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snarrymod (snarrymod) wrote in snarry_games,
@ 2008-05-10 11:13:00

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TEAM PHOENIX ENTRY: Sinick & Ac1d6urn "Red Right Hand"
Title: Red Right Hand
Author: sinick & ac1d6urn
Team: Phoenix
Genres: Postwar, Alternate Universe *Hover/Click for Games Definition of Alternate Universe*
Prompt: Ministry of Magic
Rating/Warnings: NC17; *warning for: total departure from epilogue canon, slight suggestion of previous partnerships, language.*
Word Count: ~49000
Summary: In a world where winning the war was only half the battle, will Harry Potter's crazy heroics be enough to save an outcast?
A/N: Thanks to naatz for beta-reading above and beyond the call of duty.

"Red Right Hand by Sinick & Ac1d6urn"

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Part 1

telwyrd
2008-05-11 01:27 am UTC (link)

Awesome. Poignant. Fierce. Heart-wrenching. Inspiring.

Madness! Absolute madness!

Snape! Harry! They Rulez!

Harry was courageous, incorrigible, and unquenchable through his madness and his struggle to save the wizarding world once again. He shone brightly throughout the story. Huzzah, Harry!

I admired Snape’s tenacity and strength of will throughout all the terrible ordeals he went through. His refusal to succumb to apathy and despair in the face of his outcast state and near-Squib status revealed his strong, unyielding spirit. ::sighs blissfully:: Snape really stood out in this unforgettable story.

Dolores Umbride as Minister for Magic – ugh. ::recoils::

The one mercy was that the agony was so intense he swiftly blacked out. … the ache of the new curse radiating from his wand hand up his forearm. The dull burn was so similar to the Dark Mark.

Poor Severus. :(

"Sorry I'm late," Potter murmured softly, as if they'd had an appointment. "I was a bit poorly. But," he beamed suddenly, "I'm all better today."

You did a great job of portraying Harry’s madness, making it both heart-aching and laugh-inducing.

Snape squeezed Potter's shoulders and released him, pulling back and standing tall once more. "Everything will be fine," he told Potter firmly. "I'll wait for you here. Go."

Snape handled Mad!Potter very well.

You want me to kill myself? You want me to starve? Potter wasn't the only one who saved the lot of you, and this is how you repay me? By branding me a criminal? Treating me like a leper? A Death Eater? If it wasn't for me, you'd know exactly what real Death Eaters do, you pathetic, miserable sods! You wouldn't be here to spit at me and hex me and whisper behind my back. You'd be Demented or dead or wishing you were! Fuck you. Fuck you all!

::roars:: Righteous, righteous! Never say die!! I love you, Severus! Wootwootwoot!

A bright red cape streamed heroically behind him, flapping on a wandless wind charm. Underneath it the brat wore nothing but scarlet long-johns covered in gaudy gold lightning bolts.

::jaw drops:: Er, nice outfit, Super!Harry. 8D

Harry’s periodic visits to Snape at Spinner’s End were so much fun to read. I loved Harry’s raiding Snape’s cupboards and his manic madness and Snape’s playing along with Harry and his air of long-suffering. And then later in the story, they had such good banter going on between them.

"I dub thee," The blade whooshed, almost slicing the curtain of Snape's hair, and his ear with it, before coming to rest on his other shoulder. "Sir Severus."

::blinks:: Cool.

"Here. Take 'em." Potter extended his weird little offerings. "I slew 'em for you."

Oh, Harry…that’s so, um...sweet?

a glimpse of a sober coherence. A sane, scared young man, so terrified of being a danger to everyone around him, that he assumed the role of a fool instead.

Hmm, that’s a very good description of poor Harry.

The advantage of inventing his own spells was that they were unknown to the Ministry, and therefore untraceable.

::nods:: Now that makes sense.

Inspiration was born of desperation, when circumstances drove you past fatigue and despair to clutch at the last available chance.

