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snarrymod (snarrymod) wrote in snarry_games,
@ 2008-04-23 08:11:00

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TEAM PHOENIX ENTRY: Eriador 117 "The Ghost of Dursley Hall"
Title: The Ghost of Dursley Hall
Author: eriador117
Team: Phoenix
Genre(s): Alternate Reality *Hover/Click for Games Definition of Alternate Reality*, Romance
Prompt(s): Sleeplessness
Rating/Warnings/Kinks: NC-17; *Under 18 (15+), angst, child abuse.*
Word Count: 22,600 approx.
Summary: Dursley Hall is rumoured to be haunted, but when Severus Snape becomes a tutor for Dudley Dursley, the truth is much more unexpected than that...
A/N: Beta’d by Rakina, thanks so much! Thanks also to Team Phoenix for help with the ideas within :) My Snarry take on a Gothic Romance ;)

"The Ghost of Dursley Hall by Eriador117"

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	telwyrd 2008-04-24 01:47 am UTC (link)
	An intriguing tale with a surprising twist at the end. Well done! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-29 09:19 am UTC

boussole
2008-04-24 02:04 am UTC (link)

*is still speechless in awe* Phoaaa~ What a fic! Really! Wow! Just amazing! I think i'd retell the entire story if i wanted to list everything i loved about this! I love all of the little cameos throughout the fic of different characters. Harry thinking he was in hell was such a wonderful and haunting idea and Dursley as the devil fit all too well. Harry and Severus are so wonderful together in this and i had a little squeefest towards the end~ (Yay for pushy bottoms! ^____^) AND THE ENDING! Oh my god, the ending! You just killed me with that! I'm flailing again just thinking about it! Waaaa~ Perfect! I've been reading a lot of Gothic and Romance period fiction for class lately and this really hit the spot as i was hankering for some more~ ^_____^ ~♥♥♥♥ x a million!

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eriador117, 2008-04-29 09:20 am UTC

	littleroo27 2008-04-24 02:10 am UTC (link)
	ohhh, lovely, as always! I got goosebumps both from the sadness and the sultry scenes; yummm. The only bit that hit me as "off" was that Severus gave Harry Neville's shoes when they escaped, but if Neville had died earlier, why would they still be out? Other than that tiny bit, I adored every word (glomps) (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-28 08:04 am UTC

	iulia_linnea 2008-04-24 02:28 am UTC (link)
	Good ol' Neville. huggles him And yay, Gothic Snarry! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-29 09:20 am UTC

iulia_linnea, 2008-04-29 09:38 am UTC

	miriravan 2008-04-24 02:59 am UTC (link)
	A nice twist on the gothic genre, and I liked all the cameos by other canon characters. But my favorite part was definitely the ending twist, even though it also made me sad. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-29 09:21 am UTC

	whitestar 2008-04-24 03:06 am UTC (link)
	Very interesting idea, I enjoyed it. it was sad about Neville, but it's nice to know that he was a kind ghost and that Harry would've not likely survived if it wasn't for Neville. His dad should be proud :) (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-29 09:21 am UTC

	keyairreem 2008-04-24 03:07 am UTC (link)
	Way to go Neville! Lovely story! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-29 09:22 am UTC

	strawbeby 2008-04-24 03:15 am UTC (link)
	loved it! Not cheesy at all and entertaining. I could really feel the characters and then the end just blew my mind :D (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-29 09:22 am UTC

	aeryun 2008-04-24 03:17 am UTC (link)
	Oh wow. I'm speechless once again! Wonderful story. Thank you! Aery (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:15 pm UTC

	simons_flower 2008-04-24 04:06 am UTC (link)
	What an absolutely fascinating AR. I love historical romance novels, and this fit right into that genre. Poor Harry! You really had Vernon do a number on him, but I think it's not that much of a stretch from canon to do so. And the ending? Wow. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:16 pm UTC

	calico_sky 2008-04-24 05:05 am UTC (link)
	Lovely ghost story! ;) (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:16 pm UTC

	slashpine 2008-04-24 05:39 am UTC (link)
	What a fun story! It's Gothic romance at its finest, with creepy characters, dark secrets, and lost loves - though not for Harry and Severus. The love between them is very sweet, and the twist at the end is a treat! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:16 pm UTC

suze_y
2008-04-24 11:17 am UTC (link)

Oh ... wow! Brava!! This is just wonderful. And I actually got goosebumps reading the last line.

