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snarryhols (snarryhols) wrote in snarry_holidays,
@ 2008-12-05 10:04:00

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fic, giftee: unbroken_halo, rated: pg-13

Fic: Seasoned Sound
Title: Seasoned Sound
Author: vissy
Giftee: unbroken_halo
Word Count: 15750
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Harry/Severus
Warnings: Seasickness and Splinching. Generally epilogue-compliant, but EWE with respect to Harry and Severus.
Disclaimer: All Harry Potter characters herein are the property of J.K. Rowling and Bloomsbury/Scholastic. No copyright infringement is intended.
Summary: Eight lonely years after the Battle of Hogwarts, Harry investigates an old friend's Apparition mishap and discovers more than he had thought to hope for.
Author's Notes: A request for pre-slash led me to attempt a sexy story without sex. As you can probably tell by the warnings above, I'm not sure how well I succeeded!

Seasoned Sound

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	snarry_fan7 2008-12-05 10:26 am UTC (link)
	Excellent, original work! I really love this plot, the cassowary and sea snake are awesome too. Well done!!~Sophia (Reply to this) (Thread)

	vissy 2008-12-15 11:49 pm UTC (link)
	Thank you :) (Reply to this) (Parent)

	zephre 2008-12-05 10:58 am UTC (link)
	awesome story - loved the way the plot uncurled, and Harry's internal monologue was wonderful. (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-15 11:50 pm UTC

red_day_dawning
2008-12-05 11:12 am UTC (link)

I lived two years in North Queensland, and noticed no blunders at all. Well done.
A lovely fic, although I'm sill pressing my lips firmly together & ignoring the way my stomach feels - a response to discovering the location of Neville's missing parts!
I do like the way you've presented Harry - he comes across well. And although the reader doesn't actually spend much time with the conscious aware Snape, he's convincingly presented.
I like the little details - the eight pulls on the dreads for the eight missing years - Snape's insane toxic cocktail... it all adds up to a great story.

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vissy, 2008-12-15 11:52 pm UTC

red_day_dawning, 2008-12-16 12:06 am UTC

	drachenmina 2008-12-05 12:46 pm UTC (link)
	An excellent story! Gripping right from the start, with lonely - and self-aware - Harry, and then Neville's truly gruesome splinching! I loved the idea of Snape and Neville being colleagues, and the legserpent was a wonderful character, so obviously non-human in thought and speech (and, ahem, diet!) Fantastic! :D (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-15 11:53 pm UTC

	leela_cat 2008-12-05 01:18 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, this was lovely. Two helpings of hurt/comfort -- three if you add in Harry's emotions. And such a unique story idea. (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-15 11:54 pm UTC

	eeyore9990 2008-12-05 01:19 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, this was seriously an awesome fic. I loved the lore and the characters you created! The plot was inspired and wheee! Jealous legserpents!! Loved it! (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-15 11:55 pm UTC

	orions_stars 2008-12-05 01:30 pm UTC (link)
	I loved how creative you were with the setting and the characters :) Poor Neville's predicament grossed me out a little, but he got a happy ending too so that's all right. Thanks for the fun read! (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-15 11:56 pm UTC

unbroken_halo
2008-12-05 03:45 pm UTC (link)

YAY! Thank you very much, mystery author! This was a cute and fun read! I adore stories with "little details" (Snape's Dread Pirate Robert's poison theory, his dreadlocks, the seasnake and the legserpent's thoughts, Harry's inner monologue, Harry the disgruntled Auror, and competent but still a bit clumsy!Neville,) where authors actually take the time to explain just why the characters have gone on to do this certain action. The setting, storyline and pacing were wonderfully creative and entertaining, keeping me enthralled the entire time. I nearly had a panic attack over Neville and Snape, and whether or not Harry would be able to help them both in time or not. I loved the romance, sweet and subtle between them, just everything together really, leading up to the happy ending for all of them.

Thank you again!

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vissy, 2008-12-16 12:08 am UTC

	gingertart50 2008-12-05 03:51 pm UTC (link)
	Unusual, delightful, amusing and romantic fic - I liked this a lot! (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-16 12:09 am UTC

	thesewarmstars 2008-12-05 05:12 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, how great! I loved the way they became attached to each other almost immediately. The legserpent's frantic babbling when Harry first encountered her was great. Now if only they'd get that seasickness potion taken care of and get on with getting to know each other better... (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-16 12:11 am UTC

	dreamingjewel 2008-12-05 05:13 pm UTC (link)
	Wow! A very lovely and original story. (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-16 12:12 am UTC

Sea-Scientist!Snape

slashpine
2008-12-05 06:10 pm UTC (link)

So much fun. I really loved the originality of this, the unusual location, the H/C, the great characters, and the leg-serpent is pure win! It was neat to read about the Neville's splinching, gruesomeness and all, 'cos I've always wondered exactly how that was supposed to work and canon doesn't have many clues.

Snape as a marine researcher is awesome! I love the legserpent's worried care for him - and how this time, Harry rescues him. So good, so very good! This is a wonderful storyverse and I'm going to happily imagine other adventures for them as Harry quits the Aurors, Severus recovers, the two of them get acquainted -- seasick Harry and all -- and they help the legserpent in her search for a mate! (And oooh - preg-serpent would be so much fun, too!)

