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Ride of the Valkyrie

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Title Ride of the Valkyrie
Author mary-j-59
Genre Genfic, short story, about 2,000 words. Severus Snape and OC, g-rated.Brief Summary: J.K. Rowling told us it would be important to know something about the staff members' families, and whether or not they were married. Well, guess what? Severus was, and his wife is a woman of some skill and resourcefulness. The events of May 2 from her pov.
Thanks and Dedication This is for Sigune, and was inspired by two of her drawings, one of which can be found here: http://sigune.deviantart.com/art/Ride-of-the-Valkyrie-61065273.
I'm afraid I don't have a link for "True Love's Kiss" on the snape art contest site. If you have it, Sigune, could you let us know? Thanks for the wonderful art!
And thanks to my sister and Cardigrl for proofreading this one for me.


Ride of the Valkyrie

I would have done better, I reflected, to have brought an Abraxian winged horse. At least I could have seen it.

There was at least one thestral in front of us. Severus had said so. "My cloak - give them my cloak," he had gasped, and then he had fainted again. This was not very helpful. I suppose I shouldn't have expected more given what he seemed to have been through, but I was at a loss.

I shouldn't have been there at all if it hadn't been for my mother and the bladder wrack. The summer before Severus was appointed as headmaster of Hogwarts - just last summer, but it seems years ago now - I was visiting her, when she asked after him. "That boy is of the deep ocean," she said, holding the damp bit of weed out to me. "If you are worried for him; if you want to know if he is well, this will tell you."

I hesitated, but took it in the end. Severus snorted when I held it out and explained what he must do. "Arrant foolishness," he said. "A Hag's superstition." I didn't argue. It is never profitable to argue with Severus. I simply reminded him that Mutti was very fond of him, and that it would please her if he did as she requested. I did not add that it would please me, as well. He frowned, but took out his potions knife and carefully sliced one forefinger, letting his blood drop onto the seaweed as I recited the charm my mother had given me. As we watched, the blood turned from vivid dark red to a rust color and seemed to fade into the weed and vanish. As Mutti had instructed, I hung the piece of bladder wrack up by the door and checked it at least twice a day - more often if the news seemed bad and I was feeling anxious.

Muggles apparently use such charms as a way to forecast the weather, or so Severus told me. That was not my purpose. On the evening of the second of May, something compelled me to check the weed a third time. It was dripping blood. I heard myself gasp when I saw the slow, heavy drops splash to the floor. For a moment I stood frozen, but then I picked up the bag of supplies I had ready and Apparated to Hogwarts.

You cannot, of course, Apparate within the grounds, so I chose to land near the Shrieking Shack, thinking that the Death Eaters, being a superstitious lot, might have left that building empty. But it was not empty. When I took out my wand and did a finding charm, the stick pointed straight at the shack. I Disillusioned myself quickly and ran to the door. I expected that it would be sealed against me; so far as I knew, even Severus had never managed to get inside when we were students. But, to my surprise and unease, it opened easily to a simple Alohamora.

There seemed at first to be no one inside, whether alive or dead, but my finding charm kept guiding me forward. I went past packing crates, shabby old furniture, cobwebs - and then I saw him, lying on his back in a pool of blood. Out of the corner of my eye, I caught a flash of red-gold, and lunged forward to cover his body with my own lest the curse hit him. That was my first instinct, but in another moment I had aimed my wand and shielded both him and me. I looked round carefully, ready to fight for our lives. There was no attacker. There was no one there at all except for the two of us. I fumbled in the bag of supplies I had brought, surprised to see my hands shaking, and pulled out all the things a sensible person would bring to a battle zone - blood replenishing potion, a bezoar, dittany and other healing herbs. I was certain Severus would have been well supplied, but, whatever medicines he might have taken before disaster struck, he clearly needed more. His heart still beat, to my relief, but his pulse was weak, and he almost choked when I tried to get the bezoar down his throat. I put my mouth on his and breathed air into his lungs until I saw his chest rise and fall. Then I fed him potions.

"That tastes disgusting," I head him murmur as I poured Strengthening Solution into his mouth. "Where did you find it?"

"You brewed it," I told him. "Swallow!" He obeyed, grimacing, and I saw some color come back into his cheeks. He struggled to sit up, whispering hoarsely, "The boy - I must find the boy. Must explain -"

I supposed he was talking about Harry Potter, the bane of his existence, and I shook my head. "No. What makes you think he will listen to you? We need to get you home."

"I promised - promised I would guard him. If he dies -"

"If he dies," I said firmly, "it is not your fault! What more do you think you can do for him? I am going home, and you are going with me!"

"My fault," Severus said, faintly but clearly. He had managed to get to his knees, with my help, but as he spoke, his eyes closed and he pitched forward. I lunged under him to keep him from breaking his nose, and we landed in an awkward tangle. Cursing, the breath knocked out of me, I managed to wriggle free and rolled him over again to pour more blood replenisher and Strengthening Solution down his throat. "Wake up!" I demanded.

