Merry ([info]merkyderry) wrote in [info]no7_awz on January 6th, 2011 at 07:15 pm
I love how this story begins quietly: breathing, gazing, sleeping, Marc's stillness; the soft touch of a hand to the back or the neck.
And I like how that outward silence is contrasted with the mental chatter of Roman's dilemma--& how his internal conflict builds to a crescendo until he breaks the stillness by rolling out of bed, falling to the floor and speaking out loud.
And the last bit of dialogue is poignant: how it seems Marc intuitively knows that Roman's 'everything is alright' is not true (ex: 'his eyes narrow and looks directly at Roman') but is willing to take his word.

Thank you.
 
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