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snarryathonmod ([info]snarryathonmod) wrote in [info]snape_potter,
@ 2009-04-18 06:28:00

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Entry tags:fic, rating: nc-17, snarry-a-thon

Snarry-a-Thon FIC: Rum and Cigarettes
Title: Rum and Cigarettes
Author: [info]lucianwolf
Other pairings/threesome: Harry/OMC
Rating: NC-17 for violence.
Word count: 2412
Warning(s): (highlight for spoilers) *Excessive use of alcohol and cigarettes, dark!fic, non-con/torture, AU, sadism, casual use of Unforgivables, eventual OOC.*
Prompt: #136 - "I fell in love with a dead boy/Oh what a beautiful boy" - and how it got from that to this, I have no bloody idea.
Summary: The secret lives of Dumbledore's men.
A/N: To my betas [info]l_mackenzie_l and [info]hartsbane: "Thank you" is as a grain of sand in the Caribbean beach of my gratitude.



Rum and Cigarettes


Snape hears soft footfalls on the stairs as he finishes his rum.

Potter pauses in the doorway.

Snape puts his cigarette out in a conscripted brûlée dish and refills his tumbler, moonlight dancing on the bottle as he pours. After a long moment, Potter takes a glass from the cupboard and sits across from Snape. His eyes are wet and swollen behind his glasses.

Snape slides him the bottle and lights another cigarette.

Even in the darkness, Potter doesn't spill. It's clearly not the first time he's gotten drunk in the dark.

Hours pass with only the sounds of pouring liquid and crackling embers to break the silence.

Potter puts the glass in the sink and goes to bed.

Snape lights another cigarette.

* * * * *


Potter joins him the next night, drinks three or four glasses and goes back to bed; his silhouette and soft breathing the only way Snape knows he's there.

Same thing the night after. And the night after that. Two weeks of grudgingly companionable silence.

And then Potter had to go and develop the irritating habit of talking.

* * * * *


Snape lets out an exasperated breath.

"What do you want to hear, Potter? That I hated it? That I truly am good inside? That I " - Snape affects a snivel - "am broken by what I had to do and if I had it to do over again, I would have died rather than harm another living soul?"

He snorts and lights another cigarette. He takes a drag and the cherry glows brightly enough to illuminate the curve of his lip as he sneers.

"No, Potter. I'm an opportunistic, Slytherin Death Eater," Snape responds with a hard edge to his voice. "That is why they don't trust me. And why should they? If I had needed to hurt any of you to keep my cover, I would have."

The silence is loud in the darkness.

"My mum?" Harry whispers shakily.

"What about her?"

"Would you - would you let her die if you had it to do over again?"

Snape's cigarette flares brightly for a moment. "I begged for her life."

"But would you tell Voldemort the prophecy?"

Snape sets his glass on the table harder than necessary.

"No."

And Snape is gone.

* * * * *


Potter pours his drink as Snape lights a cigarette.

"Have you ever killed anyone?"

Potter isn't wasting time tonight. Snape slams back the rest of his rum and pours another: the boy is so much easier to deal with after a few drinks.

"Yes."

"Have you ever tortured anyone?"

"Yes."

Potter takes a steadying breath. "Would you do it again, now that Voldemort's gone?"

Snape is certain he should have some kind of razor-sharp retort for this. Bloody rum. "Yes."

"Why?"

"What are you asking, Potter?" Snape closes his eyes and presses the cool glass to his temple.

"I ... just ... I mean ... "

"We cut off the head, but the snake didn't die. To find the rest of Voldemort's sympathisers, the ends justify the means."

He doesn't hear anything but Potter's breathing until he finishes his cigarette. When the boy finally speaks, it's hardly more than a whisper.

"Did you ... enjoy it?"

Snape is momentarily intrigued. He didn't think de Sade was required reading for Gryffindors.

"Enjoy what?"

Potter exhales. "Killing people. Torturing people."

A heartbeat. Two.

"Yes."

And Potter is gone.

* * * * *


They have finished one bottle and opened a second before Potter speaks.

"Do you ... feel bad about it?"

