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@ 2007-12-12 00:00:00

Entry tags:

fic, severus/harry

Merry Smutmas, gingertart50!

To: gingertart50
From: reddwarfer

Title: To Cause A Hundred Veils To Fall
Rating: R/NC-17
Pairing: Harry/Snape
Disclaimer: JKR owns Harry Potter. Title is from a poem by Jalal al-Din Muhammad Rumi
Summary: Harry wishes for so many things.
Warnings: DH compliant
Author's Notes: Thank you to my beta-readers. I would have died without you. Thank you so much to W. for listening to me wibble about this story. Thank you to Gina for hosting this fest, despite everything. Gingertart50, I hope you have a Merry Smutmas.

( To Cause A Hundred Veils To Fall )

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	sev1970 2007-12-12 07:31 am UTC (link)
	I am speechless, with tears in my eyes. That was beautiful. The way you made the Snape/Harry fit in with canon was so well done. I especially liked how one minute Snape was there and the next, he wasn't -- so very sad. (Reply to this)

	florida_minxie 2007-12-12 11:47 am UTC (link)
	That was a spectacular idea for keeping with canon. Original and well played. So many emotions and, damn it, I wanted a different ending even if I know this one was the way to take this fic. And now I'm going to go sniff my way through some fluffy porn. bookmarks to read again later (Reply to this)

	kayleigh_jane 2007-12-12 11:53 am UTC (link)
	I loved the ending! Very well done, the incorporation of canon, and an explanation for the Epilogue from Hell. Just one thing: you've got a few codings that don't work, and one or two misspellings. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	gmth 2007-12-12 12:25 pm UTC (link)
	The coding issues are my fault. If you can tell me where and what they are, I will fix them. Thanks. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	kayleigh_jane 2007-12-13 09:14 am UTC (link)
	Harry stared at him quizzically for a moment before it dawned on him. "Oh. < i>OH. Um, At about three-eights of the story. He wished and < i>wished for some way to know At about seven-eights. That was all I could find! (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	gmth 2007-12-13 12:27 pm UTC (link)
	Excellent, thanks. All fixed. :-) (Reply to this) (Parent)

	red_day_dawning 2007-12-12 12:43 pm UTC (link)
	This is excellent - the way you've tied it into canon so well. It's also quite heart-breaking - but you lead up to the ending very well, with the reader knowing what is to come, & dreading it...! (Reply to this)

	josan 2007-12-12 01:06 pm UTC (link)
	Oh...my. Hard to type when the screen is so blurry. I knew it had to end badly, but...I also hope that Snape is waiting for him at King's Cross. Oh...my. Where the hell is the kleenex box when you need it? (Reply to this) (Thread)

	josan 2007-12-12 09:15 pm UTC (link)
	On a second read-through, it even gets better, but I still need the bloody box of tissues! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	torino10154 2007-12-12 02:58 pm UTC (link)
	sobbing Oh my that was so lovely. Even though we knew it was coming, it didn't make the ending any less moving or even unexpected. Although that doesn't make much sense, it's like waiting for the twist that never came. Oh, that Snape could even have Harry for such a short time and be truly happy. sigh Well done. passes the tissues to the next reader (Reply to this)

	hambares 2007-12-12 03:58 pm UTC (link)
	Fine! Twist my heart all around and then throw it down and stomp on it, why don't you! Whaaaaaa! This was simply fantastic. I was all set for my happy version of teh ending and then, wham, your ending came about, sniffs (Reply to this)

	katbirder 2007-12-12 05:52 pm UTC (link)
	A lovely sad story. I too hoped for a happy ending, knowing it couldn't be. I loved the interactions between Hermione and Harry. They had a lovely understanding of each other. (Reply to this)

	ariadneelda 2007-12-12 07:27 pm UTC (link)
	What a great ending! And how sad! It was really heartbreaking but I liked how you tied the story to canon. :-) (Reply to this)

	erikdesoir 2007-12-12 08:17 pm UTC (link)
	I am just as heartbroken as Harry. He was never done with Severus, was he. Hermione should have pushed him through that Veil. (Reply to this)