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vissy, 2008-12-16 12:17 am UTC

	torino10154 2008-12-05 06:20 pm UTC (link)
	I really enjoyed this-so much so I actually felt seasick! I love Severus's leg-serpent, who obviously adores him. I was horrified by Neville's injuries but how awesome it was that he and Severus were sort of together (as in the same place). Harry's rescue of Severus was really well done. Nice sweet ending YAY! Great job. (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-16 12:21 am UTC

	(Anonymous) 2008-12-06 03:50 am UTC (link)
	A really enjoyable story, full of warmth and worry and satisfying detail. Thank you very much! Philo (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-16 12:22 am UTC

	alisanne 2008-12-06 10:20 am UTC (link)
	What an original story! I loved seeing Neville as the intrepid explorer, seasick!Harry, the legserpent was sweet, and the slow realization of the Snarry was perfect. Action-packed and very fun! Great job. :) (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-16 12:22 am UTC

	amanitamuscaria 2008-12-07 03:03 am UTC (link)
	Mmmm - dreadlock!Snape and the legserpent imprinting on him - lovely premise. Seems to have a balance with Sirius sending Harry tropical birds in canon. And Harry convincing leggy that he wants to help - just great. The whole Neville plot as well - I enjoyed this. (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-16 12:23 am UTC

ivylady
2008-12-07 10:06 am UTC (link)

Great story. I did laugh when I found out what happened to Neville--he splinched himself trying to get away from Severus's pet. I like how the two of them fall into a relationship at the end.

Neville as secret-keeper was surprising, but made sense.

The real story-stealer was the legserpent. She was so protective of Severus. She was also hilarious. "He left meats behind...He wasn't using them any more. Wasteful." I laughed out loud at this part.

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vissy, 2008-12-16 12:26 am UTC

	This was awesome foolartist 2008-12-07 08:48 pm UTC (link)
	Not a lot of snarry but VERY enjoyable! I liked the longbottom parts! And the "Kill the Snake" had me guessing forever. At first I thought it was a weird reference/password for Nigini. I lOVE legserpent! Overall a very fun fic. (Reply to this) (Thread)

Re: This was awesome -

vissy, 2008-12-16 12:30 am UTC

perverse_idyll
2008-12-09 02:35 am UTC (link)

What a diverting, vivid, beautifully detailed story. The leg serpent is an inspired creation - she may have been borrowed, but you breathe life into her. The setting, the aftermath of the cyclone, the sea, the seasickness, Severus's ship, all are described in brisk and brilliant language that summons everything to mind. I love the sensual clarity. I love your wry, self-deprecating, but competent Harry who "imprints" almost instantly on Snape. The scene of his discovery of Snape trapped in the undersea grotto - the moment when the arm floats out and Harry spots the Dark Mark - is quite eerie. The image of the two of them floating naked for hours in the water, Snape utterly helpless and Harry burning with protective determination, has that lovely quality of h/c eroticism that prepares us for their abrupt and intense response to each other, once they're safe.

And these lines made me grin: Harry couldn't even pretend to himself that this had anything to do with his saving people thing. This was a kissing Snape thing.

Neville's plight was rather horrifying, and at first I feared it would overshadow the fic. The single tooth caught in the deck of the ship! But you managed to use a light enough touch, and Harry's scrappy heroics and resourcefulness lured me onward, as well as being in themselves a pleasure to read (considering how maddeningly dense he could be in canon). I thoroughly enjoyed your OCs, including the seasnake, and there were innumerable small bits of local color that made the fic teem with life and intelligence. You clearly put some thought into the various kinds of magic; your descriptions of the gillyweed and of Snape's toxin-saturated body are rather striking, for instance. I've now got the image stuck in my head of Snape with dreadlocks. I just wish there could have been a bit more room for Snape and Harry together. You do a wonderful job of catching the banter between equals here, but there's also that streak of vulnerability in Snape that's hard to pull off convincingly and is irresistible when done well. I wanted to see more.

In short, I enjoyed this fic so much I had to come back and read it again. :)

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vissy, 2008-12-16 12:40 am UTC

	szefi 2008-12-14 02:09 pm UTC (link)
	This was very original, and I loved the possessive legserpent:) (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-16 12:40 am UTC

	gatewaygirl 2008-12-14 02:36 pm UTC (link)
	A wonderful action/adventure snarry, with great use of gillyweed and Parseltongue! I liked the force-feeding by kiss. (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-16 12:42 am UTC

	meri_oddities 2008-12-15 07:22 pm UTC (link)
	Nicely done. I really enjoyed the story. And the Sea serpent was just great. g (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-16 12:42 am UTC

	angela_snape 2008-12-18 07:57 pm UTC (link)
	I finally had a chance to read this... I loved it. Poor Neville, getting splinched like that. I like the possessiveness of the legserpent, and that Neville has interests other than plants. Whistling frogs, indeed! (Reply to this) (Thread)

vissy, 2008-12-19 06:27 pm UTC

	snarry_reader 2009-01-11 02:42 am UTC (link)
	We just wanted to let you know that we've recommended this story on our Snape/Harry rec list, The Snarry Reader, in the topics post "Near Snarry - Not Quite Slash", which can be found here. If there’s a different site you’d like us to link your story to, or any other changes you'd like us to make, please let us know. Thanks, Gaycrow, on behalf of the Reader (Reply to this) (Thread)

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