InsaneJournal

Tweak says, "That's what you think..."

Beth H (bethbethbeth) wrote in hp_beholder,
@ 2010-05-05 13:28:00

Entry tags:

beholder_2010, eileen prince, eileen/tobias, fic, het, rating:r, tobias snape

FIC: "Charming a Prince" for snapesgirl_62
Recipient: snapesgirl
Author/Artist: chazpure
Title: Charming a Prince
Rating: R
Pairings: Eileen Prince/Tobias Snape
Word Count: 16,000+
Warnings: smoking, fingering, first time, frottage
Summary: Tobias had been sent away from danger into a strange world he'd never known, where he met a most unusual girl.
Author's/Artist's Notes: For snapesgirl, who wrote, "I have this fantasy where Tobias and Eileen had a good marriage, their parents were the ones always fighting with them." That made me wonder how they might have got to that point. I hope you enjoy the result! Many thanks to my beta; any errors remaining are mine alone. And many, many thanks to bethbethbeth for running this great fest - and for her incredible patience, forbearance and understanding!

Click here to read 'Charming a Prince', then return to this entry to leave a comment.

(Post a new comment)

	lookfar 2010-05-05 08:50 pm UTC (link)
	What a lovely re-imagining. You've clearly given it loads of thought; I liked all the ways Eileen had to work around the Muggle-Wizard problems. (Reply to this)

	snapesgirl 2010-05-05 09:28 pm UTC (link)
	OMGSQUEE! plot and romance and it's all mine! buwahahaha. Thank you, thank you mystery author and thank you bethbethbeth the timing on this is perfect. smack between my birthday and anniversary. GLEE (Reply to this) (Thread)

snapesgirl
2010-05-05 10:17 pm UTC (link)

Now that I'm less giddy. :D

This was marvelous. I loved the way you developed the story with Tobias being sent to the country and resenting it, then meeting Eileen and making friends with her.

Their reunion and blossoming relationship is perfect. She knows what she wants, and she goes for him. :D Tobias' reaction to her magic is how I envision it. Very practical man, Tobias.

Eileen's family, especially her brothers were fabulous. Their attempts to marry her off had me laughing.

thank you very much for this fic!

(Reply to this) (Parent)

	torino10154 2010-05-06 05:17 pm UTC (link)
	OMG This is wonderful. I love the time they spent together as children, the way they met again, all the wonderful things young couples do together. Really warm and beautiful. Excellent work. (Reply to this)

randomneses.livejournal.com
2010-05-07 01:06 am UTC (link)

Oh my God.

This was a really fucking good fic and I am being really genuine here.

Of course it's AU since Tobias seems to be an asshole in canon and it's doubtful that Eileen and Tobias had a very good marriage (or it may have started well and desinigrated), but WOW. Talk about convincing!

Tobias was just such an endearing character and I love that he drove a motorbike. I also loved the dynamics at play in Eileen's world and I'm very convinced yet creeped out by how it would have been normal for a traditional wizarding family to marry off the girls to old bastards.

Eileen and Tobias' relationship was also really sweet too and I love how enthusiastic he was about her. And I also liked how much Eileen defied her family and did what she knew was right. Just...yeah, this was really good and I'm def reccing it at my lj 8D

(Reply to this) (Thread)

	randomneses.livejournal.com 2010-05-07 01:09 am UTC (link)
	Oh and I'm a sucker for anything with a vintage feel and the clothes, cars, music, etc in this fic def satisfied my love for that stuff! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	pale_moonlight 2010-05-07 07:53 am UTC (link)
	I really enjoyed this, especially Eileen's forest with the magical creatures and the 1950s atmosphere in the later London scenes. (Reply to this)

maevemist
2010-05-08 02:53 pm UTC (link)

This is just so wonderfully magical. I really liked how Eileen shows young Toby the magic of her world and then when they meet again she inturn, dicovers a world of magic in his.

There are so many things that I enjoyed about this story but sadly, I can not find the words to comment on them properly. I can say that I wish the story hadn't ended there, because I would have really liked to keep reading.

Thank you for sharing.

