Ah, I gotcha - I speak in the sense of quality, as opposed to quantity. His narration here has an overwrought excess to it, not just in the sense of there's too much of it, but in the sense of the sentences themselves are awkward and overselling his story. I consider that poor writing, in any quantity... but I consider it less poor writing than awkward overselling sentences that are also glaringly OOC (even if there are more of them this time).