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snapelyhols_mod (snapelyhols_mod) wrote in snapelyholidays,
@ 2010-12-19 00:34:00

Entry tags:

2010_fic, fic4:prayer_at_night, preslash, snape/lucius

Gift fic for prayer_at_night, Slytherin's Mystery
Recipient: prayer_at_night

Author: aceia

Title: Slytherin's Mystery

Characters: Lucius/Severus, mentions of Avery, Rosier, Wilkins, and Mulciber

Rating: all-ages

Content Info: preslash

Prompt/Summary: Slytherins are trained to do the best in the Wizarding World. It starts in their third year.

Disclaimer: The world of HP and its characters belongs to Rowling. I'm just playing in it.

Word count: ~2,900

Author Notes: prayer_at_night, I hope you like the story. I did the best I could with your prompt but the boys didn't want to cooperate and actually get together. Thanks to Someone's Dissonance for betaing.

( Slytherin's Mystery )

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	countesszero 2010-12-19 11:23 am UTC (link)
	that was very intriguing. i also quite like the idea that lucius is the one fascinated by severus and not the other way round, and severus being the focus of his desire, although he is too young to understand it. (Reply to this)

Squee!

cardigrl
2010-12-19 03:45 pm UTC (link)

Fabulous! Love the idea of the mentorships, and that Lucius was the one to pick Severus. Wonderful characterizations for both of them, like this:

You're too tetchy. You let everyone know what you are feeling."

Severus' gaze snapped back to Lucius. He wasn't tetchy! It wasn't his fault that people treated him like he was stupid and he corrected them as scathingly as possible.

Absolutely pitch perfect! This is one of those fics where I'd love to read more, to see how they survive the year.

Squees more!

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	Re: Squee! cardigrl 2010-12-19 04:53 pm UTC (link)
	Just to add, I recced this here (Reply to this) (Parent)

	dreamy_dragon73 2010-12-20 01:02 am UTC (link)
	This is very intriguing. I love that Lucius picked Severus and the way Slytherins stick together against the prejudices of the outside world. (Reply to this)

	alisanne 2010-12-20 03:31 am UTC (link)
	NIcely done! Even though they were apparently uncooperative (LOL), the spark was still there. I can see their relationship blossoming later on, you've laid a good foundation here. :) (Reply to this)

	kelly_chambliss 2010-12-23 04:34 am UTC (link)
	A very IC Severus; you capture so much what I'd imagine his youthful canon self was like: awkward and intelligent and driven and suspicious and, yes, tetchy /g/. Lucius is right -- Snape is "intriguing." I like the way you make Lucius's desire clear even though Severus doesn't understand. (Reply to this)

magialuna
2010-12-24 03:09 am UTC (link)

This *so* reads like canon to me! I cannot imagine Slytherin not doing some sort of mentorship of younger students and I do think that Severus would fascinate Lucius--he is so totally different from what he was raised with and around; privileged pure-bloods who mostly did not have to strive very hard to succeed. I would gather that this brilliant, intense, competitive half-blood who was so versed in the dark arts was somewhat of a novelty to Lucius. Just as Lucius' beauty, elegance and culture would have been something that Severus would have coveted and found desirable.

You did such an excellent job at presenting Severus' character--his curiosity, the homework for pay (lol) and his shock when Lucius picked him was awesome. I love how well Lucius has studied him as well and calls him on it. This was such a fun little Slytherin fic!

Clare

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	atdelphi 2010-12-24 06:02 am UTC (link)
	I love your young Severus. This reads exactly as I would imagine him in his youth, and I want to both give him a hug and a smack on the head at the same time. (Reply to this)

	torino10154 2010-12-27 05:30 pm UTC (link)
	There is definitely a spark between them. I like the whole concept of the 3rd and 7th years paired up. Seems like something the Slytherins would do. Nice job. (Reply to this)

	k8bnimble 2010-12-28 11:44 pm UTC (link)
	I really enjoyed Severus thoughts as he waited to be picked and Lucius choosing him even though he is a half blood. Great insight into the little world of Slytherin. (Reply to this)

	luciusmistress 2011-01-09 03:00 am UTC (link)
	I love the idea of Lucius mentoring Severus! And in my pervy mind, it doesn't stop there ;) YUM! (Reply to this)

prayer_at_night
2011-01-11 08:15 pm UTC (link)

(Sorry this took me so long, had a small personal crisis.)

Thank you so very much! I love everything about this story: your Severus is so nosy and himself already but still a child, and then Lucius chooses him, and the hinty hints at the end... OMG, I can't put it in words (but then you already did that, right? *g*), but I absolutely adore this. My mind is writing the sequel already. ;)
Thanks again, this is a wonderful gift!:-*

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	sealcat 2011-01-21 04:43 am UTC (link)
	Love this young Severus very much :) Ad I like the way that Lucius already notice him at first year and choose him at 3rd year~ I enjoy this fic very much, thank you!! (Reply to this)