[ interest is good. it's a starting point, at least--and that's what today is. somewhere to begin. Soubi certainly hadn't been expecting perfection out of anyone right away. ]
Try making more short, light strokes. [ he suggests as he pauses by the table Ryo is working at. setting down his own sketch book, he picks up a pencil and demonstrates. ] It may seem messier, but the point of a sketch is to transfer the general idea to paper. The lines can be solidified and improved upon later.