Oh, you did a lovely job of pulling us back and forth with Severus in his meanderings between the living and the dead. Your prose carried shadows and murky atmosphere and a timelessness that was eerily evocative. I felt a bit insubstantial myself, as I read! The comparison of Snape's wanking in the afterlife, compared to his ‘almost alive’ session in the shack, cranked up the heat a notch!
I loved how you pushed the boundaries of the fest by bringing Harry into the fic. Having him skirt around Snape's wank was tantalizing. It gave the story a distinct edginess.
I really liked your literary style and the somewhat somber tone--all of it surreal, and all of it compelling. Very nice!