can someone help me with my english essay re-write? i wrote an essay and we are supposed to analyze a song but whenever i wrote the word "you" or "theirs" my teacher marked it wrong. I'm not sure how to re-write my essay and get rid of these and interpret at the same time? here's an example.
"Even if your hands are shaking and your faith is broken, even as the eyes are closing, do it with a heart wide open." He leaves the litener with one last message before repeating his motif. He again, confides in the unsure listener, telling them that even if your mind set is not ready for this, and the whole world seems to be against you and your foundation, your faith is destroyed and even if you are close to giving u you need to have an open heart and say what you feel.
i mean i know that's a run on but i have no idea how to get rid of some of those "you's" the listener and shit i can get rid of, any help?