Severus choked and sputtered, but eventually swallowed, his eyes fluttering open. "Brynhild," he whispered, "help me. Harry-"

"Never mind him! Severus, listen to me! I have given you a general antivenin and blood replenishing potion and Strengthening Solution. You are the healer. What more should I do? "

"No more. The wound – stop the bleeding."

His hair was matted with blood; it soaked his cloak and his robe almost down to his waist, but I could see no wound. "It’s stopped," I told him. "Come, now." And I used a levitation spell to help him to his feet. Together we staggered to the door, which swung open at a touch. Lucky for us, I supposed – I had more than half expected it to seal itself after I entered - but it made me even more uneasy. Were we walking into an ambush? Would Voldemort himself be waiting for us outside?

Our luck held, however. There were screams and shouting and flashes of red and green light coming from the village, but no one was anywhere near the Shrieking Shack. Having found Severus, I wanted more than anything to simply side-Apparate him home, but I hesitated. Apparation was uncomfortable at the best of times, and could be actually dangerous, and Severus was very weak. He had lost so much blood that it was a marvel he could stand. I bit my lip and tried to think what we could do. Why had I simply Apparated here; why hadn’t I thought to bring a broom? But brooms were slow; we had hundreds of miles to travel, even if we stopped at my home in London. "Thestrals," Severus whispered in my ear. "Go toward the Forest. Thestrals will come."

We staggered a few paces away from the village, Severus leaning on my shoulder. For such a scrawny man, he was surprisingly heavy. I stumbled and nearly fell when he stopped suddenly. "Ah," he said, in a satisfied tone. "Thestrals". He was staring forward and a little to the right, towards an oak tree at the edge of the forest. I stared in the same direction, and saw absolutely nothing.

"Where?" I asked him.

"My cloak - give them my cloak," he answered, fumbling at the fastening. Then his knees buckled again. I managed to renew my levitation charm before he fell, and lowered him to a sitting position. Carefully, wincing at the smell and feel of it, I took the cloak off his slumped shoulders and flung it on the grass in front of me.

A moment later, I saw one corner of the cloth rise into the air, as though an invisible tongue were licking at it. Then it dropped onto the grass, and rose again, this time with a tearing sound. I quickly performed Scourgify and every other cleaning spell I could think of on my husband; if these creatures were attracted to blood, I did not want them licking or tearing him. When I looked back at the cloak, it was in three pieces, one dangling in the air and the others lifting and falling rhythmically. Half fascinated, half horrified, I took a step toward the nearest piece of cloth with my hands held out in front of me, and found myself touching something like a horse's side.

"Good," Severus's faint voice came from behind me. "Get on it."

Get on it? How was I to mount a creature I couldn't see? "Severus," I said, "tell me what you see. How can I get on?"

But there was no answer. I felt the invisible creature in front of me – ribs, a spine, something like a leathery wing. It seemed I might be able to sit behind the wing. And yes, there was a mane on the neck. I grasped it and pulled myself up. It was very strange to be perched more than a meter and a half above the ground, with no visible means of support. Yet the creature's spine was already pushing into my tailbone. It seemed as bony as Severus himself, and most uncomfortable to sit on.

Still, I was up. I aimed my wand at Severus and levitated him in front of me. Then I conjured ropes and fastened us both, as best I could, to our invisible steed. To my relief, the creature stood as still as a stone throughout this exercise. To my distress, it stood equally still when I punched its scrawny sides with my heels and cried, "Go!" I had an uneasy feeling that a head was turning toward me, its ears laid back. But, no matter how I pleaded and kicked at it, the thestral refused to take off.

"London," Severus whispered. I could feel him struggling to sit up straighter, but he was only half- conscious, if that. One word from him, though, accomplished what my efforts had not. The thestral leaped into the air and surged forward at a speed that brought tears to my eyes. "Brynhild," Severus said. I could barely hear his hoarse voice over the wind of the thestral's passage. "Tell it where you need to go."

I considered for a moment. St. Mungo's? No; Severus did not need a lot of strangers fussing at him. Besides, I was not at all convinced that he would be safe there, or anywhere in Britain. Mutti and I could look after him; we would get him to Germany when he was well enough to travel further. In the meantime, he could hide in my London flat. Speaking as clearly and loudly as I could, I gave the beast the address.

No, thestrals were not comfortable to sit on, but the flight was rapid and surprisingly smooth. The hardest thing, I thought, was being so very high up with no visible means of support. If I closed my eyes, I could imagine something much more satisfying. A beautiful winged stallion, pure white – no, not a stallion, a mare. Her mane would match my hair exactly, and she would have a kind and intelligent face. I would sit boldy astride, bearing Severus to the hall of Warriors.

