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snarryhols ([info]snarryhols) wrote in [info]snarry_holidays,
@ 2008-12-06 10:00:00

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Entry tags:fic, giftee: entrenous88, rated: nc-17

Fic: A Time to Forget
Title: A Time to Forget
Author: [info]gatewaygirl
Giftee: [info]entrenous88
Word Count: 24,796
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Harry/Severus (references to others)
Warnings: Epilogue-compliant
Disclaimer: All Harry Potter characters herein are the property of J.K. Rowling and Bloomsbury/Scholastic. No copyright infringement is intended.
Summary: Harry had expected teaching at Hogwarts, even temporarily, would have complications -- his children, for instance. But when he goes exploring in the dungeons, the past moves inexorably into his present.
Author's Notes: Entrenous88: I didn't use any of your specific prompts, but I hope my attention to your desired subgenres makes up for it. Merry Christmas! To my beta readers: Thank you both for letting me know what worked for you and what didn't, and for putting up with a long fic on a short schedule.

A Time to Forget

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[info]red_day_dawning
2008-12-06 10:47 am UTC (link)
Oh, this is good. So, so good. Satisfying.
It's intriguing watching the plot unfold, and I really like the way it's written, the tone of it.
I was shocked by the young Severus - the way he seemed so different from the later Severus. More... sly and bitter, and less harsh and sour than the later Severus. It was fascinating to see that difference, and very convincing.
I would have loved more sex - but that's because the sex was good, and it's my greed speaking, rather than a criticism.

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-15 08:11 pm UTC

[info]snarry_fan7
2008-12-06 01:08 pm UTC (link)
Very intense, hot work! I love how Severus slowly regains his memories and the ending was very intense when Harry was finally able to tell Severus about his past. Magnificent work!~Sophia

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-15 08:11 pm UTC

[info]drachenmina
2008-12-06 01:40 pm UTC (link)
Oh, that was a great story. Harry's horror at finding the body was very well done, and I loved the way Severus was written - I had to keep reminding myself he wasn't a teenager! Albus Severus was a fantastic character, too.
I would have liked to have seen more of Severus regaining his memories, and how it affected him and his relationship with Harry.

There seem to be a few small chunks of text missing and/or misplaced, however.

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(no subject) - (Anonymous), 2008-12-06 11:04 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-15 08:19 pm UTC

[info]gingertart50
2008-12-06 02:27 pm UTC (link)
Fantastic! Great fic, I loved the subtle maturing of Harry's character and the equally subtle de-aging of Snape, and Hermione and Minerva, and Harry's sons were excellent. I kept stopping and doing other things while I was reading it, because I didn't want it to end. Excellent work.

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(no subject) - [info]loupgarou1750, 2008-12-06 02:36 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]syrosis, 2008-12-11 04:51 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-15 08:44 pm UTC

[info]loupgarou1750
2008-12-06 02:33 pm UTC (link)
That was such a pleasure I could have happily read 800 more pages. Great premise and great job with teen-aged/not-teen-aged Severus -- all the characters, really.

There is one bit of text in that you probably meant to edit out. If you do a "find" on "excursions into photography", you'll find it.

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(no subject) - (Anonymous), 2008-12-06 11:06 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-15 09:02 pm UTC

[info]charie-caphine.livejournal.com
2008-12-06 03:04 pm UTC (link)
Yes, those two (or was it three?) bits of misplaced text addled me out of proportion, for I was enjoying the story immensely. The characters appeared so incredibly themselves, too.
The story is wonderful and an absolute joy, and I couldn't believe it when I reached the ending, - could have had more and more of it.

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(no subject) - (Anonymous), 2008-12-06 11:07 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-15 09:13 pm UTC

[info]meri_oddities
2008-12-06 03:43 pm UTC (link)
This was really wonderful. The characterizations were just terrific. I really liked Snape. I could just see the younger Snape trying to curry favor with the more powerful. And Harry was just wonderful, too. Well done.

