I think I said this when this was posted waaaaaay back on the old comm, but this would actually not be too bad, if not for the line about calling the cops. (Mentioning Lana's age didn't help, but could be written off as surprise.)
It would feel rather innocent, if not for that. Only once 'hey the cops could legitimately be called here' is introduced does it stop feeling like humouring an innocent request.