At that thought, I opened my eyes in a panic lest I had ill-wished us. He must not die now, after all the risks I had taken to rescue him! Severus was slumped against me, but his grip on the thestral's mane had not slackened, and his breathing was steady. I gasped with relief, and closed my eyes again against the wind. In spite of myself, I conjured up the fine white horse in my mind's eye, and began humming. Had he been stronger, I am sure Severus would have complained loudly – he insists I have a tin ear – but he was either semiconscious or asleep. So I hummed on from the "Ride of the Valkyrie".

Severus was not dead, true. But I was Brynhild, and I was bringing my fallen warrior home.

Hijotoho!


Mary Johnson, July 2008. Written for Sigune in response to two of her drawings.
  • Oh my! That was an amazing take on Severus's surviving Nagini and Voldmort. I loved Brynhild's pragmatic, understated voice. Her actions spoke her emotions so eloquently. The old-fashioned, 1st person story-telling style of the fic was perfect, too.

    I'd love to know what house you believe Brynhild was in. For bravery she could certainly have been a Gryffindor! But her demeanor and smooth handling of Mr. Snarkiness was pure Slytherin. Very nice creation. I don't usually fall in love with OC's, but you won me over here!

    Nice work.
    • Thank you! But-

      Thanks so much for your comment, but Brynhild is not my OC - she's Sigune's. According to the backstory Sigune has given, she is a Slytherin (yes, they can be brave, can't they? But they definitely have forethought and common sense Gryffindors lack!). She is the girl who was laughing as young Severus struggled to mount his broom, and comes from a very privileged background. If you go to Sigune's livejournal page, I think you can find a few stories about Brynhild. I hope so, anyway. Did you see the pic?

      Anyway, I am so glad you like both the character and the storytelling. :)
      • Re: Thank you! But-

        Yay! for more Brynhild! thanks for setting me straight. I'll check it out.

        No, I haven't seen the pic yet as it was locked and I didn't have time to friend/join at the time. I was running out the door, but you know how you just have to finish that story... hee!

        *hugs*
  • Lovely story! I like Brynhild--she seems strong and determined, and best of all, seems to care about Severus for himself and not just as a pawn or soldier in the war. Also loved the way you described the difficulty of trying to mount an invisible horse. ;-) And I liked how the thestral became a white horse in her mind, nicely tying in the story with the illustration.
    • Thanks! I'm glad Brynhild's concern for Severus came across. (Sigune told me I had her right, and that, in her mind, Brynhild is diametrically opposed to Lily, in that Brynhild can sould self-absorbed and harsh and almost nasty, but, when it comes down to it, she shows her true love and concern for Severus in her actions. Lily, on the other hand, claims to be Severus's friend but we never see it in what she does.) Now I wish I had the links for Sigune's stories so that you could read more about her. I have limited internet acces at the moment (I'm at Terminus in Chicago, and have to pay a lot to go online), but I'll try to get some links when I get home.
  • I love the pragmatism of Brynhild, and what a perfect way to rescue Severus.

    "That tastes disgusting," I head him murmur as I poured Strengthening Solution into his mouth. "Where did you find it?"

    "You brewed it," I told him.


    I can imagine him adding flavorings to potions as soon as he is fully recovered.

    Very intriguing, I must read Sigune's stories now. You paint a wonderful image of their devotion to one another. :)
    • Thanks! I had fun with it, once I'd thought of a story for the picture. ) Glad you liked it, and I do encourage you to read Sigune's fics.
  • very nice

    I'm fond of Severus-rescue stories when they're well done. I admit, I much prefer what you did with this than what I first thought when I saw the title and picture (but then, Valhalla is also not my favorite afterlife-gah!). Like your Brynhild much better than Wagner's. I particularly liked how she handled his stubbornness--Severus needs someone who can override him when appropriate. Nice story!
    • Re: very nice

      Thanks, Terri! I'm glad you liked it (and yes, it took me a long time to come up with anything I liked for this picture, because I am in denial about Severus being dead. :)) Sorry for the delay in responding, btw - I'm at Terminus, and they charge an arm and a leg for internet access here. More to say about the convention later!
      • Re: very nice

        No need to be in denial, really, Mary: he isn't dead at all. There *is* no portrait. What clearer textual evidence can anyone want? Talking of anvil-sized hints! I only did the picture because I was in a silly mood and had just seen Die Walküre - far from me to say Severus died in the Shack!

        Oh, and you'll have a hard time beating me at delayed responses. If it were an Olympic sport, I'd have won my country a medal by now (and at least we would have one :P)...