"About what precisely, Potter? You'll have to be far more specific." Snape lets out a bitterly amused laugh.

"About liking ... hurting people."

The cherry flares in the darkness. "Why should I?" he asks.

Snape barely hears him leave.

* * * * *


"Did you ever ... when he didn't tell you to?"

"Did I ever what, Potter? When who didn't tell me to?" Snape slams his glass onto the table and scowls, though Potter can't see it in the dark. Shame, that.

"Hurt people. Voldemort."

"I must offer my commendations: clearly you possess a grammatical prowess rivalling Shakespeare himself," Snape says dryly. He takes another drink, then lets out a slow breath. "And no, Potter. I never did."

The silence returns. He wonders if Potter is trying to convince himself that the greasy Potions Master really is a good man underneath it all. Snape rolls his eyes.

"Would you?" Potter asks breathily.

"If the situation required it."

"That's not what I meant."

A smile Potter couldn't see, shouldn't see, plays across his lips. "I would not discount the possibility."

Shots of rum punctuate long, slow drags on the cigarette. Snape hears nothing. He starts to wonder if Potter left and he didn't notice. How much rum has he had tonight?

"Because ... " Potter whispers finally, " ... because you want to."

Snape smiles in the darkness, a smile that only dead people have seen.

"God, yes," he breathes.

They sit in the taut silence for hours.

* * * * *


The rush of warm air against his ear is the only warning Snape gets.

"He lies on the floor and I kiss him, devour him, straddling his hips as he arches up against me, kiss him until his eyes are glazed, his - "

"I don't want to hear about your sexual fumblings, Potter!" Snape snarls, slamming his glass hard against the table. These midnight confessionals have gone too far.

Harry takes Snape's chin and the back of his head in a steel grip and presses his lips - almost - to Snape's ear. He's going to leave bruises.

It occurs to Snape for the first time that he might actually be in danger and he can hardly see. He stops resisting and slowly slides his hand to his wand.

"I pull off his shirt as he laughs; slide his tight jeans down as he bites his lip. He poses seductively in the firelight.

"He reaches out for me and I straddle him again. He unbuttons my shirt slowly and reaches for my jeans, but I pin his wrists above his head. He pretends to fight me; writhes beneath me. I lean forward and trace his lips with my tongue. He moans into my mouth."

Harry lets out a shuddering breath. "Do you want to know what I say?"

Snape's heart stops. His world is spinning out of control; past and future obliterated in the murmured music of his enemy's beautiful son.

"Crucio," they whisper in unison.

Time slows to a crawl and Potter slowly, slowly pulls his hands away. Snape takes a ragged breath as his heart begins to beat again; he moves without thinking and cradles Potter's face gently, forcefully, in both hands. Potter's lips part and his eyes flutter closed.

"Legilimens," Snape whispers.

Potter's breath is hot against his mouth.

Wild kissing, laughter, sultry murmurs as they stumble into Harry's flat. The young man shoves Harry against the door and trails a tongue up his chest as he pulls the shirt over his head.

Harry leans his head against the door, eyes closed, a content smile on his face. He runs his hand through golden locks as the young man drops to his knees and opens the button of Harry's jeans with his teeth. Harry grips his hair and pulls him away.

"Let me first," he whispers. The boy smiles coyly, lies back on the hardwood floor and shimmies out of his trousers.

Harry crawls up the hot, tanned skin, letting his naked chest caress the straining cock, the taut stomach. He trails his tongue across chest, collarbone, neck; licks delicately at the brilliant Cheshire smile.

"Imperio," Harry whispers. The young man stills.

Harry pulls a long knife from one of his knee-high boots. He leans close, his lips nearly touching the blond's.

"I want you to cut off your skin," Harry whispers. His eyes flutter closed and he lets out a shuddering breath. "I want to hear you scream. I want to hear you beg me to make it stop. I want you to cry for me."

Blue eyes open wide in terror.

Harry presses the perfectly balanced blade into the soft hand, presses a kiss to warm, wet lips and sits back against the wall.

The boy screams as he slides the blade under his skin.

Blood runs in rivers.


