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MarinaNova Mods (marinanova_mod) wrote in marinanova_ooc,
@ 2012-09-01 10:50:00

Entry tags:

mod: hmd, mod: plotting

Game-wide HMD/Plotting!
Welcome to the MarinaNova HMD! This is optional, but encouraged.

• List your characters for which you'd like feedback. We have a form below if you like forms!
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• Leave your tactful and considered thoughts, questions, concerns, praise, suggestions, etc. for others.

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• Since there is no plotting meme during months with an HMD, please feel free to do that here too.

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bluemoondog
2012-09-03 11:04 pm UTC (link)

I also have no experience with the Galerians Canon, but from what I saw of Birdman I think what you're trying to convey is coming across right. He's definitely a Villain, but he's being so nice and kind to others, manipulating them with a false charm. It's great, I like that kind of villain could be so convincingly nice to your face that when, or if he does something terrible, some people might not believe those crying Wolf.

From what I've read I do really get the whole "doesn't understand human though processes" and I can definitely relate how that can sometimes be difficult to convey in actions or what have you. Helix gets humans probably a lot better than Birdman, but he still has some trouble with certain things. Because of how he was forced to live he doesn't think of the same things most humans do, so he comes off as cold or selfish in a lot of ways because of that.

ANYWAY uuh... I don't have any specific pointers but I'd be glad to help! I like Birdman for all his creepiness and violent tendencies. I think if Helix ever got to really know him he might remind him a lot of Jethro (his guardian)-- only a lot younger and not bald.

And I'm one for TL;DR so I'm not one to talk there orz

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	hepatitis_c 2012-09-04 02:27 pm UTC (link)
	im really glad, thank you! ;3; a big worry of mine with this is that all the manipulation shit comes across as hokey as opposed to creepy/gross, so im glad im at least doing that right lol. sob i havent written him against helix enough and i really need to; helix is super interesting from what i've seen of him floating around here (Reply to this) (Parent)

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