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-15 09:19 pm UTC

[info]orions_stars
2008-12-06 06:29 pm UTC (link)
This was wonderful! Your future world was very convincing, and you did an excellent job of portraying teenagers - both actual teenagers and Severus. There are a couple places where a sentence breaks off that I think may be editing errors that you may want to fix, though. If you ever decide to write more in this alternate future, I definitely want to read it! Thanks for a great read. :)

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(no subject) - (Anonymous), 2008-12-06 11:08 pm UTC
(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-15 09:26 pm UTC

[info]torino10154
2008-12-06 08:42 pm UTC (link)
That was brilliant. In a way it's just amazing Severus is forward, back, and frozen in time simultaneously. I liked the concept of 'a year and a day' and then the clock starts ticking so to speak. I loved the interaction with both James and Al. And Severus's logic to get Harry to have sex with him really was inspired. Great fic.

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-15 09:30 pm UTC

[info]thesewarmstars
2008-12-06 09:06 pm UTC (link)
Oh, spectacular! This is one of my favorites of the fest. I lovelovelove your young!Severus and Harry's interactions with him. Al and James were great, too. I want to say more, because I loved it so much, but I can't find the words.

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 08:05 am UTC

[info]amanitamuscaria
2008-12-07 02:42 am UTC (link)
Whoo - hot! (fanning herself)
Good combination of the equals-in-age, memory-loss and potions-gone-wrong fic.
I enjoyed James getting snarky seeing Snape in Harry's robe and Albus getting upset by Snape slagging off Mudbloods.
Good effort.

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 08:16 am UTC

[info]slashpine
2008-12-07 04:50 am UTC (link)
Wow, this was absolutely to read! I love your characters, and the excellent mature Harry, the passion that sizzles between him and Severus. The logic of your year-and-a-day Draught effects, and the Jinx Minerva casts, are both terrific additions to fanon! I hope to see their effects again in other stories. Maybe like more of this one. IZ SO GOOD.

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 08:19 am UTC

[info]stormbird85
2008-12-07 06:58 am UTC (link)
After the first few minutes of reading it I had to tell my friends on MSN, that I've found a well-written, interesting new story on Snarry Holidays again!
I liked it very much! Especially Asp :)

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 08:19 am UTC

[info]zephre
2008-12-07 08:34 pm UTC (link)
lovely. intriguing premise, and really loved the way the kids influenced the plot.

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 10:01 pm UTC

[info]verdenia
2008-12-09 08:12 am UTC (link)
Oh hells yeah. LOVE this! Brilliant. Age-reversal with new mechanism FTW.
*memories*

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 10:02 pm UTC

[info]syrosis
2008-12-11 04:52 pm UTC (link)
This was so lovely, Anon! I loved loved the original premise with the age reversal. :D The characters were wonderfully IC as well! I am def. reccing this when I have a chance. :D

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 10:06 pm UTC

(Anonymous)
2008-12-11 06:47 pm UTC (link)
I love it!

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YAY! -- part 1
[info]entrenous88
2008-12-12 10:30 pm UTC (link)
Hello, Still-Mystery-Author! Thank you so much for this fic, and apologies aplenty for me being so very late with my reply to it. I've had real life crashing down around me for a few weeks now, and when this was first posted I missed it (though earlier I had been checking the community diligently to see if my gift fic was up -- RL timing was against me, unfortunately!). And then this is the first chance I've had to give this my full attention and comment.

First off, let me thank you for writing this wonderful, long, fantastically textured story. I was so excited when I realized this was nearly 25,000 words, because I adore long and plotty fics. But it wasn't just length I found as I read, because you created such a rich story with your choice to focus on older Harry returning to Hogwarts to teach and unexpectedly find Severus Snape.

The magical mentions/moments are really wonderful -- I liked the Can't Tell Jinx so much, as a child's game device that worked out so fittingly in this Severus-turned-adolescent situation -- and how hilarious was it for him to utter the Key word during the sex scene and not a moment before?

Other lovely magical moments: details about Severus's favorite Firewhiskey (remembered by MacGonagall, aww!) with the visible puff of air it releases when someone drinks it, worked so well. That sort of thing works so well here, as enhancing mentions of magic you slip in subtly, using them to layer the feel of the story rather than as more obviously pointed-out devices.

Great work also in laying out little breadcrumbs of issues or items or habits that later become key to the story -- we hear how Harry rues all the publicity that still follows him, and learn how Albus avidly reads the gossip magazines to keep up on both of his parents, well before the jealousy-motivating moment Severus has when he sees the picture of Harry with Oliver Wood.