Snape pulls out: his heart pounding, breathing ragged, body trembling. He rests his forehead against Harry's, closes his eyes, and tries to still his body. He cannot begin to articulate the flood of emotion wreaking havoc in his mind.

Harry's slender arms wrap around his waist and pull him close. They stand that way until Snape's heart slows.

"So, Mister Potter," he drawls when he can think again, "have you ever killed anyone?"

"Not yet." Harry's soft lips flutter against his own. Severus runs a thumb along them.

"Then how...?"

Severus can see Harry's smouldering gaze even in the darkness.

"Come see," he mouths against Snape's skin.

It is a battery of complicated spells that reattach skin. The young man screams as bloody strips of flesh rise from the floor and find their places over exposed muscle. His screams turn to shrieks as nerves reattach and the pain signals increase exponentially.

The edges of torn skin seal, heal; the pink scars fading rapidly into nearly invisible silver lines.

Harry whispers Scourgify and Obliviate: the pools of blood vanish instantly, but trauma like this takes a long time to erase. He tips a large phial of blood replenishing potion down the young man's throat while he waits and carefully dresses the trembling, supine form. He is vaguely amused that the blond will never be able to explain the thin scars covering his body.

He sits and watches the youthful face soften as the memories slowly, slowly fade.

"Thank you for having drinks with me," Harry whispers against pale lips, once the boy is coherent.

The young man smiles, confused, as Harry helps him to his feet and shows him the door.


"My clever Gryffindor," Severus whispers, gazing into liquid emerald eyes as the first threads of dawn stretch across the sky. "I see that you are capable of studying when you want to."

One side of Harry's mouth curves up in a wickedly insolent grin.

"You just have to keep my interest," he murmurs seductively.

* * * * *


Harry is pinned to the bed, moaning and writhing as the young man from the bar expertly rubs his thigh against the bulge in Harry's jeans. Harry bites his lip as the spiky-haired brunet transfers both of his slender wrists into one strong hand while the other unbuttons his shirt and pinches hard, pink nipples.

Harry whines and bucks against the well-muscled leg.

"You're such a fucking slut!" the man exclaims with a cruel twist of his lips. Harry nods eagerly, arching up against him. "I bet it was all you could do not to bend over the hood of my car and beg me to fuck you in the parking lot."

Harry gasps and thrusts against the hard thigh."Oh god, yes! God, how I wanted to! Oh, please - please let me suck your cock, I need to suck your cock - I've wanted to all night - "

"You're nothing but a little cock-whore, aren't you?" the man sneers, flopping onto his back.

"Yes, yes, yes, please ... " Harry scrambles up on all fours, unzips the man's trousers, and licks his lips wantonly, hungrily.

"Petrificus Totalis," he whispers, glancing up at the empty doorway and grinning viciously.

"You know, I really hate arrogant sods like you," Harry snarls, his shirt sliding off pale shoulders as he kneels up. "Did you really think I would ever let a creep like you fuck my tight little arse? I only picked you because you were such a worthless piece of shit."

The young man's eyes roll wildly.

"No," Harry sneers, "you can't move. I can do whatever I like to you and no one will ever know - not even you. Afterwards you won't have any idea why you left before you shoved your pathetic little cock in my tight, hot, prize of an arse."

Severus lazily tosses Harry's invisibility cloak on the bureau. "Do you ever let them fuck you?"

"More often than not. I like having cock up my arse. Besides, healing damage that severe is a once-a-week activity, at best."

Severus can't contain an amused snort and Harry bursts out laughing.

The moment Harry whispers Finite Incantatem, the man thrashes and demands to be untied, shouting amusingly empty threats. Harry cocks his head and looks at him as though at clock mechanisms he doesn't understand.

The young man falters at Harry's frighteningly detached look and changes tactics with dizzying speed, almost keeping his voice steady as he tries to use reason and logic to effect his release.

Harry glances up at Severus, his eyes slightly unfocused; Severus smiles decadently, languorously.

One look at Severus' face and panic consumes the man. He struggles uselessly against his bindings; begs them to stop, pleads for mercy, swears he'll never tell if only they'll let him go.

Harry smiles with a facsimile of sympathy.

