lucille bluth (

theseaward) wrote in

I would just suggest fleshing it out a bit. I know the fact based app is pretty common but it should still give off an idea of who the character is and not just what happened to them. For example in this one:

Eryn’s father left before she was born, so she was raised by her mom Rebecca who had to take two jobs just to give Eryn the food and clothing that she needed to live. It was tough but they made it through with the help of Eryn’s aunt.

You could add a bit more about how that directly affected Eryn. Was she always kind of sad about this? Did she always wonder what her Dad was like, did she hold anger and resentment toward him for abandoning the family? Did it make it hard for her to trust men later in her life. That kind of thing.

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