Having this thinking-he's-younger Snape was such a treat -- it was like a de-aging story without the physical side to de-aging! But the adolescent attitude was fantastic, spot-on, and generally hilarious, as Severus sulks and acts sly and tries out his flirting techniques on a beleaguered Harry. Great twist on the de-aging convention.

I was happy to find Ginny treated so well in your story -- she seems like someone Harry still considers a close friend and enjoys a great deal even if they're no longer together, which seems exactly right to me. Interesting that the very thing they thought would be safest for their marriage (both of them pursuing same-sex partners on the side rather than anything else) ended up being the end of their romantic relationship.

I really liked Albus (ASP!) here -- he's fun but also canny, tolerant but also aware of markers of class and status, a strategic Slytherin open to being friendly with a range of people (as a Slytherin raised by Harry in the post-Voldemort world would surely be). His involvement in the story was well-handled, both in terms of his usefulness to various narrative developments (like his role in showing, inadvertently, the jealousy-inducing photograph), and in his presence allowing us to see what sort of father Harry is, and how Harry's attitudes to houses and Hogwarts and students manifest as he interacts with his sons and their peers.

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Re: YAY! -- part 1 - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-15 10:09 pm UTC
Re: YAY! -- part 1 - [info]entrenous88, 2008-12-16 01:33 am UTC
Re: YAY! -- part 1 - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 10:13 pm UTC
Re: YAY! -- part 1 - [info]entrenous88, 2008-12-19 08:01 am UTC
YAY! -- part 2!
[info]entrenous88
2008-12-12 10:30 pm UTC (link)
The pacing was really great as well. I really like the way you led us right into the narrative, with asides revealing why Harry has taken the DADA position and the focus on moving into the mystery of the story. You managed the reveal of Harry's marital arrangements well -- great to have it came out during Harry's increasingly intimate evenings with Severus rather than earlier.

I especially enjoyed the very clear shift in Severus-es (hee, if that makes sense) when Harry and Severus first had one intimate night, then woke up the next morning with at least a good deal of Severus's memories coming back to him. And the sex then, as they shift back to different sorts of roles with the age-difference more clear (er, even though Harry is a bit older at that stage -- still, Severus has the advantage of both he and Harry remembering him as older), with Harry playing on that dynamic with his "Yes professor" response when he woke up, very very hot.

Great work, really enjoyable -- than you so much for this lovely fic!

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Re: YAY! -- part 2! - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-15 10:16 pm UTC

[info]fanficforensics
2008-12-14 01:01 pm UTC (link)
Oooh, lovely. Snape at seventeen is a fascinating character -you can safely adore him even when he acts like a nasty little bigot, because you know he'll be trying to make up for it later. You write him so very well. Sequel? :)

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 10:18 pm UTC

[info]szefi
2008-12-14 02:24 pm UTC (link)
I have a soft spot for deaged Severus, and with this interesting twist in memory loss it was perfect for me, thank you.

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 10:19 pm UTC

[info]ivylady
2008-12-14 08:36 pm UTC (link)
Loved it. I generally like de-aged Snape stories, and this one is excellent with the use of the memory loss. I love how he goes through his teenage years again, bigotry and all (nice that you didn't whitewash it), but begins to rethink his positions because he had someone talk to him like he mattered.

Snape wanting to shag Harry over the course of the story was funny, and the payoff was worth it.

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 10:28 pm UTC

[info]cordelia_v
2008-12-16 07:05 am UTC (link)
Oh, this is terrific. I mean, wow. The plot is original and the various devices work so well, and characterization for Snape (both as a "teenager" and as his memory gradually returns) is note-perfect and intriguing. And the relationship between them develops perfectly.

This is master-class Snarry. Thank you.

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 10:38 pm UTC

[info]laurapetri
2008-12-16 12:08 pm UTC (link)
Wonderfully written! Love your Snape!

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-16 10:38 pm UTC

[info]strickens_girl
2008-12-20 01:43 am UTC (link)
Whoa. So nice. I'm finally getting caught up and I'm so glad I saved this for a time when I could take my time and really enjoy it. Great job.

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(no subject) - [info]gatewaygirl, 2008-12-20 10:48 am UTC

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