The man's voice cracks as tears start to fall and he desperately chokes out promises he cannot possibly fulfil.

Harry unties a bundle and unrolls it on the small metal table beside him. Firelight glints across the razor-sharp blades. The young man sees them and begins to hyperventilate, his words coming out in a strangled, wet rush.

Severus curls around Harry, nuzzles into his soft, black hair, and taps a particular knife. Harry smiles with a child-like joy Severus has never seen.

Harry raises the knife.

The man screams.

Harry drives the knife into the middle of the man's trouser leg and the cloth parts like water. The man lets out a cry of hysterical relief and redoubles his efforts: sobbing, babbling, and pleading faster than he can breathe. Harry tries to contain his smirk, but when Severus chuckles low in his ear, he does not succeed.

Harry cuts the man's clothing off slowly, inch by inch; the flat of the blade drawing red welts in long lines. He runs his fingers along bare skin as the cloth falls away, as the man grovels as best he can while tied to an autopsy table.

Severus wraps his arms around Harry's waist and Harry lets his head fall back against Severus' shoulder. Harry is floating on the man's pure terror.

Severus turns Harry around, tangles his fingers in unruly black hair, and kisses the beautiful boy fiercely.

Harry may look like an angel, but angels don't smile like this.


-end-


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[info]shadowess
2009-04-17 07:19 pm UTC (link)
*shiver* ooohhhh this was fucked up and awesome! I love Dark!harry, and Dark!Severus combined with him is very hot!
I love the line how the cigarette lite up Snape's sneer

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 03:16 pm UTC (link)
I'm so glad you enjoyed it! AND that you thought it was hot - I was going for that and I'm glad I managed it. :)

And a special thank you - I particularly liked that line, myself!

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[info]leela_cat
2009-04-17 08:23 pm UTC (link)
This was horrifying and hypnotic. I could see where the story was going, but was utterly unable to stop reading. Well done.

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 03:17 pm UTC (link)
I'm thrilled that you couldn't stop, especially since you saw it coming! Your comment is a fantastic compliment and I truly appreciate you taking the time to tell me what you thought. Thank you!

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[info]alisanne
2009-04-17 09:04 pm UTC (link)
*nods and agrees with leela*
I clicked on it (not sure why given the warnings and my usual avoidance of dark!fic) and then was sucked in. Must have been the writing. :P
This was very effective. *shivers*

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 03:19 pm UTC (link)
*blushes*
I'm so very glad you gave it a try - I always warn appropriately because I don't like to be startled myself. :)

"Effective" is a fantastic compliment - thank you!

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[info]torino10154
2009-04-17 10:08 pm UTC (link)
Holy shit. That was intense-as others have said, it was so riveting that I couldn't tear myself away. I have to say, when these two are dark together I somehow am able to enjoy this sort of dark fic. Really well done.

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 03:23 pm UTC (link)
This is really nowhere near what I had started out with, or as you can see, anywhere near the prompt. *sheepish* But these things go where they want regardless of my plans.

It's quite a compliment that you couldn't tear yourself away. Thank you. :)

(And I made you swear - yay!)

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[info]swansong33
2009-04-17 10:36 pm UTC (link)
Wow. This was seriously twisted. It's not my usual cup of tea, which is why I'm kinda surprised I enjoyed it as much as I did. This is a fic I will think about for a long time. Very nice job!

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 03:30 pm UTC (link)
Wow - I'm having a hard time crafting a response to you! I'm so pleased you gave it a shot - I always warn appropriately so readers don't have to read things they don't like and I don't have to hear about it afterward (especially because I am about as patient, tolerant, and forgiving as Snape). :)
I'm always impressed by the stories that stay with me for days, and to think that mine may have done the same for you is really honoring. Thank you for taking the time to tell me so. I'm so very glad you enjoyed something out of your comfort zone. :)

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[info]ivylady
2009-04-17 10:50 pm UTC (link)
Harry and Severus are sick and twisted, but it made for awesome reading. The build up to the violence and terror ensnared me.

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 03:33 pm UTC (link)
I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and to hear that you were ensnared? *blushes* That thrills me!

PS - I adore your icon!

