 pm UTC

	gatto_indaco 2008-04-26 03:07 am UTC (link)
	That can't be the end. (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-26 01:26 pm UTC

	keyairreem 2008-04-26 04:50 am UTC (link)
	Next. . . NEXT... hey my next button seems to be missing! Where is the next part?? LOL Lovely job! Well done! (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-26 01:28 pm UTC

	missdreamer 2008-04-26 10:11 am UTC (link)
	Teddy was cute. And the phoenix toy! Loved it! Haha (Reply to this) (Thread)

unbroken_halo, 2008-04-26 01:29 pm UTC

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