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hdcup_mod (hdcup_mod) wrote in hd_worldcup,
@ 2008-04-17 00:05:00

Entry tags:

fic, nc-17, prompt: the tower, round i, team fanon

Precious Things -- Team Fanon
Title: Precious Things
Team: Fanon
Author: charlotteschaos
Prompt: The Tower
Wordcount: 15,200
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: None.
Summary: Scorpius Malfoy has been kidnapped and only one ~~boy~~ man hero can save the day.
Author's Note Thanks to my betas L and A. This story is based on the four elements of the Tower card according to Wikipedia: chaos/sudden change, crisis/revelation, disillusionment and downfall/ego blow.

Precious Things

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shyfoxling
2008-06-24 03:22 am UTC (link)

I love the humour and crack. A lot of the lines are really great. I think it got a little uneven in spots though, trying to make a jump from humour to tender drama and back again. Also, as others have said, the sex scene in the middle was kind of gear-clash. I think it would have been improved if you stuck with UST and kissing and Draco flipping out over Harry having a hard-on. The hair-cutting itself was fine.

These are my favourite bits:

"Don't tell me to fuck off. I'm not the one who named my sprog like a mid-range Muggle vehicle!"

"Those birds are treated well! The Malfoys have had white cocks for centuries! We know how to care for a cock!"

He felt like a princess. Or at least what a princess would feel like if she were a boy who wanted to ask another boy out on a date after sucking his cock.
Make an animated story out of THAT, Disney.

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