Ron was speechless. “But I’m supposed to ask! Aren’t I?”
Your Ron is lovely and bumbling and sweet! I do love the idea of him trying to find the right place in Hogwarts to propose to Hermione - and I was quite up for the bathroom idea, too!
You asked for constructive criticism: I noticed that you used quite a lot of epithets ("the two creature lovers", "the blonde angel" etc) instead of people's names or him/her/them. This jarred for me a little bit, because the language felt slightly forced, whereas if you'd just said "them" or "Victoire", I don't think I'd have noticed. Try it and see! I hope you don't mind me pointing this out, since you did request concrit :).