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xie_xie_xie ([info]xie_xie_xie) wrote in [info]qaf_challenges,
@ 2008-05-16 22:56:00

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Entry tags:challenge in two parts

Graphic Number 23: "Invitation"
Title: Invitation
Author: [info]xie_xie_xie
Timeline: post-513
Rating: PG-13
Warnings, if any: None
Author's notes: Thanks to my beta [info]testdog65 and to the artist, [info]pretty_words224 for the inspiration!
Graphic: 23 by [info]pretty_words224




When I was 17 years old, I doodled Brian's name in my notebook.

When I was 21, I sat on the sofa in the loft, picking out fonts for our wedding invitations.

When I was 22, I sat on a different sofa in a different city, tracing my finger up and down the engraved words on an old invitation I'd found inside a portfolio I hadn't opened in almost a year.

The phone rang. It was new, and I hadn't gotten around to programming in any ring tones, but I knew it was Brian anyway. He liked to pretend he was unpredictable, but he called me almost every night, while he was driving from Kinnetik to the gym.

I answered the phone. "So, if we'd gotten married, would you have changed your name?"

He didn't answer right away, and when he did, he had that patient tone in his voice that meant he was willing, at least for a limited amount of time, to humor me. "To what?"

I grinned. "To Taylor, of course."

He snorted. "I have to admit, Justin, despite the temporary insanity that led me to go down on bended knee, I was never intending to be known as Mrs. Justin Taylor."

"Kinney-Taylor? Taylor-Kinney?"

"What," Brian asked, speaking slowly, "has brought on this particular and somewhat disturbing line of questioning?"

I heard the engine cut out on the Corvette, but he didn't say he had to go. "Nothing."

He waited.

"I found an old wedding invitation. I was just wondering." I'd worked hard to keep my voice from sounding wistful. Overall, I thought I'd done okay.

Brian didn't say anything. I amused myself imagining him mangling his lip with his teeth, drumming his fingers on the steering wheel, and trying to get past the botox to furrow up his brow.

"Justin…" He sounded frustrated. For some reason, that made me feel better. "What the fuck?"

I brushed one finger across the edge of the engraved "T" in my last name. "You should come this weekend."

"I'm coming next weekend, for your show."

"Come this weekend, too."

He snorted. "You do love to spend my money."

I laughed. "That's not all I love. Come."

He sighed. "Okay. Christ, you're worse than Mikey."

I laughed. "I love you, too."

Brian made a sound that I'm sure he meant to be a dismissive grunt but came out a lot more like a laugh. "Later."

I told him "Later" and snapped the phone shut. I looked at the invitation for a minute longer, slid it between the black leather leaves of the portfolio, and smiled.



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[info]vamphile
2008-05-17 01:04 am UTC (link)
they couldn't really have changed their names, right? i mean, an original Justin Kinney painting doesn't have the same ring to it.

I think somehow, Teh Love will survive, even if they never take each other's names.

i really liked this.

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[info]gmta_nz
2008-05-17 01:18 am UTC (link)
He sighed. "Okay. Christ, you're worse than Mikey."

I laughed. "I love you, too."


This exchange is perfect, not only for the spot-on voices, but also because of the reference to Michael :)

I love the tone, a little nostalgic but without regrets. Nice touch having Justin slid the invitation in the black leather leaves of the portfolio and smile at the end: canon.

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[info]pretty_words224
2008-05-17 01:18 am UTC (link)
this is really great, I loved how you began it with how Brian/Justin's relationship progressed from 17-21-22 that was excellent. And I think that you really executed their characters in the dialogue, it was just so sweet!!

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[info]secretsolitaire
2008-05-17 08:30 am UTC (link)
The more I read this, the more I like it. The dialogue is excellent, perfectly in character for both of them.

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Invitation
(Anonymous)
2008-05-17 08:56 pm UTC (link)
I love the doubled meaning: the invitation that sparked the mood, then the invitation to come to New York. Well done.

A lovely fic all around. FanSee

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[info]not_yet_defined
2008-05-17 10:20 pm UTC (link)
I adored this.

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[info]flashfly
2008-05-18 04:16 am UTC (link)
I really enjoyed this. Great dialogue. This especially:


I brushed one finger across the edge of the engraved "T" in my last name. "You should come this weekend."

"I'm coming next weekend, for your show."

"Come this weekend, too."

He snorted. "You do love to spend my money."

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[info]jule1122
2008-05-18 09:15 am UTC (link)
I love the opening stucture of this, but what I really love is how deeply I feel this story. I like how thier conversation is a bit light, Justin knows Brian would never change his mind, but the undercurrents of what they are really talking about are easily felt. Wonderful characterization.