I tend to be wary of AR fics -- I suppose because I've grown so attached to the characters as I've come to know them that things can feel uncomfortably jangly and "off" when they're deprived of their magic and usual settings. Yet somehow, you've made everything feel exactly right -- not a jangle or "off" feeling in sight. It's so beautifully written, and the characters are so neatly and perfectly transplanted -- it almost feels like this could be where they really belong and Hogwarts is the AR.

Love the compassion of Hermione's parents, and Filch's star turn, too. Thanks for this -- it's one I'll read again and again.

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eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:17 pm UTC

	plantinshadows 2008-04-24 04:34 pm UTC (link)
	I very much liked this fic... woohoo!! especially since I usually don't particularly like alternative reality fictions.. BUT I just can't believe that Severus found Harry's prostate only after 5 years!!! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:18 pm UTC

akuma_river
2008-04-24 05:18 pm UTC (link)

If a person ever needed a story to read to hate Vernon Dursley, this is the story to read.

When read from Harry's point of view, in the beginning, as he thought himself a ghost. It was so sad. Harry thought himself a ghost and his uncle the devil.

I hope they hang the bastard.

Loved the ending. Though I'm kinda shocked that Harry isn't still suffering from nightmares. That kind of abuse, for that many years, it would leave a mark on the psyche far more damaging than what is alluded to.

But maybe he was healed with Severus' love?

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eriador117, 2008-04-30 01:19 pm UTC

	majmunka 2008-04-24 06:22 pm UTC (link)
	Amazing story. I love this kind of historical settings. That last turn is brilliant :D But I somewhat want to chide Sev. Kept him 5 years to find Harry's prostate! Guh! :D (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-01 09:22 am UTC

	torino10154 2008-04-24 07:48 pm UTC (link)
	Wow. This was so intriguing. I really like AR setting and you did a fantastic job placing the characters. Poor, poor Harry. I have to say I really didn't expect the very end at all, so you did something right there. Fascinating read. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-01 09:22 am UTC

	meri_oddities 2008-04-24 08:36 pm UTC (link)
	Yay Neville. I loved that last line. g Interesting and intriguing storyline. Very Gothic. Good Job! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-01 09:22 am UTC

	zalil_z 2008-04-24 09:53 pm UTC (link)
	Wow! This was more than awesome! I like very few AUs, but you kept all the characters IC and the relationships between them similar to canon, yet you managed to make it all original and thrilling and delicious - Chapeau! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-01 09:23 am UTC

	themostepotente 2008-04-24 10:45 pm UTC (link)
	What an intriguing AR! Very Bronté-esque! I do love a good period Snarry. Enjoyed this muchly :-) GO TEAM PHOENIX!!! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-01 09:23 am UTC

	cadence_k 2008-04-24 11:51 pm UTC (link)
	I love the tone of this story! The creepiness of Dursley Hall was done incredibly well and I loved Snape's attraction and caring for Harry. Also, you just about killed me at the end! What a great twist! Wonderful story. Thank you so much for sharing! (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-01 09:23 am UTC

	leela_cat 2008-04-25 12:42 am UTC (link)
	I have such a soft spot for gothic Victoriana, and this was a lovely example. The last line was a lovely way to jolt us back to one of my favourite exchanges in the story: "I don't believe in ghosts." "That don't matter. Not when they believe in you." Very nicely done. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-01 09:24 am UTC

	ziasudra 2008-04-25 12:42 am UTC (link)
	Nice job! I had liked the beginning bits you've posted in the team comm a few months back, and I'm so glad I now got to read the rest of it. I must say, I was quite surprised by the last line... what a kicker! Go Team Phoenix :D (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-01 09:24 am UTC

	lalaith_niniel 2008-04-25 02:50 am UTC (link)
	Oh. Wow. That ending was so brilliant; it sent chills through me! The story as a whole was brilliant as well, with a great romance and Harry's innocence was so touching; I absolutely loved the Sleeping Beauty bit. (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-01 09:25 am UTC

	hambares 2008-04-25 03:58 am UTC (link)
	OMG! You totally blew me away with the ending! That was ... that was ... you know, I don't think I can come up with words to describe what it was. I was simly blown away! It seemed through the entire story that ghosts were being disproved, and you end it with a real ghost. Goodness woman! I love you! So clever. You win - hands down! bows humbly (Reply to this) (Thread)

eriador117, 2008-05-01 09:25 am UTC

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