        Okay, now on to a reply proper :-).
        • Re: very nice

          exactly - he's not dead! And, speaking of Olympic sports, I was rooting for the Belgian women in beach volleyball; they were beating the Americans when we turned it on and I wanted them - the Belgians - to win. I am a patriotic American, truly, but I get tired of all the flag waving and still more tired of powerful American teams steamrollering everyone. What can I say - I'm a bosox fan, and if you were a yank you'd know exactly what that (used to) mean. I always root for the underdog, and, most of the time, that's not us!
          • Re: very nice

            Belgium, on the other hand, is rarely not the underdog :p. It's part of our national identity XD.

            Thanks for rooting for our beach volley team. I think that's very sweet of you!
  • I can't think of anything more wonderful for a fanficcer or a fan artist to find that someone wants to write a story about their original character. I certainly never expected anyone to want to try it! So: thank you very much, Mary, for taking this on, and for doing such a great job :D. There are many touches in your story that make Brynhild sound very true. You are always a sensitive writer, and here this is again obvious. Brynhild is Severus's age, but her very different, sheltered life is obvious in that she cannot see Thestrals - I like that very much. You also hit the nail on the head with the seeming contradiction between her actions and her words when it comes to her affection for Severus.

    My favourite bit *must* be (because I think SHE IS SO RIGHT) the part where she tells Severus not to be an idiot and to please leave the rest to Potter because he's done quite enough now. I guess that for me it's not just her concern for Severus speaking, but also the selfish streak in her character. She is not so much concerned about who wins, but rather about having her Severus back, safe and sound :p.

    The daydream - now that is really a brilliant idea XD. From the first when you mentioned the Thestral I started wondering how you were going to explain the fact that in the picture Brynhild is riding a white horse... But you certainly pulled it off, and in a funny way :D. (Poor Severus...)

    I am thinking that Brynhild is too harsh to be a Mary-creature, but I hope you enjoyed playing with her :D. Thank you very, very much for such a great gift!

    (PS: True Love's Kiss is here at [info]snapeartcontest.)
    • As I said before, Sigune, I am so glad you like it and think I got your character(s) correct. Yes, Brynhild is a bit too harsh to be a Mary-creation, but I enjoyed spending a little time with her and trying to get into her head. Very educational! As I said before, one of the things that strikes me is that you and I go in roughly the same direction when we think of Severus married with children - I think Severus needs (and deserves) a pragmatic partner who does love him for himself, and, whatever her flaws, Brynhild is certainly that. There may well be some selfishness involved, but she really does love him. Severus needs someone who will protect him from himself, doesn't he? - and Brynhild manages to do that here.

      I'm happy you liked the daydream, too! (even though, in the drawing, the mare's mane doesn't match Brynhild's exactly;) But a woman can dream, can't she?)
  • Excellent, Mary! I'm only getting to read this now, but I'm so glad I did. This is such a satisfying tale of Snape's Great Escape that I'm sorely tempted to adopt it as my personal canon. ;-)

    I think you've got Brynhild exactly right here, or at least exactly as I've always perceived her in Sigune's stories: brave but intensely pragmatic, an unsentimental woman who shows her devotion in her willingness to do anything for Severus. Best of all, she saves him from the worst of his self-destructive impulses, as when she urges him to forget about Harry and just focus on keeping himself alive. Severus deserves to have somebody who has his best interests at heart, for once in his life.

    The whole thing is really well done, and I've enjoyed it a great deal. I think the highest compliment I can pay you is to say that I "saw" the whole story in Sigune's visual style, which says to me that you captured the flavor of her characters very well indeed.
    • Oh, thanks. It scares me a bit that I seem to be so good at writing other peoples' characters, since there isn't necessarily a crossover with one's own! But, as I said to Sigune, I really enjoyed writing this, and I'm happy I do have her OCs right. And I agree strongly with Sigune and you (and Brynhild) that Severus really needs someone who will look out for *him* and fight that dratted martyr complex! The poor, silly man! ;); he really needs Brynhild's common sense, doesn't he?

      Anyway, I'm so happy you liked it - and wish you'd been able to get to Terminus. I don't think I'll be going to any other conferences unless they are local, but it was a terrific experience.
      • I wish I'd been able to be there as well! I have hopes of going to Azkatraz next year, and possibly Infinitus in 2010; I'm sorry you probably won't be able to make it there, because I really would like to meet you and discuss Snape in person. :-) On the other hand, I'm really thrilled that you had a good time at Terminus; it sounds like there was a lot of intelligent, thought-provoking programming.

        Severus really needs someone who will look out for *him* and fight that dratted martyr complex! The poor, silly man! ;); he really needs Brynhild's common sense, doesn't he?

        He really does! It sounds odd to say so, but between Severus and Brynhild, he's definitely the more Gryffindor of the two of them. He needs her Slytherin sensibility to counter that unfortunate martyr complex. ;-)
  • That was great! Sigune's Brynhild is one of the few OFC's I really like, and, as others said before, you captured her 'spirit' perfectly.
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