A good meaning for the word. The prose was peerless.

Until finally the magic was there again at his fingertips, fierce and familiar and his. It was a tingle at first, then a white crackle, stronger and stronger until it overwhelmed him like a tidal wave.

Yesss! Clever Snape is da bomb.

Potter was obviously trying to disclaim his curtain theft and add Fashion Criminal to the list of Snape's offences.

Nah, there’s a method to his madness.

"Madam Edgecombe," … "Assistant Obliviator." … she held up the hem of her sensible pink robes, a fashion favoured by the new Minister for Magic

Eeewwwwwww.

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Part 2

telwyrd
2008-05-11 01:33 am UTC (link)

the curtain followed, wiggling over the blanket and wrapping itself around him in a full-body hug. Snape banished the gaudy monstrosity to a corner of the bedroom, grumbling "Try that again and next time it'll be Incendio." At least it took that hint and stayed away, more or less. Though it tended to wriggle from room to room after Snape, and wave its corner at him with a hopeful jingle of rings every time he glanced its way.

::flails:: It’s alive! Aliiiiiiiiive!! Hmph, how weird.

But luckily, St. Mungo's said I'm as healthy as they could make me. Even gave me my wand and my broom back. And the Order of Merlin.

Harry is Cured. This is good.

I'm even dreaming about him now! And I'm looking forward to his visits far too much. If I'm not careful, I'll be all put out if he doesn't come in for tea, or something else completely daft. Just because he made all sorts of idiotic promises, and managed not to treat me like a walking plague.
Very well, I'll use his first name more from now on, but that's all. Just because his hero obsession isn't quite so revolting when it's exerted on my behalf, it's no reason to behave like some Demented housewife. What's next, rushing out the door to welcome him home?

Snape’s talking-to was bloody hilarious.

the pair of patronuses dancing around Harry and each other, striking silver sparks with their hooves. … it darkened and coiled, forming an immense serpent of shadow and silver.
The experience had tamed that fear with knowledge – that if he could survive this, he could survive just about anything – and had transformed it into powerful protection.

::impressed:: Harry’s has both the stag and doe patronuses and Snape now has an immense serpent one based on the one that almost killed him. How apropos.

Snapes’s adventures in Camden – T-shirt and jeans!, using his curse to earn money, rock music – was enthralling. I was much bemused by it all, seeing such a different Snape then normal.

Instead of a signature there was a stick figure of a leaping doe, as if he would've had any doubt by now about who'd left it.
The monitoring charms he'd recently cast on his doorstep showed that Harry had raced up to it around noon, knocked, rattled the doorknob, peered in every possible window, sat on the doorstep for awhile amusing himself by transfiguring pebbles to chalk, and left about an hour later, tentatively heading back toward the mill.

::lol:: Harry is so endearing.

"Yeah, that too. It was lonely. No windows, just white padded walls. So bloody silent, even when I yelled … whenever they cut the Lumos, it was pitch black, and that's when all that dark, scary stuff, everything I'd tried so hard to get rid of, rose up all around me and closed in. I needed those patronuses then, both of them, and they were... well, not someone to talk to, but still someone there. They chased the dark away."

::wibbles:: Poor Harry.

Even after he was gone, Snape still felt the brief, tingling brush of Harry's fingers over hypersensitive skin, still saw the way Harry's impish smile lit up his whole face.

::bounces:: He’s falling in lurve, yes? And later, the two go out for dinner and a concert date. Good, things are moving along nicely.

"Your hair's cool spiked!"

Snape had spiked hair in his youth?! ::mind boggles::

"Tell me she's lying."

::wails:: I’m sure it’s not what you think, Severus!

"Yeah, well, I'm not her slave." Harry replied flatly, "I'm a spy."

See, see!

"I just want you."
There was no need of Legilimency, the wordless chant of 'Severus...' 'So much...' 'Let me...', was so clear in Harry's expression it was practically audible.