	gingertart50 2007-12-12 08:31 pm UTC (link)
	Oh! Wow, that was beautiful! Touching and ultimately heart-breaking. I loved the way you wove the fic around canon, and how Snape was a sadder, paler version of himself yet recognisably Snape, and Harry and Ron and Hermione were all in character - glares at Ron - thank you very much, mystery author, for a lovely fic. Sweet, hot and poignant. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	(Anonymous) 2007-12-13 02:21 pm UTC (link)
	I'm glad that you liked it. I was worried a bit. It's not a traditionally happy ending, but I like to think that Snape finally got his! :) Anyhow, I hope you have a very merry smutmas. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	(Anonymous) 2007-12-12 11:13 pm UTC (link)
	This was the most heart-wrenching fic I've read in months. An absolute delight to read - I loved everything about it! (Reply to this)

	zephyr_macabee 2007-12-13 02:46 am UTC (link)
	Beautifully done. I knew what was coming and dreaded it, but it was as it had to be. (Reply to this)

	snarry_fan7 2007-12-13 06:07 am UTC (link)
	So very sad and beautiful. The ending does make sense and all, but I'd really love to castrate Ron right now for making that stupid Unbreakable Vow (damn Harry for agreeing, too). Magnificent work (and I now need something fluffy, lol)!~Sophia (Reply to this)

slashpine
2007-12-13 06:28 am UTC (link)

Oh, Harry, you're such an idiot! This was very sweet, and sad, that they were all four, each in their separate ways, so incapable of mastering the situation. Hermione too busy overworking to think through the details, Ron too fixated on himself and his family, Snape too depressed and never expecting happiness, and Harry a bloody fool who can't figure out what happiness is. Also too accustomed to letting others do the thinking, aargh.

This fits perfectly with canon.

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	allifer 2007-12-13 07:02 am UTC (link)
	Oh. Just... wow I'm sitting here crying! Poor Harry! (Reply to this)

	taurus_paul 2007-12-14 10:52 am UTC (link)
	Oh fu**ing God... That was... so... I can't... You... die... and... arrgh... It was so great and intense, and so beautiful and great... Please tell me they met again in the afterlife and they will be happy... Please?! (Reply to this)

	squiggle_bunny 2007-12-15 07:06 am UTC (link)
	damn you for making me cry D: (Reply to this)

	randomlysane 2007-12-18 02:11 am UTC (link)
	Such a clever plot! Even though I knew what was to come, I still hoped for that happy ending. But to find some miraculous fix would have been too cliche. Yes, I cried. And I love stories that make me cry. I felt so bad for Harry, the weight of his obligations, losing love as soon as it was acknowledged. So sad. But really, a brilliant fic! (Reply to this)

	secretsolitaire 2007-12-18 03:20 am UTC (link)
	sniffles Poor Harry. But I'm so glad Snape finally got to be loved. (Reply to this)

	pervert_bitch 2007-12-19 10:25 pm UTC (link)
	This is such a bittersweet fic. Snape got his happy ending and I'd like to think he's waiting for Harry... now poor Harry though, I hope Ron feels bad about this... if of course he knows how much he hurt Harry... (Reply to this)

	japonicastar 2007-12-21 11:01 pm UTC (link)
	Falls down dead My god that was fantastic. Heart breaking and sad and sweet and man just delish! But Harry. Poor Harry. Cuddles Lucky ol' Ginger Tart! (Reply to this)

	nonajf 2007-12-25 03:50 am UTC (link)
	Wow, you've just made the epilogue both better and worse! Better, because you've explained it with the Vow; worse, because Harry loves Severus and is trapped with Ginny. Well done! (Reply to this)

	naurael 2007-12-25 11:34 am UTC (link)
	Oh God. I cried at that. It was clear from the point where Hermione found out that Severus would be going back on fulfillment of the wish, but this was so, so sad. And so in character. Exactly what Harry, Hermione and Ron (gods, he is such a despicable character at times) would do. hugs (Reply to this)

	ziasudra 2007-12-28 03:34 am UTC (link)
	Oh, I do hope that Snape is waiting for Harry on the other side, at King's Cross Station! This is sad yet hopeful, and it ties in with canon so well. Bravo! I enjoyed reading this very much. Thank you! (Reply to this)

lalaith_niniel
2007-12-30 09:56 am UTC (link)

Ow. The end of this hurt so much, especially because I knew it was coming. That Severus should have happiness only to have it ripped away again...my heart bleeds for him. I do hope that Severus can be reunited with Harry, even if it is only in the afterlife.

I love how you brought Severus back, it was so different from everything else I've seen, but believable because of the magic.

