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snarrymod (snarrymod) wrote in snarry_games,
@ 2008-04-23 08:11:00

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TEAM PHOENIX ENTRY: Eriador 117 "The Ghost of Dursley Hall"
Title: The Ghost of Dursley Hall
Author: eriador117
Team: Phoenix
Genre(s): Alternate Reality *Hover/Click for Games Definition of Alternate Reality*, Romance
Prompt(s): Sleeplessness
Rating/Warnings/Kinks: NC-17; *Under 18 (15+), angst, child abuse.*
Word Count: 22,600 approx.
Summary: Dursley Hall is rumoured to be haunted, but when Severus Snape becomes a tutor for Dudley Dursley, the truth is much more unexpected than that...
A/N: Beta’d by Rakina, thanks so much! Thanks also to Team Phoenix for help with the ideas within :) My Snarry take on a Gothic Romance ;)

"The Ghost of Dursley Hall by Eriador117"

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	yura_slash 2008-04-25 05:23 am UTC (link)
	this may be my favorite story by you- it was wonderful! and the line at the end? priceless! there really is "a ghost of dursley hall." :) (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:11 pm UTC

	rakina 2008-04-25 12:08 pm UTC (link)
	Annette, I really enjoyed betaing this story, and it's a joy to re-read in its final form. A very original idea, a Gothic Romance Snarry, and beautifully executed by you. The genre is made for you, love. Well done! (even if you are on that team, hehe). (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:12 pm UTC

	1taintedsoul 2008-04-25 01:39 pm UTC (link)
	Oh well done Annette! Lovely setting,beautiful prose and a wonderful twist at the end. One of your best pieces yet. hugs (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:12 pm UTC

	nightcolors 2008-04-26 12:14 am UTC (link)
	Oh, so there really was a ghost. That last bit really was rather spooky. Good job! I honestly didn't suspect a thing! It was sweet. I was happy for Harry and Severus at the end. :) Thank you. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:12 pm UTC

	b_e_skrewt 2008-04-26 12:53 am UTC (link)
	Another stunning h/c from my favorite h/c writer :) eriador117, I just can't get enough of your fic! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:12 pm UTC

	quill_lumos 2008-04-26 10:33 am UTC (link)
	What a wonderful Gothic tale! I adored whole story, the way that Severus fell in love, the way that Harry was so sweet and yet so strong and their wonderful escape. I also loved the way that you included canon characters and wove a story around them. I adored Neville's role too. Masterly story telling. hugs Lucie xxxx (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:13 pm UTC

	josan 2008-04-26 01:54 pm UTC (link)
	OMG! Shades of Georgette Heyer, Jane Austen and Charlotte Bronte! YES!!!! You got everyone in! (SS and Young William...in the stable? Oh, my!) De Sade? One of the Potter ancestors was rather wicked, n'est-ce pas? Loved how the atmosphere and the language fit the Gothicness of the story. And the ending was a real kicker! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:13 pm UTC

	mimiheart 2008-04-26 04:34 pm UTC (link)
	Wow. This was a wonderful fic. Haunting and hot and everything I like. Well done. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:14 pm UTC

	klynie1 2008-04-26 06:15 pm UTC (link)
	I'm a sucker for Victorian romances. This was so much fun - thank you! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:14 pm UTC

	rubymiene 2008-04-27 06:46 am UTC (link)
	asdfkl; Omg, that last line killed me. Love the gothic setting and characters. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:15 pm UTC

aliciamasters
2008-04-27 05:37 pm UTC (link)

I think this was really a terrific piece! The Gothic atmosphere kept it from getting too melodramatic, and lent itself to the pacing and the relationship. With menace around every corner, it's no surprise that they were clinging to one another.

It really worked well, from start to finish. I loved the Jane Eyre imagery, and the ending was spot-on. Your Harry was innocent and vulnerable, but you gave him an inner strength that kept him from being a victim with Snape; difficult to do in chan. I admire your deftness!

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eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:11 pm UTC

elvirablue
2008-04-27 08:33 pm UTC (link)

I enjoyed this a lot. The setting, the characters and the plot worked together effortlessly and I found myself immersed in your story right from the catchy first paragraph to the startling last line. (Like Severus, I couldn’t help wondering why William wasn’t dismissed. *g*).