Yesyesyesyes!

::reads s’more:: ::beams:: All is well.

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Part 3

telwyrd
2008-05-11 01:45 am UTC (link)

(Sorry for the length. I got carried away. It was that good!)

It was with a hideous sense of inevitability that at that very moment, Severus realised it was all going to hell.

D'oh! Spoke too soon. Oohhh, this so not good. ::worries::

It took an hour before he started to scream, and by then the glove was dripping from every fingertip.

::whimpers:: Not again.

Before he blacked out he saw his own dismembered torso, the eerily bloodless stumps of his arms and legs.

::appalled:: Oh nooo...

As if they're all theatregoers, here to see a play. Which, of course, they are. A grand farce of Justice, with me as the Melodrama Villain.

Okay, I can do without the nail-biter, please.

"I looked into the abyss." Severus' voice was slow and deep, as devoid of human intonation as the tolling of a funereal bell. "The abyss looked into me." He bared jagged teeth in a ghastly smile and rumbled, "We called it a draw."

::fist pumps:: Boo-yah!! Take that, you evil fat pink toad! :P Rock on, Snape!

…the stain began to fade. It grew paler and weaker the further it spread, the more it was shared, until in all that countless multitude, every inch of skin was completely clear of stain and free of curse.
Even Harry's face. Even Severus' hand.

::cries a bit:: That’s so beautiful. Splendidly done!

"Where exactly did you get that cape of yours?" he inquired slowly.
"Er..." … Harry gave him a sheepish grin and pointed behind them, at the arch.

::jaw drops:: Harry’s Griffyndor-coloured shower curtain cape that acts like a pet was the Veil?! ::bwaaahahaha:: Most original!

He banished the patronus and found himself reaching up to the quivering ball of fluff as it sidled back onto his shoulder. He wasn't decided, though, until the owl rubbed its downy head against his no-longer-cursed fingertip.

Dolly was so cute. She handled Snape’s intimidation with such pluck.

Severus stared down at the tragic absence of tea, and at the dragon, circling inside his ceramic nest and breathing glittering puffs. … "For your information, I take my tea with lemon, not dragon." … "He'd be brilliant at barbecues!"

::snickers:: Harry’s habit of reducio-ing "every dragon in sight" was adorable. Also, nice nudge at Team Dragon. ;) ::chortles::

I loved the whole triumph of the human spirit theme going on throughout the story.

An exceptionally fine story! I laughed, I cried, I cheered. Red Right Hand was a sublime tour de force worthy of much praise. Kudos! Bravo! Huzzah, sinick and ac1d6urn!

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	Re: Part 3 sinick 2008-05-19 03:25 am UTC (link)
	(Sorry for the length. I got carried away. It was that good!) eek! Please no! Never apologise for all that detailed feedback! :) I loved the whole triumph of the human spirit theme going on throughout the story. I'm so glad that came through: we wanted to convey how both of them could triumph over terrible odds. Thank you so much! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	Re: Part 2 sinick 2008-05-19 03:23 am UTC (link)
	::reads s’more:: ::beams:: All is well. Ahh, it really made me smile to see you use That Quote about our story! (Reply to this) (Parent)

Re: Part 1

sinick
2008-05-19 03:22 am UTC (link)

Thank you so much for all this lovely detailed feedback! It must've taken quite a lot of effort to include so many quotes, and I really appreciate it!

It's so fascinating to hear exactly how you felt about specific parts of the story!

Harry was courageous, incorrigible, and unquenchable through his madness and his struggle to save the wizarding world once again. He shone brightly throughout the story. Huzzah, Harry!

I admired Snape’s tenacity and strength of will throughout all the terrible ordeals he went through. His refusal to succumb to apathy and despair in the face of his outcast state and near-Squib status revealed his strong, unyielding spirit. ::sighs blissfully:: Snape really stood out in this unforgettable story.

Ahh so glad that they worked for you! :)

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