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	aeryun 2007-12-31 06:02 pm UTC (link)
	I really hate Ron right now. He's always been a selfish bastard, and this showed how much he doesn't care for what Harry needs or wants. As long as Ron gets what Ron wants nothing else matters. ARGH!!! Even so the little time Harry and Severus did get was beautiful. Thank you! Now I'm going to go off and abuse Ron in my fic! :D Aery (Reply to this)

	gina87 2008-01-01 10:35 pm UTC (link)
	Really well done. Very original the way it fits with canon. (Reply to this)

	ships_harry 2008-01-02 06:32 am UTC (link)
	Ohhh, that hurt. In a good way, though. Gorgeous story, just gorgeous, with that strange sort of hope and melancholy at the end. ♥ (Reply to this)

	dacro 2008-01-02 09:22 am UTC (link)
	wow. That ending was a kick in the gut. (in the good way) I had to go back and reread the second last section, just to be sure I hadn't missed anything. That was a very sneaky ending, and popping it up so suddenly was a risk that I think really paid off. Well done! (Reply to this)

	ms_katonic 2008-01-03 11:11 pm UTC (link)
	That hurt but in a good way. Poor Severus! And Harry! I hope they can be reunited in the afterlife. And I am glad Severus did get to be loved in the end. (Reply to this)

aliciamasters
2008-01-06 04:44 pm UTC (link)

I can't even say that I didn't know what I was getting into...your stories always make me cry. :)

Feedback with tears running down my cheeks is almost impossible, but here goes.

Harry was perfectly in character, following his instincts, doing what he knew was right even if it was going to break my heart. I'm glad he took the unbreakable vow, because it meant that he knew there would be heartbreak either way, but he had to do what was right. In a way, he transfered some of Severus' sorrow to his own shoulders, which is right and just, since he never should've had to suffer the way he did.

It's nice that you fit it into canon, and didn't have to hurt Ginny, who wouldn't have been prepared. You even made the epilogue poignant and beautiful, and I didn't think ANYONE could do that!

This is an incredible masterpiece. I loved Snape's looming return, and that Harry didn't need to have it laid out for him. I loved that he acknowledged that he doesn't know how to find a middle ground. I loved that he was willing to sign the wish without knowing how it would affect him, and I loved that he didn't care.

I loved how Harry didn't need to say the words. That would've been too much to ask of him, even though they poured out of him afterward.

Most of all, I loved the end. Thanks for this wonderful piece of fic, Leila, my dear.

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	vampyreranger 2008-01-14 02:03 am UTC (link)
	God, this was absolutely wonderful. Truly heart-breaking and a great use of canon. I found your fic much more believable than what happened in the seventh book. (Reply to this)

	whimseywisp 2008-01-16 05:27 pm UTC (link)
	This was wonderful. So bittersweet and moving. (Reply to this)

	szefi 2008-01-17 07:36 am UTC (link)
	Still crying. sniff Very well written, and fits even with the damned epilogue. (Reply to this)

	estioe 2008-03-15 11:07 am UTC (link)
	Awww, the ending was so bittersweet. I really liked this though. Yes, I am still mad at Ron. I hope he spends the rest of his days feeling awful about what he did to his best friend. //is all ranty, lol. (Reply to this)

cluegirl
2008-04-07 06:03 pm UTC (link)

Very nicely done, this. Severus' term of second chance was heartbreaking, as was Ron's horrible demand for an unbreakable oath at the end. But it does explain Harry's choice of taking the happy family illusion with Ginny over being true to himself.

I do have a little trouble believing that Hermione would forgive Ron for enslaving Harry that way though. But that's just me, and it didn't really damage the nice vibe of the story. Myself, I like to imagine Harry's wooden, lifeless proposal, and Ginny, having been told about the whole vow by Hermione, refusing to marry him, and just shacking up instead, so as to kick dirt in the eye of her meddling older brother. So unless you tell me otherwise, that's what I'm gonna imagine.

Thanks for a fun ride!

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	susief00 2008-04-27 12:05 am UTC (link)
	sobs That was beautiful...and sad....and happy....and wonderful! sniff (Reply to this)

	amourdevin 2008-07-27 11:57 pm UTC (link)
	Gods, that was heart-rending. (Reply to this)

	hogwartshoney 2009-02-08 09:48 pm UTC (link)
	I hoped against hope that it would end differently, but how could it, really? I'd love to see what happens if Snape is waiting for Harry.... at King's Cross. sniff (Reply to this)

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