i'm assuming he didn't mark off the "you" and "your" that are behind the quotations?
it's all right to use that sort of phrasing when someone is speaking, but otherwise, you'll want to stick to third person otherwise you're kind of delving into second person.
so, for instance, i'd just reword that last part like --
"He again, confides in the unsure listener, telling them that even if one's mind set is not ready for this, and the whole world seems to be against them and their foundation, their faith is destroyed..." etc etc etc