(Reply to this)

	atdelphi 2010-05-08 03:19 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, nicely done. I love this pairing, and I especially love the atmosphere here - the wizarding world is portrayed as so static, which makes strong time period here a real treat. Marvellous work! (Reply to this)

	kinky_kneazle 2010-05-09 02:44 am UTC (link)
	This was lovely. I especially loved the details of 50s London. (Reply to this)

	synn 2010-05-09 04:01 am UTC (link)
	Great story! I especially like the way parts of it are fairy-tale like, but they're mixed neatly in with a more day-to=say realism. (Reply to this)

	venturous 2010-05-12 09:09 am UTC (link)
	wonderful! the foreshadowing of Severus and Lily is wonderful! Its great to have a glimpse into Eileen's childhood and the mysterious Prince family. beautifully done! (Reply to this)

swissmarg.livejournal.com
2010-05-12 01:04 pm UTC (link)

This was brilliant.

Starting with:

The voice. The narrator immediately brought me into wartime England, and not only that, but into Toby's head, with his idiom and accent intact.

The place names! Wallop, Pinchley, Piddleby... so much in keeping with Rowling's place names, and also evocative of the entire social milieu in which Toby is placed.

I enjoyed how we got to see the magical creatures, spells, and Muggle-repelling charm from Toby's point of view, without being told what they were.

I wonder if you did a lot of research to get the era right. The music, fashions, cars, technology ... It certainly all sounds authentic to me!

All the old wizards wanting to marry Eileen was so funny! Especially the one who'd lost 4 wives and was 'only 86 and ready to move on from his heartbreak', lol.

It's wonderful how strong Eileen was, and how she was able to break away from her overbearing family.

The ending does leave me wondering, though, what happened in the ensuing years, after Severus was born, to lead to his apparently difficult childhood and home life.

Still, this was a great story and I enjoyed it very much. :)

(Reply to this)

	cardigrl 2010-05-14 02:10 pm UTC (link)
	This is brilliant! From the opening scene with little, scrawny Toby on the train to the poor wizard who was "a little hard" on his wives. Very enjoyable, and a great job. You packed in so much detail, it's marvelous how it all fits together beautifully. (Reply to this)

kelly_chambliss
2010-05-16 07:43 pm UTC (link)

Really well done; I enjoyed this thoroughly. You had me sucked into your world and your characterizations from the very first paragraphs, which take us so beautifully inside Toby's head and language. The phrasings are just perfect (like "babes as still messed their nappies"). I'm not British myself, but I've read a lot about British wartime and after, and I'm impressed about how authentic it all sounds -- the class elements and the clothes and especially the class and regional dialects. (Gender history, too -- I can so believe the opposition to women taking NEWTs, for instance).

All the characters are so fully-fleshed out and convincing, from Mrs Moulton down to the louts and layabouts. I like earnest Muggle Toby and determined, strong Eileen who is (of course) good at potions. And I like the way you've imagined the wizarding world and the customs and the magic (details like Eileen's apparating ability being dependent on her state of mind -- and her final "cold calm" that lets her escape.)

I'd love to see what you'd do with the rest of the story, how you might take us from the "proper celebration" to Severus's memories in DH. I'm sure it would be a great and IC ride.

(Reply to this)

magnetic_pole
2010-05-18 12:56 am UTC (link)

Charming! This story drew me into Toby's world immediately, with its distinctive voice and lush detail and clever place names (Great Wallop! Pinchley Bottom!). I loved the sense of magic about their encounters, first in Eileen's territory, then in Toby's, and the sense of humor in the description of Eileen's potential suitors. (Five wives! Bad luck!) Also, something about Eileen petrifying Tobias' mother really struck me--why haven't I seen that before? What a profoundly logical thing to do, to buy yourself a bit more time! In a word, I found this story absolutely charming, and I can't wait to find out who you are. Brava! Maggie

(Reply to this)

	morien_san 2010-11-06 10:57 pm UTC (link)
	Loved it! I almost never read het but since it's you... I'm very happy I decided to read it. I adore your Eileen! (Reply to this)