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notreallyme10 ([info]notreallyme10) wrote in [info]qaf_challenges,
@ 2009-07-12 17:46:00

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Entry tags:clusterf#ck

61. Drabble: Bouquet
Title: Bouquet
Author: [info]dottie_jane
Theme: dwellings/home
Notes: Thank you to my beta [info]vl_redreign.



Brian has a deep, dark secret. He loves Debbie’s house. He loves the kitsch, the ugly wall paper, the tacky bathrooms, and, more than anything, he loves the smell. Her house smells the way a home should. The living room smells of (too much) potpourri, the kitchen smells of home cooking, and even Mikey’s room smells of fabric softener. Brian’s house was missing all these smells. When his mother wasn’t drinking herself into oblivion, she fastidiously scrubbed every inch of the house, obliterating any natural or homey scent, her sponge and mop leaving pine-scented notes in an already antiseptic home.


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[info]circadia
2009-07-13 11:48 pm UTC (link)
I like the way you described Deb's house. Those are indeed the perfect home-y smells I can imagine would hit you as soon as you walked in her home.

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-17 09:12 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]outlander
2009-07-14 12:53 am UTC (link)
I love the comparison between the two. You described Debbie's exactly how I would picture it...makes me wish my DVDs had smell o vision. The scents of home.

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-17 09:15 pm UTC (link)
Smell-o-vision! I'd love to smell some of Deb or Vic's cooking. Although I'd pass on smelling the bath house scenes.

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[info]qafmaniac
2009-07-14 09:02 am UTC (link)
Love the description of the smell in Debbie's house.That's exactly what I was always thinking!!

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-17 09:16 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! :)

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[info]rosy5000
2009-07-14 09:42 pm UTC (link)
Your descriptions of Deb's house fills me with warm fuzzies, just like a home should. :)

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-17 09:16 pm UTC (link)
Aw, thanks!

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[info]noteverything
2009-07-14 10:04 pm UTC (link)
Of *course* he loves it. And the comparison of Debbie to Joan makes me happy, happy, happy. Thank you!!!

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-17 09:17 pm UTC (link)
You're welcome, welcome, welcome! And thanks for commenting. :)

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[info]jule1122
2009-07-14 10:37 pm UTC (link)
I adore this! A fabulous look at what Debbie represents for Brian.

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-17 09:18 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]butternutsquash
2009-07-15 03:24 am UTC (link)
Aww.

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-17 09:18 pm UTC (link)
:)

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[info]ahaw9913
2009-07-15 12:44 pm UTC (link)
You know what? I don't think it's a secret, Brian! Everyone loves their childhood home. Not house, home! And this was Brian's.

This broke my heart just a little, but makes me love Deb, even more, for the home she provided to all of our boys! Thank you for writing this!

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-17 09:22 pm UTC (link)
*puts your heart back together* I think everyone should have a Deb in their life.

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[info]minuet9
2009-07-17 05:18 am UTC (link)
Perfect description, and it makes total sense Brian would love the first place he was welcomed 'home'.
Thank you

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-17 09:23 pm UTC (link)
Thank you!

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[info]fun_demented
2009-07-17 06:33 am UTC (link)
Whoa. I started off with huge smile on my face and then it was wiped right off. This is an excellent drabble. You told three whole worlds in a 100 words, the two separate worlds of this drabble and then the third one that is a product of both. Wow.

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-17 09:25 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much! What a sweet comment.

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[info]itwaslovetome
2009-07-18 02:06 am UTC (link)
This was just wonderful, painting the contrast between the two. I really enjoyed this. Thank you.

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-22 09:01 pm UTC (link)
Thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

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[info]simplystars
2009-07-21 01:08 am UTC (link)
Oh, Brian. *lipwibble* Antiseptic indeed... thank goodness he found Michael by extension, Debbie & Vic. :)

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[info]dottie_jane
2009-07-22 09:02 pm UTC (link)
Indeed! Also, your icon is gorgeous.

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[info]testdog65
2009-08-09 12:41 am UTC (link)
What a contrast between the two houses. This is a very clever take on the theme!

~Ellen

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[info]notreallyme10
2009-08-10 04:06 am UTC (link)
This makes me want to go home to Deb's too! Lovely :)

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[info]_alicesprings
2009-09-26 10:03 am UTC (link)
AWESOME!

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[info]happier_bunny
2009-10-10 01:49 am UTC (link)
OH, me likey this one!

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