'K, first of all, "Thee who covets man?" Get thee to an editor!
Second, is this fight meant to have taken place at the actual moment of the crucifixion, or does it take place on some other "recurring myth" plane? Because if it's the former, wouldn't Jesus suddenly breaking away from the cross and handing the Olympians their asses deviate from the whole "restrain divine power and die, then resurrect on the third day" plan? (At least there appear to be no human witnesses, which is consistent with the Gospel accounts saying that Joseph of Arimethea didn't turn up to take him down for burial until the evening.)
On the plus side, I like that "Jehovah" is referenced (in contrast to Zeus) as a God who loves humanity, as opposed to the usual popular-culture focus solely on the "RARR YHWH SMASH!" stuff from the Bible.