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[info]oni_butterfly
2009-04-18 11:44 am UTC (link)
Wow. I'm not use to reading Dark!Harry, but I'm glad I read this one. Great story!

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 03:35 pm UTC (link)
There aren't many out there, and I honestly get quite tired of sweet romances. It's like only having ice cream to eat: ice cream is bloody fantastic, don't get me wrong, but I'm going to need some broccoli sometimes. :)
Thank you for the great compliment! I save them all and look at them again when I feel discouraged about my writing. *sheepish smile*

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[info]k8bnimble
2009-04-18 12:04 pm UTC (link)
Seriously dark Harry...I love it. Of course everything he's been through might make him have some serious "kinks". With Snape as a mentor? Delicously dark!

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 03:39 pm UTC (link)
Seriously - years of neglect and abuse, no friends for eleven years, and then bearing the burden of having to save the world for the next seven? The kid's gonna be fucked up somehow. :)

Oooh! Snape as a mentor? I may have to write some sequels!

And thank you - "delicious" is one of my favorite compliments!

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[info]winoniel
2009-04-18 02:42 pm UTC (link)
Beautifully written, seriously dark story!

I adore the imagery of the cigarette flame in the dark, with the sounds and smells of drinking. Very evocative.

Twisted!Harry and Severus, to me, are much more the expected outcome after the lives they've led. Wonderful take on the prompt!

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 03:43 pm UTC (link)
"This thing of darkness I call mine" would have been a much better prompt for what came out, but the story that matched the prompt I picked was going to take me a hell of a lot longer to write than I had time for, especially as I wrote my mate a birthday present when I was supposed to be writing this! I never can manage to do what I'm supposed to be doing at any given time. :)

Your comments are rich and detailed and I appreciate that you took the time to craft such a response. I had a hard time not starting smoking again while writing this. :)

"Evocative" is such a damn fine compliment. *blushes*

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[info]kookoolaka
2009-04-18 04:53 pm UTC (link)
Dark, twisted, and fucked up! And I loved it. Great story!

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 03:46 pm UTC (link)
Thank you so much! It's ever-so-slightly different from the endless river of sweet romance. ;)

And your icon is so TOTALLY Snape! I'm very tempted to write a drabble about him doing this and then Obliviating everyone. *evil hand rubbing*

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[info]elfwreck
2009-04-18 07:50 pm UTC (link)
*  *  *

I think my brain melted.
I love an unrepentant darkfic. This is glorious.

Snape smiles in the darkness, a smile that only dead people have seen.
...
He is vaguely amused that the blond will never be able to explain the thin scars covering his body.
...
Harry cocks his head and looks at him as though at clock mechanisms he doesn't understand.

Guh. Just... guh.
I'll be in the corner gibbering if anyone needs me.

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 03:52 pm UTC (link)
Unrepentant!Snape is my favorite. And "glorious"?
*is blushing puddle*

But thinking about it, perhaps "unrepentant" is even better! *brain short*

Guh. Just... guh.
I'll be in the corner gibbering if anyone needs me.


Seriously? This may be the best compliment I've ever received! Thank you SO MUCH!

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[info]la_dissonance
2009-04-19 12:40 am UTC (link)
I never read spoiler warnings, so the sheer, visceral plunge into darkness took me by surprise at first. Very, very, effective form though; looking back on Harry's first questions I get chills of foreboding. I loved the imagery of the cigarette in the darkness, and the vignette-like scenes. Horrifying, exhilarating, shiver-inducing dark!fic; this one really packs a punch.

Aaaaaaagh.

I love it.

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 04:03 pm UTC (link)
Mmmm... "visceral". One of my favorite words. :)
I was hoping that on a re-read, it would be obvious where the conversation was going - but not the first time! I may or may not have a accomplished it. :)
Your comment reads so professionally - I feel like yours is a review in a magazine! (It makes me happy.)
To hear you love it thrills me to no end, especially being that I'm a fairly new writer in fanfic. I hope that this isn't my Citizen Kane. :)

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[info]la_dissonance
2009-05-10 08:47 pm UTC (link)
Your comment reads so professionally

LOL! I always try to find intelligent, meaningful things to say, but I feel like the vast majority of my comments read along the lines of Heeeee! That was so awesome! Your Ron made me ROFL! or, Wow, that was hella scary. *shivers* Usually I don't manage anything near magazine reviews. xD

Here's hoping to many more great fics from you in the future! :D

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[info]slashpine
2009-04-19 09:46 pm UTC (link)
Holy moly. *slowly unwinds*

I want the part of the warnings where you say "eventual OOC" to be quite wrong. I want it to be rapid, early onset of OOC, for both Snape and Harry.