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[info]noteverything
2008-05-18 09:22 am UTC (link)
trying to get past the botox to furrow up his brow.


*snort!*

You just snuck that little gem in there, didn't you?

This was an interesting conversation. Thanks for sharing it.

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[info]xmaniac1x.myopenid.com
2008-05-19 12:44 am UTC (link)
Awwwwwwwwwww.................... ♥

Two lines REALLY popped out at me, and I'm not a big quoter, so here goes:

Brian didn't say anything. I amused myself imagining him mangling his lip with his teeth, drumming his fingers on the steering wheel, and trying to get past the botox to furrow up his brow.
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I brushed one finger across the edge of the engraved "T" in my last name. "You should come this weekend."

I saw it, you know? In my head, I could see Brian in his corvette with his bottom lip between his teeth lol and I could see Justin siting with his legs folded on his couch, with one hand holding his phone and the other fingering the card. Gosh.... :D what you do to me.

Both the banner and the fic are BEAUTIFUL!

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[info]besamislabios
2008-05-19 11:58 am UTC (link)
"I'm coming next weekend, for your show."

"Come this weekend, too."

He snorted. "You do love to spend my money."

I laughed. "That's not all I love. Come."

He sighed. "Okay. Christ, you're worse than Mikey."

I laughed. "I love you, too."


I loved this and the rest too, perfect dialogue. Thank you. &hearts

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[info]outlander
2008-05-20 11:38 pm UTC (link)
You hit the perfect balance of reminiscing and remembering but not regretting. And Brian trying to furrow his botox brow makes me giggle like a little girl!! This was great.

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[info]kata_ny
2008-05-21 03:54 am UTC (link)
:DDDDD
Mrs.Taylor bwhahahah.
i also love the fact that Brian calls Justin every evening:D

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[info]qafcracked
2008-05-21 08:21 pm UTC (link)
Aw, this is funny and sweet and a delicious little fic.

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[info]cindybaby
2008-05-21 10:04 pm UTC (link)
Short, but very, very sweet!!

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[info]notreallyme10
2008-05-22 11:12 am UTC (link)
Oh god I LOVE this! Perfect little fic for the graphic. Everything in it just seems so natural and IC.

I especially liked this:

I amused myself imagining him mangling his lip with his teeth, drumming his fingers on the steering wheel, and trying to get past the botox to furrow up his brow.

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[info]minuet9
2008-05-22 08:18 pm UTC (link)
I can't quote a favourite bit, I loved it all :)

And in case I haven't already said it to the artist, I adore the graphic too.

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[info]rosy5000
2008-05-23 12:44 am UTC (link)
This was very cute. It seems like Justin was even having a bit of fun with Brian, while being a little nostalgic.

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[info]happier_bunny
2008-05-23 08:54 am UTC (link)
huh...I could've sworn I'd commented on this one.

Anyway, LOVED the banner, LOVED the fic. So perfectly IC covered with teh love!

Kudos to author and artist. :)

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[info]singlewoman
2008-05-23 10:10 pm UTC (link)
A great conversation. but I don't see either one changing their names. But teh love will live no matter what.

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(Anonymous)
2008-05-26 04:06 pm UTC (link)
that was really good

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[info]testdog65
2008-05-28 02:45 pm UTC (link)
There isn't a single word of this I didn't love. Wistful but full of the certainty of a long and happy future together. Wonderfully done!

~Ellen

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[info]fun_demented
2009-02-28 12:37 pm UTC (link)
I like your feedback. That's a perfect articulation of what appealed to me, too. :)

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[info]herefordroad
2008-05-31 09:57 pm UTC (link)
i love this because justin is being honest and brian is listening. and then brian does as he's told which makes this a great post 513 fic. this exchange is perfect:

"Come this weekend, too."

"You do love to spend my money."

"That's not all I love. Come."

"Okay. Christ, you're worse than Mikey.".

jeannie

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[info]fun_demented
2009-02-28 12:35 pm UTC (link)
Lovely banner and the story to go with it made me ridiculously happy. WHAT'S NEW? YOUR PERFECTLY IC TOTALLY IMAGINABLE VIVIDLY DEPICTED BRILLIANTLY PACED LOVINGLY CONCEIVED AND PERFECTLY EXECUTED STORIES ALWAYS MAKE ME GLAD TO BE HERE READING THEM!

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[info]xie_xie_xie
2009-02-28 12:41 pm UTC (link)
Awwwwwwwwww darlin, thank you so much!

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[info]fun_demented
2009-02-28 12:45 pm UTC (link)
Thank YOU! You ALWAYS give me more of THE SHOW. I thank you thank you thank you!

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