Takeo had a little longer this time to complete a few of his own homework. While he still didn't like what he was seeing every now and then when he looked over, he decided to just wait and see what she could do. Maybe she was the type of person who wrote and then when back and edited. Aaaand apparently not. The notebook was passed back to him with the five paragraphs, but he still wasn't very pleased with what he saw. He at least took time to read the whole thing before commenting though.
"This is still terrible," he finally said, scooting his chair closer so that she could watch as he marked her paper. "Your content isn't repetitive and your spelling is fine, but you don't seem to understand the rules of grammar. Half of his punctuation shouldn't even be here, a fourth is missing where it should be, and some of these others just look like squiggles to me." As he spoke, he was furiously attacking the elements in question with his pen. A pause was given until he had gone through and properly marked it all.
Then, he started marking all of her sentence fragments and underlining her transitions or lack of. "Also, you need to have complete sentence, and you need to write better transitions." Then came the big X of her sheep doodle in the middle of the page. "This shouldn't be there, too."