However, you make it so convincing that I'm not sure either one really goes OOC. From a Harry who could use a Crucio in DH where a Petrificus would do, who's to say what is OOC?

Thank you for investigating this dark side of Snarry so adroitly, so unromantically, so vividly and well. Or maybe not... :-) *shivers*

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 04:07 pm UTC (link)
You have no idea how much I appreciate a well-thought-out comment like yours! Thank you.

You're absolutely right! I'm starting to think that OOC in fandom has come to mean anything not happily-ever-after. ;)

I would love it if you wanted to explain the first bit about how you want the OOC to be immediate. I'm sorry that I don't understand.

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[info]snarry_fan7
2009-04-20 06:06 am UTC (link)
I really like this. So twisted and dark. Harry asking those questions makes sense now at the end of the story. Well done.~Sophia

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 04:08 pm UTC (link)
Perhaps I DID succeed! Thank you for commenting - I appreciate it so much. :)

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[info]szefi
2009-04-26 02:13 pm UTC (link)
*still shivers* well done

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 04:09 pm UTC (link)
Eeeek! I'm glad it made you shiver. :) Thank you for telling me!

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[info]elvirablue
2009-04-27 04:43 pm UTC (link)
"Crucio," they whisper in unison.

I was really enjoying their discussions and intrigued by Harry and Severus before that line. Using torture for pleasure, though…

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 04:10 pm UTC (link)
*points at explicit warnings and keeps mouth shut*

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[info]elvirablue
2009-05-13 05:11 pm UTC (link)
Oh, I always read the warnings, and it wasn’t my intention to complain about anything*. I just couldn’t think of anything to say about the latter part of your story, because it really succeeded in shocking me. :)

For one thing, I wasn’t expecting them both to enjoy torture. Secondly, the shift from hot to repulsive was sudden and surprising. And final (at least to me it was). There’s also the fact that the victims’ agony felt all too realistic. *shudders* Actually, I don’t think you used any of the usual non-con/torture clichés for which I would’ve been prepared. For what it’s worth, I appreciate the creativity and skilful writing, even though the story as such isn’t my cuppa.

*Although, and this is just my opinion, I would add a warning for dark fic and take out the bloodplay warning.

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[info]lucian
2009-05-13 11:30 pm UTC (link)
You know, I think you're absolutely right about removing the blood-play warning and putting in a dark!fic warning. :) This was the first thing I'd ever made for contribution and I wasn't absolutely sure which warnings would be right, especially in a genre which is rarely touched.

It's fantastic to hear it was surprising for you. I'm glad to not be predictable as I've found most fanfic to be, even if it wasn't something you enjoyed. :)

And thank you for taking the time to come back and explain. I really do appreciate it. :)

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[info]accioslash
2009-05-14 11:15 am UTC (link)
Let me know if you'd like me to change/update the warnings here.

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[info]lucian
2009-05-15 10:20 pm UTC (link)
Wow - do you read all the comments? :) If you wanted to change the warnings here and at LJ, that would totally rock. :)

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[info]lucian
2009-05-15 10:21 pm UTC (link)
PS- thank you!

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[info]accioslash
2009-05-15 10:24 pm UTC (link)
Done! ;D

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[info]snarryathonmod
2009-05-15 10:30 pm UTC (link)
Wow - do you read all the comments? :)

Apparently. ;D

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[info]boopsieanne
2009-05-06 08:25 pm UTC (link)
oh. that's...just... *shudders* Wow.

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[info]lucian
2009-05-10 04:12 pm UTC (link)
I hope "wow" means you liked it! I appreciate that you took the time to leave a comment. :)

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