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tensor_mods (tensor_mods) wrote in tensor_ooc,

Re: Humberto Lopez
Sorry for the delay, here's another try at helping you sort out what needs fixing.

You still say in Humberto's bio that the fossil triggered his mutation, as if it has some mystical power of its own. It's okay if some outside force catalyzed his mutation, but not because it had some special or magical power. Something that caused stress, pain or fear could have caused his mutation to manifest, but not some sort of external power. No glowing mystical fossil. The reason we wanted to try and discuss this with you is that you don't seem to quite grasp that in the game world there are no mystical forces like Humberto's fossil as you have it written here.

Also, you call the Academy Xavier's Academy for the 'gifted'. While it's primarily geared towards training and educating powered humans there are also unpowered students, it's simply the Charles Francis Xavier Academy.

We also missed a minor discrepancy first time through - in his build you say he's short, but in his description you say he's tall.

We'd also like to recommend that if you truly want to play at Tensor you should really consider getting an AIM address. The vast majority of player interaction, planning and plotting occurs through AIM conversations and we frequently have game-wide chats. If you can't communicate via AIM it's very likely you'll miss out on a lot of play.