The mystery with the books was a lovely way to introduce the ”ghost” and I loved Severus and Harry’s nocturnal meetings. They were heartbreaking and sweet and had a delicate touch of humour.

After their dramatic escape, I was relieved to learn that the Grangers were such decent people. Doctor Pomfrey was great too, telling Harry about the facts of life. Also, it was nice to see how Harry and Severus talked about their relationship. I loved this:

"It's not what I want that counts, Harry. Is this what you want?"
"Then yes, I want you to live with me," said Harry firmly. Harry fluttered his eyelashes as he'd seen Katie do to one of the footmen. "I want you, Severus."
Severus choked on his chocolate and set the cup down, coughing and spluttering. "Harry, do you even know what you're asking for?"

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eriador117, 2008-04-30 12:43 pm UTC

	salvadora 2008-04-27 08:38 pm UTC (link)
	That was... the best. Plot of greatness, and smex smex smex! And I snorted with laughter at seeing who the cook was. :) (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 12:42 pm UTC

lovesseamstress
2008-04-29 04:36 am UTC (link)

Well done...you definitely achieved that Gothic feel. Dursley was so evil (shudders), and I loved the way you incorporated the additional characters. So heartwrenching, Severus' almost instant love for Harry, but his fears of leading him into further danger. Of course, he rescues Harry in the end. I liked the Neville tidbit at the end, but felt a little confused. Wasn't Neville around in the earlier part of the story? Or was Snape (and Harry) seeing the actual ghost? Anyway, great read!

-C

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whitestar, 2008-04-29 09:40 am UTC

eriador117, 2008-04-30 12:41 pm UTC

	athenakt 2008-04-29 12:15 pm UTC (link)
	Very well written, with well placed details of the time period which were present but not too present. An enjoyable read! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-05 08:25 am UTC

	kookoolaka 2008-04-29 09:17 pm UTC (link)
	I love these type of stories. The end about Neville was creepy, good creepy. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 12:41 pm UTC

	(Anonymous) 2008-04-30 02:30 am UTC (link)
	Holy crap! that was soo good. All the little time period details and that last line geez. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 12:40 pm UTC

	spike7451 2008-05-01 04:32 pm UTC (link)
	As always I adore your portrayals of Severus and Harry. Liked how you wove in all the other characters, done very well. And the twist at the end, not expected at all, very clever. A brilliant fic that was a joy to read. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-02 12:36 pm UTC

nestinghedwig
2008-05-04 02:46 pm UTC (link)

What a delightful homage to the gothic romance genre you have created... definite shades of "Jane Eyre" (my all-time favorite novel). Loved the use of cannon characters, some in most unexpected roles, the beautifully detailed atmosphere...

And let's not forget that there actually WAS a ghost of Dursley Hall...just not the ghost we expected! I just love a good twist!

Well done, fellow Phoenix!

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eriador117, 2008-05-07 03:26 am UTC

	maddiec24 2008-05-06 04:53 am UTC (link)
	Oh my, Gothic Snarry. sigh I love this one a lot. And the last line... perfect! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-07 03:27 am UTC

	gifted_goofball 2008-05-06 01:54 pm UTC (link)
	"You'll be the death of me," I believe that line from Severus is a must in a Snarry ;o) Amazing how you fit all the characters in a complete different Reality/Time. And that twist at the end O_o once more an remarkable story. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-07 03:27 am UTC

	shadowess 2008-05-06 05:16 pm UTC (link)
	lovely work on this fic. I felt very immersed in the time of the story. I love the undertone of menace during the fic. I love the little twist at the ending, and the interaction between Harry and Severus was perfect. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-07 03:28 am UTC

	yivel 2008-05-09 10:23 am UTC (link)
	adores you This was absolutely fantastic. I loved every bit of it. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-11 04:02 am UTC

	wonderful work...but... meglw0228 2008-05-14 02:04 am UTC (link)
	OMG, this was absolutely brilliant! Usually I don't like non-magic AR's but, this I loved!!!!!! Very great characterizations, and dynamic of the story! But I'm so very confused! Neville?? Died?? How, Why?? My opinion...It's definitely time for a sequel! Very awesome work! And Good Luck to your team! (Reply to this) (Thread)

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eriador117, 2008-05-23 02:27 pm UTC

	laurapetri 2008-05-17 06:47 am UTC (link)
	love the twist ending (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-23 02:28 pm UTC

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